Confrontation
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Trixies tower of blocks collapsed, scattering the blocks all over the floor. Trixie giggled a bit to herself. This tower was a lot taller than the other ones she had managed to make. She started collecting the blocks, being careful to grab each and every one of them. Twilight would not be happy otherwise, and Trixie really wanted to make her owner happy. She was the one who allowed her to use the blocks, after all.
Trixie had trouble grasping things, as a unicorn, her fine motor skills for grasping things were not well developed. Consequently, she kicked all the blocks to the same general pile and then used her mouth to place them all into its plastic container. The container had three multicolored balloons on it, which Twilight told her meant it was from Pinkie Pie. Pinkie had arrived with many gifts for Trixie, claiming that it was for the missed birthdays. Trixie didn’t know her own birthday but was ecstatic to receive gifts. Twilight informed the filly that she could have one gift, but the rest would stay in the closet until behavior improved.
Trixie was disappointed, but she found her disappointment overshadowed by the sheer joy she felt to receive even a single, small gift. Trixie was finishing up cleaning the blocks when Twilights hoofsteps were heard not far from the doorway. She hurried to get the last, rectangular, block into its spot but it slipped out of her mouth and onto the ground. By the time she grasped it in her mouth once again Twilight was already standing in the doorway glaring at the filly with a block in her muzzle. She sighed and put a hoof to her head before speaking.
“I told you to clean those up a while ago, Trixie. Why isn't it done?” said Twilight.
“I was having lotsa fun, Mistress, I… I’m sorry.” apologized Trixie, shuffling her hooves nervously. Twilight approached and lit up her horn, Trixie immediately flinched at the pale lavender light, but Twilight only used it to levitate the block into its box and lift Trixie. She looked into Trixies eyes and spoke slowly.
“You're coming with me to the pony pet play date, and I expect you to be on your best behavior, is that understood?”
Trixie nodded quickly, after which she put the filly down onto the floor. Trixies hooves were splayed out in fear, she wasn't used to floating in midair, but she sat on her haunches as taught as soon as she touched the floor.
“Since you're still having trouble following directions, im gonna make it easier for you.” said Twilight, her magic grabbing hold of the collar on Trixies neck. Trixie let out a small squeak as soon as she felt her throat compress, afraid that she might be trying to choke her again.
“Im sorry Mistress” croaked Trixie, gagging in between her sentence. “What did I do…?” Trixie kept struggling, using her forelegs to try to loosen the collar.
“Oh hold still, this won't take much longer!” shouted Twilight, deep in concentration weaving the spell into the small crystal charm on the collar. She had to hold the crystal away from Trixies throat or there could be difficulties with the spell. Removing the collar would probably be safer but Twilight decided it wasn't worth the effort.
Finally Trixies collar was released and Trixie took deep breaths. She held a hoof to her head and the other on her throat, catching her breath. After a bit Trixie looked back to her owner who was waiting on the filly to relax.
“You're so dramatic, Trixie! It was a simple sudo remote spell, with a bit of electron manipulation sprinkled in.” said Twilight smugly. Trixie used to be rather magically talented, Twilight was proud of taking that from her.
Trixie tilted her head slightly and tried to make sense of what Twilight had just said, before giving up. She chose to stay silent hoping that wouldn't make Twilight as mad as pretending to understand somepony as powerful and intelligent as her. She focused on examining the surface of the floorboards, hoping Twilight would speak soon.
“Now, let's test it! Trixie speak!” commanded Twilight, quite excited to test out the new crystal charm.
“Umm… What do I say, Miss?” asked Trixie, fear apparent in her voice. Twilight didn't like it when Trixie asked questions.
“Good pet!” said Twilight clapping her hooves, “Trixie dance! ”
Trixie knew this command, Twilight had asked her to do it many times before. The “dance” involved hopping on her back hooves while wiggling her forehooves. It was horribly humiliating, but Trixie knew that failing to obey would mean more timeout. She got up onto her four legs and pushed herself onto her rear legs. She wavered a bit but managed to get solid footing. As Trixie started her little dance, Twilight subtly nudged her left hoof a bit, throwing the little filly onto her back and knocking the air out of her.
“Tsk, tsk, Trixie. It's time to test my spell, are you ready?” Asked Twilight, a mischievous grin present on her face.
“N-not yet Mistress, let me get u-” Trixie said, rolling over onto her side before being interrupted when her crystal activated. It glowed a sharp yellow before it sent an electric shock down the straps of the collar. Trixie wasn't expecting a shock of this intensity and her body refused to obey her. She squeaked and braced herself as best she could, but it was over as fast as it had started.
“Oww..” moaned Trixie, putting a hoof to her neck where the color sat. In reality her whole body hurt but she didn't know what to clutch, her neck being the most obvious choice in her mind. She rolled over onto her side, resting for a bit. All the while Twilight was analyzing the spell on the crystal, the shock should have lasted much longer… She looked at the clock and realized it was time to go.
“Fascinating crystal, don't you think Trixie? Maud helped me pick it out last time she came to visit Pinkie!” cheered Twilight, quite proud of imbuing a little crystal with remote activation and energy discharge spells.
“Y-yes Mistress, very fac…. Fascu..” mumbled Trixie, trying to prevent more punishment for disagreeing with her. Twilight lost her patience almost immediately, mispronunciation like that was worth at least 20 minutes of time out. There was no time though, she had to be there on time for things to go according to plan. She turned to exit the room and spoke.
“It’s time to go, get your leash” said Twilight coldly.
Trixie turned onto her limbs, still tingly from the shock. She trotted to the wall where her owners tools were, and saw the box of blocks nearby. They were sitting under a whip that Twilight called Bellatrix. Twilight really liked that whip, it was enchanted with the ability to cause massive cuts, but heal them with no scars afterward. The pain stayed, though, Trixie knew. She shook the memory from her head and focused on the blocks.
