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I have to feel bad for Number Crunch here. She was sitting there doing something good that brought her satisfaction and then Tonya walks in and basically mind controls her into making her do murder.
Given they way there’re thinking in terms of punishment, I’m wondering just how much humanity they still have in them.
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That's about as human as you can get though. Or at least, the parts of humanity transformed like Blessing claim ponies are above. It's one of those things that exposes the hypocrisy of Shimmerist philosophy. Ponies aren't inherently better than humans, and taking justice into their own hooves and murdering another pony under pretence of 'punishment' or 'greater good' shows it.
Wow Tonya is quite the dangerous mare. I hope she doesn't become a villain as she would be terrifying.
So Tonya can manipulate people too. Her true colors are coming out now. Well, it looks like we have the beginnings of a pony maffia.
Number Crunch, don't do it you are so close to turning over a new better lief.
and the way it is looking Sunset is the one who needs put down.
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Okay, I feel I need to say something about this, even if the story is complete.
Adding the Pony Rapist was a good setup for further complications last chapter. Adding a second character that's related to him in Number Crunch as an accountant is... quick, but understandable.
Breaking him out of prison the chapter after he's introduced is way too much, too fast. We needed more time with these characters to get their backstories and personalities.
The whole scene with Tonya is far too much 'telling' not enough 'showing'. She's practically an exposition pony at the moment... I'll keep reading but I hope this gets better.
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Without going into detail, this scene gets revisited more than once. There are a lot of elements at work in this story and there is a lot that seems obvious that is actually a lot more complicated that it seemed at first. This event might have happened fast, but what's all involved with it takes a long time to be sorted out.