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Tchernobog


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Mood Wings - Observations on Pegasus Body Language.

When Twilight Sparkle finds this book, she discovers an entirely new field of research. The secrets of pegasus wings lie before her, and she insists on making her own observations on the matter.

How?

Field research, of course.

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Comments ( 586 )

Before y'all complain: Blue Wings chapter is written. I am simply awaiting on the artist (the second, in fact. The first one was going to, but real life conspired against him to give him tons of work at his job, and he's been unable to do anything. But I've found an excellent substitute, which I think might actually look even better! :pinkiehappy:

This was an idea that was caused by someone typo-ing "moodswing". The term "moodwing" seemed an obvious pegasus-term, and I let things go from there.

I want to thank Macdjord, my prereader, who at this point is practically a co-author. Certainly a brainstormer extraordinaire! :moustache:

edit:
The cover art for this is... somewhat misleading. Contains appledash, but isn't the main focus.

If anyone feels up to the task of making a better cover art... please do? :rainbowkiss:

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Looks interesting, *klicks read later* :rainbowkiss:

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Hahaha Just read the story! genius *claps*
Props to you Tchern! I loved the humor in this story :rainbowkiss:

(One thing though, I'm kinda against the AppleDash thing, but that's more something personal :twilightsheepish:)

What did Princess Luna do?

And yes, I found this quite great. Quite a lot of thought had to have gone into this, and it's obvious.
Just like Twilight, too, to not understand the implications of what she's doing.

Ok, gave it a read. Pretty good, believable, light-hearted and amusing. Although the whole 'Secret to everyone' thing is a bit off, it doesn't detract from the short story as it is. :twilightsmile:

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Well, not so much "secret to everyone" as "not common knowledge to non-pegasi" :derpytongue2:

Love it, but I note the story isn't marked as "complete..."

Hoping that means there's going to be more! The story is well written, it's almost like an episode in and of itself (if HUB could get away with broadcasting it). And that bit at the end almost had me in stitches :rainbowlaugh:

You're getting a thumbs up and an addition to my favorites list!

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Woops! It is complete, actually! I gotta change that :x

Soooo Twilight, lol. Guess it's her horn that keeps giving her away. And yay for Derpy/Ditzy! :derpyderp1:

Derpy is adorable in this story.

I think a few things from this have wormed their way into my headcanon...

I really enjoyed this. You obviously put a lot of thought and creativity into this story and it shows. I wonder how Fluttershy is going to be around Twilight since the librarian didn't realize she'd been noticed. You really hit the nail on the head for Twilight's adorkableness with this. With heaps of physical and emotional comedy, tossed with interesting world building, and you made a very interesting and amusing fic. The end punchline was pretty good, but after the earlier revelation, it didn't feel like it had as much impact.

Anywho, well done and thanks for sharing this with us! :yay:

tchero is bestest and most amazingness author:yay:

That. Was. Awesome. :yay:

Seriously, this was an amazing story! I had to pause my reading a few times, since I was laughing too hard to focus. :rainbowlaugh: Not only was the story hilarious and well-written, but you it's clear you put a whole lot of thought and effort into it. The Mood Wings portions read like an actual scholarly work, and were very detailed and analytical. Overall, not only was this story awesome, but it was very impressive, and an excellent testament to your ability as a writer and a storyteller! Good job, dude! :pinkiehappy:

Also, I now have to pay more attention when writing/describing pegasi characters, and try to mention their wing-language as much as I do their body-language. Perhaps I should go back and tweak a few of my prior works, as well. Hmmm. :trixieshiftright:

This totally deserves a sequel... c'mon you can do eet!:pinkiehappy:

I really liked this story and there were much lols to be had. I also like the inclusion of Big McLargeHooves Roid Rage and Derpy's save. And I loved the fact that Rainbow lept to the right conclusion while still being completely wrong.

you get 15 :moustache:'s out of 5

:Edit: also if you write a sequel I want Twi to bring what ever she just read to Celestia's attention, if only to see 'Tia be all nonchalant about it.

A well written story! Your characterization was excellent, and I especially liked how you used Appledash for a narrative purpose as opposed to just throwing them together. Now, if you'll excuse me, my inner fanboy has something to say: MOAR DERPY/TWILIGHT PLOX:rainbowkiss:

Twilight really needs to learn to finish the body of existing research before attempting to do her own studies:facehoof:

Hmm...

Twerpy? Nah.
Derkle? ...NO.
Sparky? Eeeeehhhh....
Delight. :pinkiehappy:

Love it. Have a mustache :moustache:. Although now I'm curious: what DID Luna do? Any hints?