“Mistress can I take the blocks..?” asked Trixie demurely, avoiding eye contact. Twilight was already in the hallway, levitating some things into a cart.
“Fine, but hurry up! The girls are waiting. ” responded Twilight. Trixie was quite excited, maybe the other pets would want to play with her blocks too. Trixie had never met another pet, but today was the day.
Of course, none of those pets have a Princess of Equestria as their owner. Thought Trixie smugly.
Trixie quickly gripped the leash in her mouth and balanced the box of blocks on her back. She trotted quickly to catch up to Twilight who was near the main castle doors, loading things onto a cart with her magic. Trixie waited patiently next to the cart, the leash hanging out of her mouth.
“Hmm.. juice… cookies… That should be everything! Trixie! Stand right here.” said Twilight, pointing at a spot in front of the cart and in between the hitches. Trixie nodded silently and moved. As she was getting into place Twilight took the leash from Trixies mouth with a bit of magic and attached it to her collar, also putting the box of blocks into the cart. Trixie shivered at the feeling of Twilights magic on her neck, it felt cold and buzzy. Like a swarm of bees was caressing her neck, pulling on the symbol of her submission. The feeling spread all around her barrel as Twilight attached the metal harness, locking the little filly to the cart.
“See you later, Spike. We’re off to see the girls!” hollered Twilight across the castle before stepping through the doorway. Trixie tried to follow, the leash being pulled taut, but the cart was heavy in comparison to her small body. She dug her hooves into the crystal floor as hard as she could, managing to get the cart moving very slowly.
“Hurry up Trixie, you really want me to use your collars new feature?” said Twilight, warming the crystal to coax the filly. Trixie felt it, and pulled the cart enough to build some momentum.
“N-no Mistress.. Argh.. i’m doing it, see?” grunted Trixie, not too keen on the idea of feeling the shock all over again. With the momentum she was able to keep it going, the uneven soil proving to be a much bigger challenge than the smooth crystal. Despite this she put in her best effort, fueled by the threat of punishment. Shocks were not the only thing Twilight would administer, she had no shortage of tools.
Twilight trotted a bit ahead of the filly, the handle of the leash floating near her shoulder. Trixie did her best to keep up, and Twilight seemed satisfied by the effort. She took a moment to think about where exactly they were. It was the PPPD, but it was also going to be most of the girls first opportunity to see the new Trixie. The better Trixie, Twilight told herself. Some of them might not agree though, she knew that already. She’d already had a long discussion with her friends the day that Pinkie saw her new pet, and it didn’t go too well. Twilight enjoyed having control of each and every situation, which was why she was so angry with the little filly in her care. Despite having no control, even of her own body, Trixie was able to snatch all of Twilight's control over the narrative.
“C-can… can we take a break, Miss?” said Trixie, her breaths haggard and labored Twilight turned to look at the filly, examining the sad state of her pet. Her hooves were covered in soil, and her whole body was drenched with sweat. She was panting, and looking longingly at her owner, hoping for a miracle. Twilight chuckled slightly and gave a warm smile, approaching the filly and conjuring a small towel. She wiped the fillys face softly, taking care not to press too hard. Trixie melted under the warm ministrations of her owner, happily surprised that she had switched behaviors so quickly. She grinned up at Twilight, still catching her breath, but ready to thank her.
“Th—”
“Absolutely not. Slow down again and it'll be 2 days with no food,” hissed Twilight coldly, turning on her heels and trotting on.
Trixie was shocked, even despite the gem on her collar not going off. She took a deep breath and continued on, she was going to march until she collapsed. Trixie hadn't eaten a full meal in weeks. She didn't have a solid grasp on numbers but she knew it had been many nights. When Twilight was feeling generous the little doggy bowl was filled only halfway with something Twilight called Woofer Chow as well as few oats. Trixie loved hunting down each and every oat and leaving it for the end. It was like a little treat for finishing her food. Her stomach grumbled, aching almost as much as her hooves after such a trek pulling this cart. Twilight wasn't as generous recently, Trixie could still see the bottom of the bowl in between the kibbles. Not a single oat either, Trixie checked thoroughly before each meal and turned up empty hooved.
“I'm getting tired of speaking to you Trixie, hurry up!” growled Twilight, her nerves overtaking her. They were very close to the park, she wasn't totally sure what to expect.
“Yes Mistress!” gasped Trixie in between breaths, hoping desperately that they were close to their destination. Her mind was too preoccupied with working through the fatigue of pulling the cart to think about where they were going. She had considered it before they left the castle, and was excited to meet other pets like her. Despite this she didn't know whether they would be very nice, but there was only one way to find out. She would find out soon, she noticed as the small group of trees lining the path was starting to thin out. Off to the left Trixie could see Pinkie Pie along with some other ponies sitting on a picnic blanket.
“Hey girls!” yelled Twilight, waving a hoof to the collection of ponies, who waved back. Trixie did not recognize any of them but she was glad to finally be at the park. She could feel her legs shaking from the exertion.
“No speaking unless spoken to, Trixie. Don’t ruin this,” whispered Twilight before hitting Trixie with a small spell. It dried her out and made her look less ragged. Trixie felt her fur shift slightly and nodded to Twilight. She wasn't sure what to expect, but keeping quiet seemed like the easiest way to prevent herself from doing something stupid. Trixie knew she was stupid, Twilight reminded her about that fact a lot. Trixie pulled the cart the last little bit without much trouble, it was the home stretch. Her foalish excitement overpowered her nervousness, allowing her the bit of bravery she needed. She was now face to face with many new ponies, if she could count she’d know there were 5. They all seemed to be looking at her, emotions ranging from intense fascination to shivering fear to what seemed to be concern. The concerned one spoke up, her voice was very beautiful Trixie noticed.
“Why, Ah think that carts a bit big for you little filly. Ya need some help?” she said in a wonderful accent that seemed to tickle Trixies ears. She got up off of the picnic blanket and started walking towards Trixie but did not reach the cart before Twilight spoke up.
