‘this fucking guy is more lazy than Sans, he could use a bit more back bone if you know what I mean’

Heh, Nice.

needs more clop

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Agreed

Im building up to it tho

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any idea when the next chapter will happen?

I had no desire for bloodshed or the dumping of all that delicious tea.

dimensions of the zed axis

Loves tea, pronounces z correctly. He is British!!!! Truly this character could not be better!!!

humanity was likely to kill itself off in the next hundred to two hundred years in a nuclear winter and we didn't have Vault Tech to save the figurative day.

Wait, if this guy was 82 when he 'died', and he found mlp in his teens, that means it's probably the 2080s. Does... does Elon Musk not exist in his world, is there no martian colony, or even a lunar one. Does NASA really do nothing of this type for decades. Truly, this version of earth is a bleak one.

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Yes! He is british he just doesnt remember it, lol its why he found it so humorous to start the American revolution in equestria

Yep, no space age, politicians were to stuck up their own butts and Elon Musk had only really just got a few humans onto asteroids to start mining. It was just to slow in his lifetime

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Probably within a week or two, im also working on my other story which requires remembering numbers and stats

Did some of the formatting get messed up in here?

ostrikated

ostracised

‘Wait wait, what do you mean i'm going to be soul fused!?’ I cried out to them as I moved nearly seventy feet into the air by the time I finished that sentence.

Death sighed deeply and didn't even bother answering, because exposition spoils surprises, is tedious, and is entirely unnecessary since I was just about to experience exactly what he meant in a few seconds. Damn, is my author a good writer.

I tried to struggle in their palm, not so sure I wanted this anymore.

“You girls could of died in there!!

Could have.

kerchunk[/i-ed]

Screwed up italics.

I was put into the fillies body via shock of some cybertron like room
I remember something about putting on makeup and a dress when I was really little.
I think she might have some form of amnesia,
I'm going to stay here for the rest of the week to study the ruins,
I'm going to set you in one of the carts preferably one with a tarp over it to keep you from drying up.
“You don't have a name? That's sad.” Sweetie Belle commented, “Do you want a name?” she asked looking hopeful.
Her warmth made me blush harder as I shifted ever so slightly my hind leg dangerously close to her delicate flower of maidenhood,
we were sitting in a train booth forests sliding past us gently in the window.

This story seems... familiar...

a spiritual successor to Straight To Belle.

Oh, right!

...last updated 2016.

“YEET!!” They yelled as I screamed suddenly being sucked into a cosmic vortex that ripped itself apart into the soup of everything.

Lol

“Like I haven’t heard enough skeleton puns.” I kid you not the thing just pulled out a cigarette and lit it with a purple flame from the tip of its bone fingers before reaching into his robe and pulling out a piece of parchment paper.

Must resist making pun...

“Okay taking that as a ‘Yes’ so you died, that sucks; being flesh and fuck all. Anywho so because I’m behind my workload I’m not going to give you the whole speech and take you to processing for reintegration that shit takes years for anything to happen.” He muttered to himself as he shuffled through his papers.

Seven of them, as I understand.

Ironically I was a autistic kid, high functioning of course with a bad combo of ADHD and Aspergers so a lot of things that weren’t exactly normal gave me joy. I loved cartoons, anime, the whole shebang one would expect from a autistic kid during that time as the internet has no love for real people who have the condition but I digress.

*an autistic

“YEET!!” They yelled as I screamed suddenly being sucked into a cosmic vortex that ripped itself apart into the soup of everything.

You keep using both types of “its” together in a sentence. Its is a possessive form of it, meaning belonging to it. It's is a contraction of the words it is or it has. To figure out which is correct for your sentence, just swap in “it is” and then “it has“. If the sentence makes sense with either of those substitutions, use it's. However you never use both types, one right after the other, in the same sentence.

I hope this one makes it through to completion. It's very well written and I'm enjoying it lots.

Boi. Get a damn editor. There are so many run-on sentences, comma splices, and other miscellaneous errors I couldn't even get a quarter of the way through the first chapter.

I had hoped there would be but there was barely even effort in the grand entrance of Death themselves.

Too bad the RA didn't schedule you to meet,

division don't know what the hell they are doing.” They said agitated, I felt my own anger burn at Death for simply not really caring for my eternal soul.

Why are you referring death to they?

