"I survived because the fire inside burned brighter than the fire around me. I fell down into that dark chasm, but the flame burned on and on." -- Joshua Graham
Twilight Sparkle was born with what some might call an unquenchable curiosity. Always she has had a driving need to know the answers to everything in the world around her. Why do the birds sing, what makes the sun rise... What happens to us when we die.
Featured? That can't be right.
Written for The Writeoff
Coverart By Zaid ValRoa
Storyart By Chinchillax
The first standalone story I've done on FiMFiction, any help or criticism is appreciated.
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Was fine. Up until the end and Twilight's kid. You have much to explain with all that.
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Thanks. Did that seem to come out of left field? I thought I did a nice little setup for it. I guess it was a lot to have come at the end.
I like the idea. :) I have my own interpretation of Twilight's child in my story, but it's a pretty boring young alicorn filly XD
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Thanks for the comment. The idea of her child is one of my favorite things in the story. I felt it grounded her back in reality. Hard to be swept up in your mind when you have a kid to look after.
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You're welcome. ^^ That's so true, it's a great reflection of raising a child in real life. 😄
My interpretation of her kid only appears 6 years after the events of my story, and is crowned as the next Princess very early in her youth. XD
Filly.
There were a couple of punctuation errors, but nothing too distracting.
It was nice reading this again. I wish you the best on the future, and I hope you keep improving, pal.
Welp, that was the entire reason why I came here. The story was alright.
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Thanks a ton for everything. I knew that I might have put a Philly in there somewhere. I might just duble-down and say "Yes, I Did mean her child is a cheese sandwich!"
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Thanks for the read
I have had that same thought tumble around my head. had the thought of "what would happen if I did this or that?" No true intent behind it just a simple curiousity of "What if?"
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Now imagine if the idle curiosity was like a burning itch. Then you'd know what I was aiming for with Twilight. I wanted to make it close to OCD as I could without implying that it was some kind of force beyond her control.
Oh, and thanks for the comment
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Hello, this is very amazing fic. Finding true nature, and the purpose of the life we lived on. Me as well had the same question once of 'why' we lived, and all that. And I personally like the last part as well, one question though... Is Spike the father?
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Apologize if I clearly misunderstood, but I am very curious and wanted a clear answer... (But if you don't really want to answer, its quite alright. I can figure it out with my own imagination
I can ignore the small errors, otherwise its all good. Good Job. Man now i want to write more fic this good
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lol me to
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It did come out of nowhere. For me at least. Or I didn't catch the bits that lead up to it.
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The setup for Twilight's child was the stallion she had a tryst with. At one point, I was going to give him a little bit of backstory, as far in as he was going to be someone she met at a book convention. But I decided against putting it in the story for the same reason I didn't go into detail about what the foal looks like. This story is about the introspection of Twilight's mind, the other players are there to support that.
And thank you for reading and commenting
Nice one and it hit close to home, as well, with her contemplating about the great beyond (or lack thereof), I mean.
Very nicely done
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Thanks for the comment. With this story I started with the idea of Twilight standing at the edge of a cliff and contemplating weather to jump off. The reason behind why she wanted to in the first place only came to me once I had written the first paragraph. The rest came after.
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So you used the ‘pantser’ approach, got it
The only reason I find a little disturbing, about the story is the child part – it seems a bit odd that she would have contemplated something like that when her kid is still a filly, and she has responsibilities. Then again, she said she might take the ‘trip’ one day… so perhaps she never really intended to do it right then.
Curiosity or not, self-termination, while the child is young, is a terrible idea.