“No, no. She's okay, the cart is enchanted to be very light. Please bring it over here and I’ll unhitch you Trixie.” she said, pointing to the ground near the blanket. Trixie started moving, the cart following with almost no effort at all, showing the other ponies that Twilight was telling the truth.
“Well, that's awful fancy and all but why not just pull it yourself Twilight?” asked an orange pony, leering at Twilight.
“It builds character! At least, that’s what Spitfire keeps telling me,” said another pony dismissively. She was a pegasus with a rainbow mane, floating above the cart and digging through its contents. “Hey, did you bring the cider or not, Twilight?!” Trixie was quite intimidated by the floating pony, she had never met a pegasus in real life. Or other ponies for that matter, other than Miss Pinkie Pie.
“Nevermind the cider, darling, were here to meet Trixie.” said the fascinated pony, her purple curls bouncing as she spoke. She got to her hooves and approached Trixie, the straps falling off of Trixies barrel. She stopped a bit away and gestured for Trixie to come closer. Twilight watched closely, hoping Trixie would behave. Trixie froze, she didn't want to disobey, but she was terrified. What if the unicorn was tricking her?
Twilight had done it before, she offered a treat but tased her when she wasn't looking. Trixie decided the punishment would be much worse than whatever this nice looking Unicorn could do with no tools in her hooves. She walked forward, her head bowed in submission. She flinched when she felt a hoof on her chin, raising her head to look into the Unicorns eyes before removing her hoof.
“Hello there, Trixie. Do you know my name?” asked the pony softly, in a kind tone. Trixie shook her head, her hooves were shaking with nervousness.
I don’t know… I dont know!! D-did Twilight teach me her name? Am I supposed to know? I just got here and I already messed up...! Mistress is gonna put me in time out forever.
“She doesnt know us Twilight? Does she have any memory of any of us?” asked Rarity, her voice neutral but demanding.
“Nope, none at all.” proclaimed Twilight, her hooves crossed and eyes closed with pride. “Memory magic is very intricate Rarity, but with a bit of research and practice I pulled it off.”
“What did you practice on?” said Pinkie, tapping on Trixies head softly. Trixie enjoyed it, it was soothing somehow.
“Frogs, it took a few tries since I was having trouble preventing the Myst Catalyst from damaging the Amygdala.” said Twilight while helping Rainbow unload the things from the cart.
“You were testing on animals?!” screamed the yellow pegasus hiding behind the pony with the cool accent. It could barely be called a scream, thought Trixie, it was more like a harsh whisper.
“Nothing to worry about Fluttershy, it was harmless and I fixed them before I put them back.” said Twilight, waving a hoof towards Fluttershy.
“That's probably why Fernando kept asking Frank out on a date! Twilights spells are turning the frogs gay...” whispered Fluttershy to nopony in particular. Applejack gave Fluttershy a weird look before speaking up, concern evident in her voice.
“Let’s not talk about this here filly like she's not sitting right there.” she said, glaring at the mares. Twilight looked unconcerned, but relented nonetheless.
“Sure, where are the other pets then? She can go play with them.” asked Twilight, removing the leash from Trixies collar.
“They’re over by the river but are ya sure about that Twilight?” questioned Applejack gesturing to a river just past a hill.
“Oh, don't worry! Trixie wont run away, will you?” said Twilight, booping Trixie. Trixie flinched harshly at seeing Twilight's hoof, but then nodded in fear. The rest of the girls were shooting Twilight a weird look, the way she flinched bothering them. Even Rainbow stopped chugging her cider to see what had gotten into her. Trixie hesitantly walked away from the cart before looking back at Twilight.
“Shoo, go find the others!” said Twilight, a reassuring smile on her face. Trixie nodded and trotted towards the hill, even though she didn't know what she was looking for. Twilight looked back to her friends, one of them would know something was up. She made eye contact with AJ and confirmed this. Trixie would pay for this, but it was as good a time as any to try to explain her cruelty.
“So….” said Twilight, a nervous smile on her face as she sat down onto the picnic blanket.
“Is flinching a side effect of this memory spell, Twi?” inquired Applejack, pointing an accusatory hoof at the trotting filly.
“No. She’s just nervous about meeting new ponies, is all!” answered Twilight, her resolve hardening as everything was back on track. Her plan could continue without AJs favor. She used her magic to grab one of the sandwiches that Fluttershy always brings.
“Well… she was very quiet, Applejack… I would be nervous too.” spoke up Fluttershy, hiding behind her mane as she spoke. She could tell AJ was rather angry. Applejack sighed, calming herself for a second.
“Fine, fine. Tell us about Trixie, Twi.” said AJ, glaring at Twilight still. Twilight perked up as soon as she heard, teleporting a book from the cart into existence and clapping her hooves softly. The rest of the ponies gathered around Twilight, seemingly fascinated with hearing more about Trixie.
“Well, as you girls know I've had Trixie for about 2 weeks already, and i've been raising her in a rather unconventional way.” said Twilight, using her horn to conjure a display for the girls to watch as she spoke. On it was displayed a mare silhouette which shrunk to the size of a filly.
“What I didn’t tell you all is that I've been utilizing rather harsh training methods, I can't say that it's been 100% kind, but I'm pretty sure it's working.”
“N-not kind? What are you doing to Trixie?” said Fluttershy, her voice shaking. Everypony else nodded in agreement, slightly shocked at this.
“Nothing too bad, I've been of course adopting some military style reformation. Rainbow can attest to its effectiveness, right?” said Twilight, gesturing toward Rainbow as she finished her sandwich. Rainbow immediately flapped her wings and saluted.
“Ma’am, yes, Ma’am!” chanted Rainbow, “It sure helped me!” She used to be a loose cannon but now... she's still kind of a loose cannon, so maybe she's a work in progress. The display switched to the silhouette following commands and mopping floors.
