Sunset Shimmer has a fear of Endings. She hates them with a passion. Thus she is stuck with a problem. Graduation is coming up and she has no idea what to do next. Her friends are going to college, and she doesn't want High School to end. She can't face it. She needs a way out...
And with Graduation soon approaching, she looks back. Back to before...
She realizes just how much she left behind when she went through the portal.
Her Family, Her Parents....Her Friends
She needs to go back. Thus, she packs up, and goes back to Equestria
But what she finds when she gets there, isn't what she had intended.
Chapters (5)
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this is really good I cant wait for more
8982964
I wrote this at two in the morning on a whim because my internet went out on Wordpad....
It certainly got my interest.
8983029
Same for me
8982986
if that is the case then only one spelling mistake is something to be proud of
Okay, you have my attention. Now let's see if you can keep it.
Also, that whole endings bit? Reminds me of a quote from the 11th Doctor.
8982986
Well, for something written at two in the morning, not bad so far! God knows that if I wrote at two in the morning, I'd churn out nothing worth reading.
8982986 Hey, I know you wrote this pretty late at night so here are the things that I noticed were wrong. I'm not the best at this kind of stuff so you might want to go back through it yourself when you're more awake or an actual editor person.
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They
up, "Okay
chuckled, "There's
head, "You
Needs a period
complexities
Need to change that apostrophe to a quotation and add a period.
Needs a period.
Needs a space and get rid of that comma
Needs to be capitalized and needs a period
And one last period.
Also there were a ton of instances where you capitalized letters that you didn't need to.
Okay, so Ray's a snake now... Never question Equestrian Magic one supposes.
Great work keep it up
God I need an editor...
here
damn who know that pinkie is such a good plot tool
And so the ship has begun to sail... And you know, this may be just me, but I think this song fits them.
don't worry sunset you will find de wey
I'm not sorry
On it!twistedsifter.files.wordpress.com/2012/04/giant-ship-that-ships-other-ships-blue-marlin-2.jpg
Should be "since".
Yeeesss ship-
Also looking forward to next chapter good work!
okay i just got my feels beat up their at the end i'm a sucker for family reunions
Feels—
The feels!
9031233
Sunset mentions in chapter 1 that she mooches off of Blueblood, her landlord. As for plans for after High School...she has none. She's TERRIFIED of leaving CHS, so the idea of planning for her future isn't on her mind right now. That's why she was so quick to leave for Equestria. She didn't want to plan for her life after CHS, because she couldn't comprehend a life outside of CHS.
excellent sunset give into the ship
Oh Sunset, you cannot resist. You've been touched by the flame, and now you just gotta dive back in.
wait the garden and they are in the equivalent of new york so you mean MADISON SQUARE GARDEN oh my god im an idiot for not realizing this until the second time reading.
post edit: hey author dude can we get a point in time referance so we know when this is happening in equestria :) or not and just leave us wondering forever :'(.
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Time reference for when this is happening Season wise, or when this his happening in the show canon?
Season wise, yeah, it's early fall as mentioned. Show canon wise? Eh, I'd rather leave it intentionally vague. Show canon is an always updating thing and trying to fit your fic to make it "fit the canon" isn't what I'm here for. I'm here to write a cute ship fic, nothing more. For all I know Twilight could get her castle blown up by the end of season 7 and that would make chapter 2 null and void. shrugs
There's a reason I almost exclusively use the Alternate Universe tag on my stories. Fitting "show canon" is both exhausting, and can become pointless within a week.
I SHIP
The shift from 3rd to first person is a little jarring, but other than that, its a nice start.
9050865
again, I wrote that first chapter at 3AM on Wordpad after my power went out. Was a one time decision I never went back and fixed.
9050031
well to help slightly it is season 8 now and her castle has not been blown up but they apparently started a friendship school.
and i just ment a rough guess as to the timeline other than that i mostly just came for the interesting sounding story.
9051855
Yes, I've been watching the show too. If I really had to put this somewhere in the show canon, it'd be post-season 7. This is supposed to be around when Sunset is graduating, so we're gonna have to jump ahead in the future if we're gonna put this into the canon.
I use the Alternate Universe tag for that reason. Worrying about "when does this fit in the timeline of the show" is just too much of a hassle when you're trying to tell an interesting story.
Did she leave the portal opening book behind?
8985379
Yep
9038898
She works at a Sushi Shop