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Well my interest is piqued, curious to see where this is taken and how far.
So I'm guessing whatever hokey franchise this is based off of had something come out? That is usually how these fads work.
Alright fuck it. I'll keep reading. Just keep writing. And I gotta say. Black and red is true edge Lord. I go black and green for my frog girl.
Thanks for point out my mistake, I’m having trouble doing my stories plus school work, but I am leaving at least 30 minutes for a chapter in my stories.
Ok fuck you and your warframe riven mods! How many fucking rolls did it take for that huh? Hoe much kuva did you waste?!?
Eh.
A tad confusing, but seems good 👍👍
The writing is not very good. Hope you can improve in the future
How to make writhing to be very good, I really like some advice or tips for improvement . I really need to do this for a friend that owns rather the player in Warframe PC, IGN:ExiaTrailblaze.
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You need to learn more about grammar and sentence structures, all of these can be found on the Internet. First step is to choose a way for the readers to view the world you're building I.e third person or first person. In your case, it is third person, there are several types such as third person limited,.... The tenses must be suitable and consistence, I suggest using past tense for 3rd person story telling.
These warframe rivens are never to be real. I shall let this slide. Only because I enjoy your story.
sorry for that but Warframe riven are my plot device and will explain there uses later on because if I apply a standard Tenno in this world my character won’t survive. 😅
I'm loving your story. And i need more of it in my life!
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I only see one problem with your story. Its that your jumping all over the place. But all in all its an amazing story and i can't wait for the next chapter.
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oh wow....... dude calm the fuck down
Ok will try less jumping and make it focus on the main story thanks ^w^
You mod for slash. Not pun. Also not blast. Corrosive is best out of anything. But base tox is ok as well.
I see, will try to get a better role for corrosive or toxic, plus I’m still trying to get the maim mod XD
God, not with the capitalized title of the story or chapters, please. It's like they're yelling themselves at me. Trust me, I know from experience with the capitalize wording of the story's title and the chapters' names.
As for how you can improve, maybe read other stories to learn more about being creative. Take some inspiration and ideas for you. Read more for other works, maybe try and buy a teaching book about grammar and the like if you want.
If you are not from native English, I understand the capitalizing words. Inexperienced writers tend to do that with their stories.
As for tips on improving the chapters, try to re-read through them and take your time in editing the chapters. I'll have this on my "Read it Later" list of stories, so that I can may read this in the future when there's new chapters to the story.
Although I'm not a fan of Warframe, I don't know about you, but try to think of something more creative the next time you want to post a story on the site. Maybe try reading my "A Friendship's Journey" to have a better reading samples. I've got a pre-reader to help me with the chapters for errors, maybe you should have a pre-reader as well to help you on the chapters for the future of your story. Or maybe a proofreader, or editor if you're going with that.
That is all for now. If you want to know more, either reply to this comment or PM me for it.
@Dawn Darkness thank you for your comment and I would do just that when I’m free. Will read your “A friendships journey” to help me improve, thanks again I’d really appreciate it.
You reply to comments by moving your mouse over to the right hand side of the comment you want to reply to and clicking on the >> that appears. Will I need to know anything about Warframe and Dark Sector in order to enjoy this?
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Wow, thank you I did not know that will keep this reply method in mind. As for my story, You don't need to know much about Warframe or Dark Sector because my story takes place into a rewritten History due to some time travel shenanigans + I'm planning to add the Main Seven in my following chapters. Basically, I'm just making random stuff up to make my story more enjoyable to read. But I always put on a link in case my readers are curious about some of the stuff I'm referring too and if you need more info just tell me, I’ll rewrite them to be more understandable or add more links.
I'm still figuring out my own writing style so please feel free to point that needs any correction, Please and Thank you