“With a little discipline, Trixie can become a productive member of society! Of course, it's not easy disciplining her. The real Trixie shines through occasionally, so I need to nip it in the bud. A little... corporal punishment… as some might put it.” said Twilight, her tone trailing off at the end.
“You hit her?!” growled Applejack, glaring into Twilight's eyes. Twilight was unphased, she gave AJ an angry look before continuing.
“Yes, yes I did. I’ll do it again too, if it's necessary. You saw how Trixie harnessed the alicorn amulet, you know what she is capable of.” said Twilight, glaring right back at Applejack. The others were watching in awe, none of them moving to stop the altercation. All of them except Pinkie, but she wasn't clear of all hostility towards Twilight.
“What gives you the right to hit a defenseless little foal, Twilight?! That's not nice.” shouted Pinkie, a quiet, calm anger on her face. Quiet and calm were not Pinkies usual demeanor, and it showed.
“Well I'm not doing it for fun, Pinkie. It's a necessary evil, or else a far more dangerous evil might arise!” responded Twilight, her resolve softening. Pinkie didn't buy it, and pushed harder.
“AHA! So you admit you are evil!” said Pinkie, pointing an accusatory hoof at Twilight. Everypony sighed, Twilight putting a hoof to her forehead.
“Anyway, I dont think its right for ya to be disciplining Trixie like that, Twi.” said Applejack, “Raising a filly isn't somethin’ ya can brute force. It takes patience, hurtin’ somepony isnt gonna do anything but make them scared of ya.”
Twilight wavered for a second, before putting her hoof down and making eye contact with Applejack, determination fueling her.
“You don’t understand, Applejack, you couldn't possibly. Trixie was just getting started, you can't imagine what she had planned for Ponyville. The amulet was corrupting her mind slowly, but its an exponential corruption. Alicorn level magic, mixed with the pure evil that that amulet exudes, Trixies actions would reach war crime very quickly. Eventually… eventually you all might have died. I… don’t know what I would have done without you girls… I….” cried Twilight, her voice breaking at the end, tears filling her eyes. Rarity closed the gap between them and embraced her as Twilight devolved into sobs.
“Its okay darling, we're all still here, we're not going anywhere.” cooed Rarity, stroking Twilights mane in an effort to comfort her. Rainbow ambled up to the two and joined the hug before it broke. Pinkie, Fluttershy, and Applejack in various states of apprehension. Twilight lifted her tear soaked face off of Rarity's shoulder and looked at them, hurt that they didn't join the group hug. Applejack spoke up first.
“We’ll be fine, Twilight. Were not in any danger right now, that filly that you're ‘raising’ is.” said Applejack, making air quotes with her hooves. Rarity let out a frustrated sigh.
“Now's not the time Applejack can't you see-” said Rarity before being interrupted by an angry Pinkie.
“Now is totally the time! Twilight’s raising a filly right now.” Pinkie pounded her hoof on the floor, emphasizing her point. Rainbow shifted to face Pinkie directly and make eye contact.
“Look, Trixie was an evil mare, willing to enslave an entire town! Like Twilight said, we don't know what she may have done if she had the amulet any longer. If a bit of simple discipline is all we need to prevent that, then I say Twilight should do it.” argued Rainbow, concern apparent in her voice. Pinkie glanced at Applejack, who was surprisingly angry, she looked ready to start a screaming match. Despite this, she wasn't the one to speak up next.
“That's not Trixie.” hissed Fluttershy, who up to this point was silently hiding behind Applejack but was now standing proudly front and center, “ Trixie was a misguided, corrupted mare. This is an innocent little filly who knows nothing. She doesn't deserve this, Twilight, and you know it!” Fluttershy yelled, this injustice too much for her heart. She couldn't always stand up for herself, but standing up for a little foal was a lot easier. Before anypony could react, a high pitched scream came from the hill. They could see Trixie running as fast as her little hooves could carry her, screaming in terror all the while. Chasing her was Winona, with angel riding on her back. Trixie reached the bottom of the hill and leaped towards Twilight, hiding under her. Angel was still riding Winona and laughing maniacally as she ran in circles.
“They were chasing me, please make them stop Ms. Twilight!” begged Trixie, hugging Twilights right foreleg as she shook. Twilight stood there nervously for a moment, before Angel jumped off of Winona and splayed himself on the grass in laughter. Twilight knew this was a good opportunity to show some kindness in front of the others.
“Don't worry, they wont hurt you, they're just playing.” said Twilight as she picked the filly up with a hoof. Fluttershy and Applejack grabbed their pets as everyone laughed, Trixies sprint was quite cute. The other three animals followed closely behind, and with that the argument was interrupted. The fire in Fluttershy burnt out, and everyone had expressed their opinions. It wouldn't be productive to talk about Trixies past with her being present.
“Ah think I’ll be taking my leave everypony.” said Applejack tilting her hat and pulling on Winona's leash.
“Yes, this seems like a good time to end the play date, wouldn't you agree Twilight?” chimed Rarity. The mare nodded and they started packing everything up. In no time at all, Rarity, Rainbow, and Twilight headed towards town. AJ, Fluttershy and Pinkie instead set off towards Sweet Apple Acres.
Hi! Thank you for reading! I've had a lot of comments and theorizing, its been a blast. I hope you all are enjoying my story so far, and I hope to continue adding to this fic until I'm done.
Big thank you to LewdChapter for editing this, hes the best!
Please leave me a comment if you think theres something I can do to improve, thank you!! 
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What made you think that?
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Oh, well yeah they disapprove but kidnapping isn’t something they’re gonna do.
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In earlier chapters it’s explained that Twilight is 100% allowed to do with Trixie as she pleases. Nopony can do anything to stop her, as a princess it’s her right.
