Since Pinkie Pie was born, she had never been able to love anypony. It wasn't like she didnt like them, in fact, she was friends with just about everypony. She just isn't willing to go the extra mile to love, and wouldn't even know where to start...
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Really well written :o I really liked this though... Poor Pinkie xD
Also:
"Is it fine if I bring somepony with me?"
"No, of course not."
Uh. Shouldn't this be "Yes, of course." ?
Now that's just sad!
Um, I'm not sure what to think of it. I mean, it was a good read, but I think it was a bit too short. Could have used a few more friendzones by Pinkie's intended date targets. Still, faved.
Very nice my friend. Very nice indeed. Although short, it was bittersweet and heart-felt.
So, I'm going to give this an 8/10.
Keep up the good work friend, ~Obyvious
I need more
I'm a horrible person for laughing at Pinkie's confusion and pain, but...
At first I was like
I fell sorry for pinkie
Then hey she got a date yay
Alto kissing the stallion
Da FAQ
SOMEONE GET POKEY!!
1016768 Oh, thanks for that. <3
1016783 I actually did plan to drag out the story a bit, but then I wrote to that final line... and I just loved how nothing was explained.
Plus, the original concept was that Pinkie fell for someone who turned out to be gay, and it would be silly to have like three situations with homosexual ponies that pinkie falls for.
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^_^ No worries! It just didn't make a whole lot of sense to me so I figured "Eh, why not?"
1016948 What happened was half of my brain agreed to write "Do you mind If I bring somepony" and the other half agreed to right "Can I bring somepony?", so when I wrote the next line as "No, of course not", I wrote it as if she was replying to "Do you mind if i bring somepony."
This story has earned Magnum the critics approval.
You are awarded 5 out of 5 yay
congratulations
Poor pinkie... i'm sry.
lmao. That end was the Best. Possible. Twist!
1017199 Yay! I wasn't expecting too much of my readers to take that as forshadowing!
Well done, you're intelligent.
I like the story, and I'm looking forward to more.
"Not as far as sex, she would remain a virgin for now, but she just wanted something."
Way to go. Break the mold and give Pinkie some much needed mature depth. Though having to think of herself in a sexual label seemed to take it farther than needed. Still, it was a good wake up call.
Keep it up.
1017575 Thanks. Added that line for two reasons
1. A lot of people might not make the connection to the title if I didn't actually say that she was in fact a virgin.
2. I do not and have no intent on writing clopfiction.
Haha, I loved it. I wasn't expecting that ending, yet there it is. Nicely written.
1017734 It's comments like yours that I love the most, because I judge my writing style so much when I'm writing. Everything always seems just a bit too choppy or a bit too telly.
Thank you for complimenting HOW I write, as well as what I have in fact written.
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Oh, yeah, this makes much more sense. I just didn't look at the fic this way. Makes it much better, too. :p Thank you for explaining that.
Dammit. I can't stop laughing!!!
Totally my kinda story! 
Aww feel sorry for Pinkie, totally wanna hug her now
Dat ending
Yay biblical puns!
Can't go wrong with exploiting tragedy. I love it.
Maybe I could have chosen a better adject-OH GOD STOP BEATING ME
You've touched on a point I hadn't considered.
If Pinky is friends with everyone, how could she ever hope to find love.
Even a mare of infinite compassion is stretched too thin if she shares her love with everyone.
It's deliciously sad. + 1 like. : )
D'OH! Poor pinkie trying to pick up a fudge packer. Baaaahaha that's rich
that was just... depressing. holy crap.
WE NEED SEQUEL! NAO! MOAR!
Moar lulz plz...?
-Jorofrarie
OH COME ON!!!!
I salute you ItsDoctorWhooves for your story.
This has some of the worst flow I have ever seen. Okay, that might be an overstatement.
Let me offer you some advice: Read aloud. You'll catch a lot of problems that way.
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You never actually offered me advice, in the end.
Pointing out a flaw without actually pointing at something is entirely pointless, love.
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Well, I actually did start to do that, marking out problems as I was reading. But they grew in numbers it's easier to say all of it.
But the narrative's decent. At least, until the ending. I don't think I've ever seen a story end in medias res.
Alright, you want a few examples. Give me a second.
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"'Yeah, thanks for helping. I'm fine, how are you?'"
This just sounds awkward. Just terribly awkward. I try to imagine her saying it, and it feels like these are two separate scenes.
"'That's nice of you! I'm off to meet up with my boyfriend, Goldengrape, see ya!'"
Abrupt and awkward.
"Not as far as sex, she would remain a virgin for now, but she just wanted something."
Terrible phrasing. I doubt she's actually actively thinking she'd stay a virgin as a rule. A better way to phrase it would be thus: "She wasn't ready for that just yet."
I could go on, but I got my own stuff to work on.
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For most of my high school career, I wanted sex, but I refrained from it as a rule. I was ready for it, I just didn't want to do something like that without having a drivers licence. Just morally I didn't think it was right, even though I was completely ready for it.
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You just really wanted to be a virgin? That's the weirdest thing I've ever heard. I understand just not wanting to have sex. But wanting to stay a virgin? That's weird. As if that label is important to anyone other than religious fundamentalists.
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Wanting to remain a virgin honestly had nothing to do with sex itself. I'm a kinky bastard, sex is wondrous.
In my opinion, the lost of someones virginity was an emotional stage of growth that I wanted to share with somebody I truly loved. While having sex at like fourteen wouldn't have really had a negative effect, I wanted to wait until I was more grown up to know if I really loved the person.
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So you just wanted your first time to be with someone special. But every time after that you don't care?
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Effectively.
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...I'm sorry, I have to say this, but the only lay you wanted to be with someone special was the one you would inevitably be the worst at?
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I'm a sentimental lil' asshole, so first-time things tend to be quite important for me.
Christ. Some people just wont let an argument die...
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It died a week ago.
o.o
But it could have died after he posted his smart ass remark
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You're mimicing him.
Idea: add a new pony who has a darker personality, like a goth personality,
and then have him get hospitalized via party cannon,