This was an incredible one-off. I laughed so hard during 'Chapter 11: Standing at Attention - Arousal' and at the end with Celestia and Luna! Good job!

That was HILARIOUS!! Not only was it a good story, but for a good few minutes I just couldn't stop laughing. javascript:smilie(':rainbowlaugh:');
You get a 2 thumbs up

Haha. Well, that was a fun read indeed. I will have to re read it again for the enjoyment of it. Even though I am a Extremist Twidash fan. The format and characterizations were excellent. 'Mood Wings' was a great plot device. I kinda wish for a sequel.

ahahaha very good oneshot ! i love it !

This was a wonderful interlude between chapters of Blue Wings and a wonderful story just to be read by itself. The ending though with Celestia and Luna though has me curious as to what Celestia has to teach about dating. Could it be a hint of another one shot/story in the same vein as Mood Wings?

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Not particularly. It just seems like the type of reaction Celestia might have :rainbowlaugh:

>Implied DerpLight
>Complete story
>No sequel

ihateyou

I learn so much from these stories.:twilightsmile:

I was quite entertained. :)

Awesome story! It was funny and sweet, and your writing of the "technical" text was still entertaining (something a lot of authors have trouble with.) Great job!

Very funny though Derpy and Twilight are an odd Pairing but still funny. :rainbowlaugh:

This was very good. And when i finally cam to the end I saw your username and my mind went in this direction "So that's why it was so good!" :twilightsmile::derpytongue2:

An excellent story. Very funny, and everyone stayed well in character.

This is fucking awesome!
:yay:

Can't believe it took me 2 hours to plow through those 9000 words when proofreading it for you
I'll restate my earlier statement, I like the story :pinkiehappy:

Holy shit that was funny. Right after the interaction with Soarin, I figured it out. Oh goodness, my cheeks ache from smiling and laughing so hard. And it's a good thing Fluttershy didn't realize Twi was looking at her wings. She would have had a conniption, bleated like a goat, and fallen over. And I loved the interaction with Derpy, that just seems like it'd go down the path of really sweet.

I was so interested.
I loved it.
Until I reached AppleDash.

WHY CAN I NOT FIND A SINGLE STRAIGHT FIC.
Never once.
EVER.

Except for platinum crown, but that sucked.

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Because no stallion in FIM is as interesting as the mane 6! :ajsmug::yay::pinkiehappy::rainbowkiss::twilightsmile::raritystarry:

Nice, would like a sequel.

Oh, please, PLEASE, write a sequel to this story. You've successfully left enough unsaid to be able to do so rather easily! I loved this story. Please don't let it end there!!!:twilightsmile::derpytongue2:

Really great story. I expected no less from you.

Congratulations on the feature box.

I would suggest submitting it to EqD, if you haven't already, as I don't think I've ever read something like this before with Twilight. Hell, I think it's worthy of a feature there, but then again, I'm not exactly unbiased.

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I
WILL
KILL
YOU
IN
YOUR
SLEEP...

And then spawn kill you multiple times...

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It's already been submitted, there's probably a fairly lengthy queue. I'm just shocked I've gotten feature box even without it!

awesome. this is so like twilight:twilightsmile::twilightsheepish::twilightoops:

So is there going to be a sequel or is this a one shot?

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As far as I'm concerned, I see this more as a one shot. Much more focus on the wings in a continuation would be somewhat too heavy handed, I think.

But if I can think of a good storyline for a sequel... well, it's anyone's guess.:pinkiecrazy::pinkiecrazy:

Forget, moon sun and stars, You should start reading "Muffin Marvel, the guide to all things Muffin!" :derpytongue2:

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I'm unashamedly stealing some of the expressions for my head-canon. With your permission? :fluttershysad: please?

...I can? :pinkiegasp:

WOOHOO!!! :pinkiehappy:

Oh good heavens! I'm laughing so hard my sides are hurting!:rainbowlaugh::rainbowlaugh:
And FYI? I have a secret love of Derpy/Twi pairings:derpytongue2::twilightsmile:

Please! Please say there will be a sequal!
This is too good a lead-in to a good TwiDerp possibility!

I loved this. Absolutely loved it. The book chapters were really well-written and interesting, the story was funny, and Derpy was so cute. I'd love to see a sequel that explores "DeLight."

Also, would you mind if I used some of the ideas in this fic in my own stories? The wing language you've detailed could be used as a guide for other writers.

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