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Maybe! In my mind, due to the age of this law and how famous and wealthy the assistants became over time, it would be hard to change the law. In other words, the law is super old and Celestia has used it for her own concubines, so it would be tough to start rolling things back. Of course Nopony has ever treated their concubines like Twilight is treating Trixie, but that’s besides the point.
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Makes sense to me, but I already have an ending in mind. Thank you for the suggestion though, I appreciate it.
Also, Trixie is property, same way you or I might own a phone. It would be weird for the government to say it’s illegal to hit your phone, or break the screen.
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She’s not a pet, not according to the law in the first chapter. Might have to explain it more thoroughly in a future chapter tbh.
She’s a slave, and once Twilight invoked her royal right to own her, every single right that Trixie used to have was transferred to Twilight. This means Trixie has no rights, and is considered a slave.
Dogs or cats have rights, Trixie does not.
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Haha thank you! For a second I thought you were gonna start being mean to me
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I’ve had horrible writers insult me before, I guess. You shouldn’t call your own stuff bad, just try to make it better! Mine isn’t that good but my friends are helping me so that’s why it’s even remotely readable lol
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If that is the case then wouldn't Twilight's friends know about this law, and if they do, then why is Twilight lying to them about reforming Trixie, when (unless you make a chapter saying otherwise) Trixie is likely never going to be free nor seemingly get to live any form of normal life. I mean, if it is a law of Equestria, then why doesn't Twilight just state this to her friends instead of hiding this fact? I mean, what she is doing has to be some form of exception to that law meaning that if abuse to the caliber Twilight has taken it can be proven then that right can be striped away, if not, and it truly does not matter what Twilight does to Trixie then why is Twilight lying to her friends, i mean if its a law they have to except it whether they like it or not.
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Okay so, lemme answer what I think your question is: "Why doesnt Twi tell everypony that she is using the law to keep her."
And basically, she has told them, back when Pinkie saw Trixie for the first time. They think she is using the law in order to reform her, when in fact she is using it to just punish her for her crimes against her friends. This is an important difference, because the main reason twilight is so obsessed with hurting Trixie is that Trixie could have killed all of her friends. As she said in one of the chapters, "What is the Princess of friendship without any friends?" basically she sees herself as nothing without her friends. She is terrified of losing them! The good part though, is that Twilight is running the risk of losing her friends if they discover to what extent she is hurting the filly. Any sane pony would not support her actions, and her friends would think theres something wrong with her.
TL;DR: Twilight is lying about how hard she disciplines, not the law shes using.
Adding to a point that Animal Heart made, while I don't expect her friends to kidnap Trixie, I do atleast hope that they will either find some means to get Trixie away from Twilight legally or will keep up their stance until either Twilight changes or their friendship breaks. I really hope the later don't happen but given how against they are of Twilight mistreating a filly I hope something doesn't come out of nowhere and make them just accept this abuse or even have them start agreeing with Twilight. Also I hope a true reason will be weaseled out of Twilight other then the Amulet Story, because I am sorry but I don't buy that being a suitable reason. Given how much time has passed sense that incident and Twilight becoming a Princess, I just can't buy that now of all times she randomly decides to punish Trixie in the harshest manner possible when this could have happened after she committed the crime. Also given that she is now a filly with no memories of doing that, it begs the question on why would that not be enough in Twilight's eyes, I mean, what Twilight was calling "Her old self slipping through" was just a little filly acting like a little filly, its not a sign of her being evil. I just hope a good reason is given and I hope its Twilight's friends that push it out of her rather than her revealing it to a memory-less Trixie who would have no reason to understand why Twilight is telling her this.
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I think I may have answered this in my previous reply, let me know if theres anything I missed.
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Ok that makes sense, but if that's the case, why would it matter how she treats Trixie then, if the law states that she has full ownership over Trixie, I mean, if what Twilight is doing is truly wrong and is something she should not be doing regardless what the law entails then that means their is a way if it came down to it, that Twilight's friends could take Trixie away from Twilight, or atleast get the princesses to do it. If this however isn't unorthodox behavior and all princesses has done it, then that is something that would be documented and would be a risk every slave is meant to endure and if they have no issue with the law itself then their would be no reason for them to be against how Twilight treats her, then if this is the normal or the common way most slaves are treated. Also again, why now though, if Trixie had not done something up until now, what would make Twilight think she would do something eventually? And even if her paranoia was warranted, Trixie is a filly and can be raised anyway Twilight wishes, so wouldn't it make more logical sense to then teach her down the path of friendship while she is young, instead of instilling fear and potiental hatred in her at a young age that very well could turn her into the mare Twilight is fearing she was. I mean she can't keep Trixie a filly forever, and as she gets older its going to be harder to use the same form of discipline tactics she has been using up to now so Trixie is eventually going to get to a point where she feels this isn't right and will try to fight back and then could become the evil plotting mare that Twilight already thinks she is.
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oof, I love your comments man, very insightful and shows me how vague I am at explaining shit lol. Ill try harder!
Okay, so, as of now Twilight is the first to ever treat her slave like this. In the past they have all been concubines or super close friends and confidants to the Princesses, they live in Luxury and want for nothing. I totally forgot to go into detail about the law, but I will next chapter.
As for taking trixie, Nopony can do that. The law is concrete and Twilight isnt breaking any of them.
What im about to say should probably be in the first chapter tbh: Trixie was kept in Twilights basement in between the time of the alicorn amulet and current times. Lets say Magic Stasis or something, sleeping.
Twilight doesn't particularly care about how Trixie is raised, her methods are going to shape Trixie into a mare far too submissive and afraid to fight back.
