After finding a young colt, Celestia decides to adopt him but can she keep up with her royal duties and the young colt by herself and what secrets does this young colt hold?
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Hm...
I think i am going to track this.
So this is my first fanfic of course, i do appreciate comments/constructive critisim. there may be some mistakes in the writing but since i am editing myself i will correct them to the best of my ability when someone points one out
You have what looks like an imteresting story here although you didnt really describe the main character himself,other than that hardly any grammar or spelling errors.
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I plan on doing that in the next chapter. I know i should have done it in the first chapter but i didn't, plus he hasn't really seen himself in the mirror yet
My only problem is when it said "Twilight Sparkles" Thats my only problem just take out that s but anyways nice story
Really work on your punctuation though, not really too many errors besides that.
If he doesn't remember what he looks like then how would he remember the princess his name or the situation of his family?
poor little guy, hope he doesn't have nightmares the following night, sounds like he has been through a lot.... then again if he does have some nightmares I am sure Celestia would be more then happy to nuzzul him back to sleep on her bed.
It's ok I guess
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there should have been a ' after the "s" but i may have accidently deleted it it.
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How could you not forget who Princess Celestia is?, Just as any child would having possibly been foal napped he might psychologically assume that they are no longer living. I guess you'll have to wait to find out
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It's my first fan fic, it can either only get better or worse, im hopeful on better
interesting concept can't wait to see more
Guys, just in case you guys haven't read my blog post. Due to me being out of town till the 9th of august this story is on a weekly updated basis unless i say it has to be delayed because while im with family we are doing many a things that require my attention all day when i could be or wanting to be writing all day.
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There seems to be a lack of punctuation at the end of dialogue.
I will check on this when it has moar chapters.
Im not quite sure how i feel about this, It feels a bit fast paced.
/Discuss
It was pretty good also every thing with the doctor makes things well.....fast paced
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That's true since he is such a fast paced pony
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And i shall leave you with a wibbly wobbly
I still wonder if blueprint just has a rough past or if he is actually a brony who has had his earthly memory erased.
I have actually considered that greatly for some of my characters for a minor side note.
Essentially they wouldn't really remember their past but for some reason or another they also don't really care and would be to busy with the REAL plot but there will be lots of heavy hints as to their origins though nothing strong enough to alert the character themselves.
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its a rough past mostly, this is not a human/crossover/alternate dimension fic.
I like it go on
also is he going to meet prince BlueBlood
*pukes* *still puking* done puking
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Mischief and adventure awaits, you never know!
This is late because of Error 502; but here it is
1053466Curse you Err0r 502!I say internet conspirecy!
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I had 502 for 4 days. so i just dunno what went wrong
1060947DERPY RUNS THE INTERWEBZ!
Uh oh. a cliff hanger!. What is going on with our little colt? Read carefully for a hint, and those of you sciencey ponies will understand where this is leading.
1077364MORE.BEFORE PONIES JUMP TO CONCLUSIONS AND OFF BUILDINGS
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Why would they jump off of buildings? then they wouldn't be able to read. You read quickly by the way.
A muffin for which sciency pony can tell me what is going on.
Oh and is my writing getting better or worse?
1077448Better,though you could use a editer.Im not an editer.
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I know I need one. I try to catch as many errors as I can myself because I dont have one but im sure a few errors slip me by. Im also looking for someone who does art.
Im just not sure how to promote my story is all.
1077483Also,he is ethier getting wings,or learning all about this poor guards life.
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Wont tell you the answer because that would ruin the cliff hanger for everyone else. However you will have to wait and see. Who said the life is poor?
1077516Opps,i ment life.
TOO SHORT!
Thats about my only complaint though.
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Im trying, if you noticed the chapters are getting progressively longer. Can anyone review my battle scenes? These are the first ones ive ever done and they seem adequate to me but what do you guys think?
Its posted and Multiple viewpoints this time!
What is this? An official protagonist!?!
Short chapter I know but I wanted to get to the point with this one.
Interesting........please continue.
....................Blue Blood.............Please dont let him get away with this.I want him to get caught as fast as possable!
Ill take it this chapter was a good one?
..........Mindfuck......For all intents and things this is the only defenition i can give this chapter.
Yes it is *chuckles* Yes it is. Read through it a couple of times and you'll begin to pick up on things.
Another Dislike? Hmmm i wonder who its from
Best chapter yet. Also to clarify the "Day 7" in Blueblood's journal is not relevant to the chapter numbers
Please make this whole blueblood thing shortif you can,and i not,lighten up on bluebloods Assholery or im afraid this story with need a new tag....
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Ive kept it fairly short so far.
1245328I mean like how long he isnt found out about.
The current problem with that would make the story extremely short. Blueblood is the main antagonist in the story
Joshscorcher: CHARACTER DEVELOPMENT!!!
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I know right?
The entire point of this chapter was to develop the captain more. I hope you all liked it. I am working on another story aswell to keep my brain fresh so i dont fizzle out. Though the new story wont be posted for awhile, while i work on it i will keep writing this one. dont fret
DUN DUN DUN, a silly chapter
1461418Did......Luna just use a slurty voice on Blueprint in a sexy sentence?Mixed Emotions and thoughts.....dirty thoughts....