‘Wait wait, what do you mean I'm going to be soul fused!?’

Also I’m removing most of your memories so shit gets funny.”

“Right, since this bitch is empty.” They said pulling me back into a pitcher’s wind up. (——

can't they see I'm not in the mood?

“Where… am… I?” I questioned intelligently,

0:57

“Hi…” I managed I sounded like I had too many glasses of wine,

I distinctly remember having hands but the then again maybe this hoof

What was it people said? if you believe in it hard enough it makes it real.

“I’m here, what’s going o- Sweetie!” The unicorn of books,

“Yeah… I-I’m sorry… I shouldn’t of pushed you to go in there, b-but we were really excited about getting our arch… archieolog- archosomthing cutie marks! C-Can you forgive me Sweetie?” She asked as I smiled at them both.

Yeah I kinda figured that!!

properly work as I imagine having a new pair of hands and trying to operate them.

“Okay Rarity, its it's probably for the best you, the girls, and

Its It's about a half day journey to Las Pegasus

Rarity chided as the the warning became true, I choked having tried sucking down too much water at once.

solid and reinforced cloud made a walkway sprawled between the islands of more adult themed gambling and entertainment establishments showed off spectacular theatres and neon signs that moved in their distinct mechanical way.

This doesn't mean you get out of your grounding Sweetie, same goes for you too Apple Bloom and Scootaloo.

but its it's still got the seeds to grow into something better’...

She was solid, a curious look on her adorable features, I looked at myself I was something akin to sparkling lights and data streams similar to the visual representation of the Matrix.

“I don't know, I am me.” I answered which the filly before me frowned.

“You don't have a name? That's sad.” Sweetie Belle commented, “Do you want a name?” she asked looking hopeful.

How about Sparkle Wisp!

Apple Bloom said giving me raised eyebrows. (——

“Even though I'm awesome, Fluttershy is something else isn't she.” Rainbow agreed as they thought about their friend.

my own identity too much I might go crazy.

normal as she remembered I didn't remember a lot of things.

Rarity was eating a type of small pastry that had

Edit 5/26/2019:

I was looking forward to actually to seeing the real actual

I laughed with her as we both smiled at each other.

I’m trying to keep close to the cannon for the first couple of chapters

Cutie Marks were fascinating as they were perfect colored fur patterns located right on their flanks, the color saturation suggested that it also was imprinted onto the skin underneath so even if you were to take a razor to their fur it would turn not into a fur pattern but a actual tattoo. I guess the fans calling them ass tattoos had some merit.

I thought this was proven to be wrong in the "Ponyville Confidential" where Snips and Snails has to have the fur taken off there and no cutie marks were seen

“YEET!!” They yelled as I screamed suddenly being sucked into a cosmic vortex that ripped itself apart into the soup of everything.

0:22

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Yes & the author hasn't been here since July, 2017 so IMO it will likely NEVER be finished

Sweetie Belle of course didn't need to suffer the nerve damage, I was the cause of sorts and because if (of) that I would wait until we got better before I spill the beans on what's going on with her and her ‘amnesia’. As Applejack once said ‘The truth might taste like a rotten apple, but its it's still got the seeds to grow into something better’... well she didn't say that but I bet if I told her that she would use it as a example one day.

“Ha! Flutters have (has) a entirely different opinion squirt, she thinks the world of you.” Rainbow interjected making the filly blush.

“I, uh, well I wouldn't call it my favorite but I simply love broccoli and onion soup. Mother would make it for me during the cold season, so it is....(more)…. a comfort food than anything else.” she said giving a small laugh and a light dusting of pink on her cheeks.

“Now dears, I don't know what they are teaching you in school but pegasus biology is a tad different from a unicorn or earth pony. Fish or lean meat can be apart (2 words) of their diet for protein and minerals that they can't get from normal vegetables or grasses that we eat.” Rarity says lightly informing us of Rainbow and Scootaloo’s biological needs.

If you're autistic, you might like this Unwell https://www.fimfiction.net/stories?q=unwell
Twilight has ACMS (Abstract Cutie Mark Syndrome = Pony Asperger's)

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Check the blog post he said he’s writing again in May.
https://www.fimfiction.net/blog/858416/im-not-dead-i-promise

Pretty cringy

Those little dream moments with Sweetie are beautiful.