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Yes you explained why she is doing it but you haven't explained why she is doing it now, and why she is doing it to a memory wiped filly turned Trixie. If this was the original Trixie, or even Trixie with her memories and mind still intact just in the body of a filly, then I could understand Twilight's madness, as atleast she would be punishing the actual Trixie. But unless Twilight intends to restore her memories eventually, that Trixie is effectively dead, and could be shaped anyway Twilight wishes, without the need for violence, I mean, Trixie can't even make mistakes that a normal filly would make without Twilight beating her senseless for doing so, If Twilight is so paranoid to the point she is going to this length and if she (as I have taken from your reason why she is doing this to trixie) has some hatred toward the mare then why not just kill her and hide the body and let that be that. She would never have to worry about Trixie and her friends would have never found out so their would have been no risk, and even if she was found to have murdered Trixie, if the law states that she is within her right to do whatever she wants with Trixie then she could have walked away scott free and even told her friends some lie that she found Trixie trying to kill her and so she did it out of defence and that would have been that. It atleast would have been more humane then torturing a filly that has technically done nothing wrong despite it being Trixie reverted to a filly.
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Yes that would have helped if I had know that, I had no idea, that Trixie was in Twilight's captivity for that long, and it does make a lot more sense, but even still she is a filly now, surely Twilight would understand that a filly with no memories of doing those horrible things has little chance of repeating those actions if she is raised properly, I mean even if they really can't take Trixie away from her, Celestia or someone could still point out that she should be using this opportunity to raise her the right way instead of through fear and manipulation.
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I think you’re buying Twilights lie too much, she doesn’t have that much of a motivation to make her a better pony or punish her for her crimes.
Twilight is just taking her revenge, taking out the sheer horror she had at the possibility of her friends dying. The whole discipline thing is a farce for her friends, she just wants to hurt Trixie.
As for the fillly being an innocent, no-memory having pony, well Twilight isn’t thinking the most rationally and she finds hurting a defenseless pony more fun. (Also 50% cause I simply wanted to lol)
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Again I get that, that is why I said I could understand had she kept Trixie the way she was or kept her memories intact, because then she would atleast be breaking the actual mare that she resents, but now that she is a mind wiped filly, it is harder to justify Twilight's revenge plan. And I am aware she has no intention to raise her right, I am mainly projecting hope that somepony will point this out with Twilight and that her intentions could or might change. I mean, it would be hard for Twilight to justify the revenge even to herself if she was pointed to the fact that she is wasting a opportunity to teach her right, and also I don't buy that she would always be semissive, I feel that eventually if she was allowed to grow up, naturally under Twilight that she would eventually get tired of the abuse and start to fight back or even start to provoke Twilight to kill her, with her thinking it would shatter her friendship and as a means of freeing her from this torture. I mean, Trixie is going to eventually realize she isn't as small and fragile anymore, and even if once she is a mare and Twilight has deemed that her revenge is fulfilled and allows Trixie some freedoms like maybe going out on her own and making friends or even finding love, that anger and hatred will still be instilled in her and would just be a ticking time bomb until either she herself explodes from the abuse she suffered or she lets it slip to a friend or lover that then turns around and explains to her that she was abused, rather than being taught to behave. What I am saying is that Twilight's method has a larger chance of biting her in the ass eventually rather than the way she should be doing it. And I guess to be honest a part of me is hoping either Twilight changes or she gets what is coming to her.
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I don’t speak from experience, but the kind of mental games that an abuse can use on a victim is crazy powerful. The victim learns to blame themselves for misbehaving enough to be punished. They’re told “see what you did? If you won’t have made me angry I wouldn’t have hit you”. The goal here is for the abuser to shift blame onto the victim, and eventually the victim believes it. This is a big issue for people trying to escape abusive situations because they blame themselves.
I can’t vouch for the authenticity, I’ve no expetience with it I’m just trying to write about it. I believe Trixie will develop incredibly low self esteem and self loathing which will prevent her from fighting back.
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As for Twilights methods biting her in the ass, well you’ll just have to wait and see, won’t you?
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Well I did not mean, that she would just one day wake up and start fighting back, but I would imagine that when Trixie reaches and adult Twilight would not be able to keep up the lie forever as I am certain her friends would question why she does not have her memories back, or why she is still being disciplined even after all these years, So I would atleast imagine that eventually Twilight is going to allow her to have to free time to herself to make friends or even find love when she is an adult and that free time could allow the abuse to slip out, and the friend, lover whichever might then convince her or explain to her how she was abused and manipulated. I mean yeah I get that that would not guarentee that she would believe the friend over the lies Twilight told her but i could instill some form of doubt in her especially if she gets to see how a filly is actually treated. I mean what if her friend has a filly, or what if she sees other parents treating their fillies with love and care while she has gotten nothing but abuse, it could slowly start to show cracks in Twilight's lies and Trixie might pay attention to what that friend told her more. Or maybe even if Twilights abuse slipped out and made its way to Twilight's friends, I mean we already have seen that Aj Pinkie and Fluttershy has suspensions about Twilight, even if over time those suspensions faded and Twilight eventually completely convinced them of her lie, rumors spread from Trixie accidentally revealing the abuse and then Twilights friends could get involved and while they could not save Trixie from the abuse they could atleast make her aware of it.
Also as a added note, eventually their is going to have to come a time that Twilight feels she is satisfied with her revenge and thus lightens up on the abuse or even stops doing it all together or only when she misbehaves, but I don't know what it could transform into but I would imagine that she would eventually stop the abuse and finally allow Trixie to have some form of life, even if it is still a very restricted one.
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well, if im being honest im having trouble figuring out what you want me to respond to tbh, but ill try my best.
The main thing that i shoudl say is that trixie does not see herself as Twilights daughter. She believes she is a pet, lower than a pony. She knows the difference between being a pet and being a family member as evidenced by her seeing Spike and knowing that he isnt subjected to the same things that she is. She also knows that pets dont have the same freedoms as ponies or someone like spike.
She will hopefully never roam free, Trixie will always be supervised by another pony in some form or another. Also limiting what she can say and tell other ponies is easy for Twilight with some spells that outline exactly what she is not allowed to tell others.
