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Coyote de La Mancha


Anything worth doing is worth doing beautifully, and with Maximum Verbosity. (I also have a tip jar.)

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Before recorded history, there was the Age of Chaos, when Discord ruled the world.

And in this age, there were two sisters.

The elder, a unicorn, possessed unprecedented refined senses and magical might. The younger sister was a pegasus, with insight beyond her years and the strange gift of walking through shadow and dream.

One day, they would be alicorns. Ponies and other intelligent beings would debate over whether they were goddesses.

But first, before anything else, they were children.

This is their story.

First Story of the Elsequestria Continuity and the Sunset Rising Continuity.

Artwork by Sixes_and_Sevens. Please check out their excellent artwork and stories.

(Note: during the Age of Chaos, time was soft and most attempts of marking its passage were meaningless. The titles of the first four chapters refer to the sisters' approximate stages of physical development.)

This chronology continues in Luna’s Gift.

Chapters (6)
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Comments ( 46 )

I can't stop laughing at "blast me now!"

Edit: It's been nearly eight hours and I'm still laughing about stallions having tiny butts.

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I can't stop laughing at "blast me now!"

Hee! My quiet homage to the classics. :rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:

A fantastic read, in multiple senses of the word. I especially love this presentation of Discord, and of the sisters understanding the need for balance. Thank you for this.

Fascinating. I really like your take on the Discordian world.

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Many thanks. I had hoped that writing a creation tale might add something, not only to my versions of Celestia and Luna, but also to the character of their world as whole. I’m really glad you enjoyed. :twilightsmile:

Why the hay did I put off reading this for so long? This is fantastic! I absolutely love your portrayal of both the Sisters and Discord, and I can't wait to read the sequels to this magnificent work of art.

Blast my tiny butt now.

Thank you so very much! One of the great tragedies of the world is our not having enough time for reading and writing. :twilightsmile:

And I would never blast your tiny butt. Probably. :scootangel:

This is the most wonderfully !@#$ed up version of Equestria I've seen.

“Yes, of course,” answered Tai,

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Wow.

This has been incredible so far. Sibling bonding is excellent.

the madness in the creature’s smile was not comforting.

You forgot to capitalize "the"

Discord has a tiny butt. Unexpected, but welcome.

Wow. This was incredible. In so few words, you created an incredible world, a powerful sibling bond, and an entire origin story.

Wow.

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Thank you so much!

Also, thank you for pointing out the typos. Titivilus is an inescapable foe some days. :raritywink:

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Considering the time period, I will take that as high praise indeed. :rainbowlaugh::twilightsheepish:

Interesting. I'm liking the dialogue. It's not just "ye olde speak" but actually uses more florid prose as well. Makes for a more unique read.

So that got fucking dark, and then suddenly hopeful. This gives me intense Discordantly vibes.

That was adorable.

"They're dreaming about us!"

This is both cute and just so in tune with the whole setup. I'm loving this story.

This was a fantastic spin on the Sisters' origin story. Loved every minute of it.

“Blast them now! Blast them now!” raged the horned duplicate.

As soon as I saw this line, I knew what was coming next. But I still laughed, because it's just that good.

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“Thee hath greater magic,”

Thou

fuckin' good job on the rest of it, though, I'm already impressed :D

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Oh boy, seeing Luna comforting her sister is something I have needed for a long time. :D

“Thou changes.”

Changest!

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Aha! Thank you for catching that!

And I am glad you are enjoying. :twilightsmile:

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Also I was so focused on the pronoun in the previous chapter, I didn't realize it should be "Thou hast". <.<

And yes, this is great so far. :D

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That one’s actually on purpose. Without formal linguistic training or texts, language was e’en more fluid then than in Shakespeare’s time. :raritywink:

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I was not expecting comedy. Especially not like this. XD That was amazing.

‘Tis been a long time since we had something sweet.

Gotta call you out on this one! She's saying "It has", not "It is" in this case, so 'tis is incorrect.

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"Thee first" is breaking my mind. @_@ Whoof.

I love that even they don't fully understand what they're capable of.

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I'm so pleased by that final note. :D I think I learned something from this that I shall put to use soon...

I love this story for many, many reasons! ("Tiny butts" being a not insignificant one.) The fluidity of the terms and language use, while still presenting an underlying grasp of Early Modern English is a joy to me. The cosmology is wonderful, too. Redeeming Discord by discarding the pointless trickster persona and making him an embodiment of primordial chaos was a masterstroke!

Greatly looking forward to the rest of the continuity!

"horogroves" is a typo for "borogroves".

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Or for borogoves. Either way, ‘tis amended. Thank you. :twilightsmile:

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Muphry's Law strikes again! :twilightsheepish:

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Murphy and Titivilus, both old friends and writing companions. :raritywink:

What a triumph of characterization and world building. I must read more in this continuity.

The remaining wolves fled into she shadows from whence they’d come. Celestia reduced their comrades’ bodies to ash as a matter of course, and the sisters continued their journey.

Into 'she' shadows? My goodness...that's gonna make them blush so much! :raritywink:

Rather adore the back and forth banter between sisters. Poor bubbles indeed. :trollestia:

That moment, going from 'oh yay, we saved the day!' to 'oh no, now we're considered gods!' when they realize that their work has only just begun. Priceless.:ajsmug:

Have to say I liked the thought of Discord. An anchor of Pattern in an ocean of Flux, who stabilizes it and sends it out again to create more. A being that is not evil, but has little concept of what others feel beyond the desire to experience new things. Much to the pain of everyone and everything else around him, and his tiny butt. :duck:

I'm jumpin' right into the next story!

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Into 'she' shadows? My goodness...that's gonna make them blush so much!

:rainbowlaugh: Hee!

Also, thank you for catching that! :twilightsmile:

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