Twilight will not get tired of punishing trixie, shes a good punching bag for when stress overwhelms her. Also, Trixie serves as a housekeeper too, so twilight wont want to give that up.
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as for her friends being suspicious and stuff, well youll just have to wait and see, ive still got plenty planned for this story.
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I guess a lot of my worries are coming from the fact that Trixie is one of my favorite ponies and it just kind of pains me seeing her like this with no hope of justice. I mean, I don't really mind if Trixie's condition never changes, as long as Twilight is punished in some way for what she is doing. It is just a worry to me that by the end of this story, Twilight will walk away scott free with a completely broken Trixie to do with as she pleases without any for of justice for Trixie. I mean I would atleast hope that if she did walk away scot free, she would atleast be left with a sense of unbearable guilt for what she has done to Trixie that she will have to live with for the rest of her life and Trixies.
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I totally understand, someone doing this to your favorite character is probably tough to see. Im glad youre reading my story anyway though! Thank you!
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Your welcome, its a interesting concept, it is just painful to see Twilight do this as well because I am kind of a Twixie fan too. I just hope some justice is served even if it is nothing more then Twilight stopping being abusive to Trixie.
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Oooh okay! Twixie is a great ship.
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I just realized a potential plothole in your explanation on how long Twilight has had Trixie in captivity that I am hoping you can clear up. If as you stated in one of your previous comments, if she has had Trixie in some form of status ever sense the events of "The Magical Duel" and I am assuming that the events that has happened in the show has happened to this worlds Twilight, then my one issues is, where was Trixie stored all this time? If Trixie was taken back during the event's of "The Magical Duel" then the only place that Twilight could have stored Trixie during this time was the Golden Oak's Library, which was destroyed by Tirek, and if Tirek destroyed the library in this world like it did the show then how did Trixie survive such an explosion, or how did she not escape from status from the shockwave of the explosion. Also even if I buy that she did not get freed or killed, then how did Twilight move Trixie from the Golden Oaks remains and into her castle without any of her friends or anypony in PonieVille noticing?
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Twilight has a pocket dimension where she can teleport things in and out of. Time doesnt move there so thats why Trixie didnt feel the passage of time nor did anyone find Trixie.
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Ok then.
Excellent keep up the good work
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Thank you very much!
I read a story that was very similar to this one not all that long ago. Twilight is best pony in my opinion, and I don't mind seeing an OOC version of her like this (I'm a big evil Twilight fan even if I do find this a bit extreme), but I'd at least like some background as to why she's so messed up. Last story I read didn't really explain anything at all. She was a monster because... that's what she was. Not ver satisfying in my opinion, but hey, it's your story, you do you. I'm invested in the story and I'll continue to as long you put out chapters.
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Awesome!! Thank you!
As for Twilight being messed up, well I've attributed her actions to the sheer anger and fear of losing her friends. Shes not suddenly evil, shes still the same pony, just super obsessed with revenge on trixie. Does that make sense?
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I suppose it does... for this iteration of Twilight anyway. With how she acts, there has to be some deep seated issues aside from Trixie, so in my own headcanon of your headcanon I'll just assume she accidentally did something fucked up to somepony as a foal and found out she really enjoyed it for one reason or another.
Then things kind of spiraled from there and now she has a twisted personality she keeps hidden from the others. That's how I see it in my head anyway. Don't mind me and my imagination though, you just keep doing what you do.
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Fascinating! I didnt think she'd have some underlying issue to motivate her for this, but thats an interesting idea. Thank you!
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No problem. Hell, feel free to use it if you want. Whatever helps the story flow better.
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I agree with the7Saviors that Twilight needs some other motivator other than Trixie, that drives her to do this, maybe she was abused the same way she is abusing Trixie and that is the only way she knows how to deal with it, something that while would not justify her actions, would atleast allow you a better understanding of why she is doing it, and something where if you do go down the happy ending road, can be a way for Twilight to get help. The issue with it being a deep seated hatred for Trixie is that, Twilight one has no real reason to even enact that as she has really lost nothing but gains to lose everything by continuing and 2 she had ample oppertunities throughout these years to have just killed off or did something to Trixie that would have gotten her out of the picture and her life for good and could have happened without her friends or anypony ever finding out that something even happened to Trixie. Twilight's life is perfect, she has 5 amazing friends, grew up under the tutorship of one of the Princesses of Equestria, became the prodigy of the Princess of the Sun, became the Princess of Friendship and received her own castle, in comparison to Trixie's life, Twilight has everything, so it would not make a lot of sense for her to just risk it all on some petty revenge unless their was some form of psychological reason behind her madness, something she can't really help that is the true driving force for her torturing Trixie rather than it just being Trixie herself. Because even if in your version of Equestria and "The Magical Duel" Trixie did do something horrible and unforgiving rather that just seek attention like she did in the show, Twilight reverting her to a filly and erasing her memories have inadvertently abolished Trixie of those crimes, because you could argue that the original Trixie is dead. So I do hope that you will consider giving Twilight some deeper reason for doing what she does other than, because of what Trixie did, because in my opinion other villains that Twilight has faced and reformed has done far worse than anything that Trixie could ever do, so it would not make much sense to have this random hatred toward Trixie but not towards the likes of Nightmare Moon, Discord, Tirek or even Starlight.
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Also I thought of a interesting way you could bring in Starlight Glimmer (if you haven't already or if you have had Twilight and her friends to have atleast met her in your timeline) Given how Starlight was stalking Twilight and her friends throughout season 5, learning what she needed to learn to enact revenge on Twilight, you could make that same senario happen only instead of her stealing a time scroll to go into the past, she instead gathers the information and proof she needs to reveal to the world what Twilight has been doing to Trixie, that could ruin her reputation and break up her friends. Making Starlight a roadblock that puts pressure on Twilight.
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That is a very fascinating idea! I'm afraid I havent planned for starlight to be in this story, but I will for sure consider having her come in as a villain.
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Thank You, can't wait to see what you come up with
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Haha thanks! The next chapter will probably take a while since im working on a different project for a little bit, and then starting school again. I'll try my best to make it good for you!
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I think this will stand as my last bit of criticism until either the story gets further along or until it ends, but the one thing I definitely think needs more attention in upcoming chapters is the Law you created that is the very basis for Twilight to abuse Trixie. I feel you really need to both reevaluate your law and go into a bit more detail on how the law exactly works. Because the basic setup you have now, makes the law very abuse-able as well as it just does not fit with the world you have set up. For instance, what is stopping Queen Chrysalis from coming over and deciding that Twilight and her friends have given her a lot of trouble, so lets me just kidnap one of her friends and take them as a slave which by your own law would then make it impossible to then save them from Chrysalis.
Like any law there needs to be restrictions and consequences put in place to prevent it from being abused, otherwise you make Twilight a overpowered antagonist of this story because their is no real risk to her, yes she could lose her friends and possibly be shamed but if Trixie would be hers no matter what then it makes any punishment you could give Twilight seem pointless because it does not save Trixie from that situation and would likely only go to worsen the abuse rather than lessen it or even abolish it. Not only does the law need some fail safe, and restrictions that under certain circumstances (such as a Prince or Princess abusing their slave like Twilight is doing) that slave can be taken away by a higher for of power and either freed or transferred to another Prince or Princess that would be willing to take them. But you also need to detail how a Prince or Princess gets a slave, given from what you have told me, it can't just be that a royal figure just walks down the street and select the slave and then the royals guards go and collect the slave and take them to the castle or whereever that royal lives, there has to be some form of mutual agreement between both the slave and the Royal. Also you have to take into account that Equestria is not a dictatorship, so a slave should have a right to deny being a slave if they feel like they can't give the Prince or Princess what they want. Otherwise, if you just keep the law in place you create problems of either having the villains be to stupid to think to abuse that law or Celestia the luckiest ruler to ever live. As well as the world does not fit the law, if this Equestria was a dictatorship and Celestia and Luna were tyrants then this law would make sense how it is, but since your world isn't (atleast as far as I can tell) it does not fit in with this law as it is to basic.
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I totally agree that the law needs to be expanded upon more, thank you. I will for sure find a place to add that in! The thing is, though, Chrysalis is not a princess of equestria, so she cant really take anypony legally. the failsafe for some higher power taking slaves wouldnt work, since a Princess is the highest authority in the land. Noone is above a princess unless you start walking into Fausticorn territory or something weird like that. In addition, allowing a slave to opt out of slavery in the way that you suggest would kinda defeat the purpose dont you think lol?
I 100% appreciate the feedback, thank you very much!
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Yes but other nations could easily copy the law, in their land thus meaning that if they take a pony and then go back to their land, they could claim ownership of that pony, and going their and taking them back could spark war. Also they are villains they don't particularly have to follow the law, but they could easily find a way to manipulate it. Also There are only 4 main princesses of Equestria, and Two of them I feel hold more power than the other 2, Even if Twilight is the Princess of Friendship, Celestia still outranks her by being a princess of all of Equestria same with Luna, only I feel Luna is just slightly below Celestia, so I would deem them having the power to strip this away, over Twilight. Also I thought any royal figure could take on a slave, because their are only 4 princesses and during the time when the law would have been instated, their was only 2 so was Celestia and Luna the only ones the law applied too? That would seem a waste to have a law that only works for 2 to 4 princesses. That's why their needs to be some way a slave can be taken away if they are being abused otherwise Celestia is condeming every Pony that is taking as a slave to have the potential throw of the dice chance that whoever they wind up a servant to, may abuse them aswell. Also again, if their is no way to take Trixie from Twilight then you run the risk of making her overpowered to the point it would become pointless to even punish her even if that was the direction the story was heading because the punishment would fall flat if the reason, behind it would do nothing to teach Twilight a lesson or change the outcome of the situation. Its something where Twilight needs that pressure, otherwise what real conflict is their for Twilight other than losing her friends which does nothing to really change Trixies position. I just feel their needs to be stakes and having the risk of losing everything including Trixie I see would be more taxing on Twilight then something she would be arrogant enough to think would never happen, such as her friends leaving her. Yes if it happened and she did not believe it would, it would be surprising, but it would only be fuel for Twilight rather than a wake up call.
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Sounds like you put a lot of thought into this. The scope of my fic does not encompass the other countries or what villains might do. as for the law, ill try to clear some stuff up in a future chapter, but the law applies to princesses of equestria. the law was made, and then later Twilight became a princess. just cause she wasnt around when the law was made doesnt mean it wont apply to her.
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I guess I did over think it with the villains, I just felt you kind of had to have them in mind because they are a threat and could be a bigger one if given the chance. Also I am not saying the law does not apply to Twilight, I am just saying I feel it gives Twilight to much power, with no repercussions for her actions. Also it would be interesting to see if their is any care for Trixie even if its for the need to abuse her or if it is something that would not effect Twilight. I mean if she has no worry, then their becomes no reason to expand her character beyond what has already been established. If the Law was only created for the Princesses of Equestria, then who made the law?
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Im not totally sure what you mean by " Also it would be interesting to see if their is any care for Trixie even if its for the need to abuse her or if it is something that would not effect Twilight."
But, celestia and Luna made the law, as mentioned before, to handle the concubines legality. Also, still think youre thinking outside of the scope of my story :P
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Wait what do you mean by the "concubines legality"? Also yeah, I am overthinking things, I just worrying it will hurt any development of Twilight's character, if she is essentially untouchable.
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In chapter 1 I have trixie give a tiny overview of the law, with this line:
'Royalty was allowed to keep one pony as a companion to help get through the tougher days."
Im a shit writer so I didnt imply it correctly, but thats supposed to say they keep that pony as a companion in a sexual manner. Does that make sense?