... Good sir this is I believe, a good story, not only have you set what could be many things in motion [you seem to have a talent for doing that] but you have also captured an amazingly detailed story, good job.
Grade Time!
Character Portrayal: I can't grade this yet, you have only shown two pony personas Plot: Great plot with many things it could do, A normal life... An adventure... An Epic Quest... it's also a great story: 10 Details: Ah, you have finely sprinkled an amazing plot with a layer of succulent detail, it takes skill to do that:10 Predictability: A good story that can't be predicted as Robert goes to Equestria, but it was easy to predict to me, that he would go to Equestria, but not that he would do it, in that way: 8
Overall I give this a 9 out of 10, for a good story that can, and probably will, go far. Take your 9 mustaches
I like it so far but: "Soon I found a dirt road and decided that it would be better not to be too bald, so I kept a distance to it." I think you mean bold, not bald
Not ready with tagging, but for now it's right.
Bronydragon
Ooo. Iz-a very nice. I like it.
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Instantly reading it in Mario's voice
Good that you like it. There is a whole lot more to come.
Bronydragon
... Good sir this is I believe, a good story, not only have you set what could be many things in motion [you seem to have a talent for doing that] but you have also captured an amazingly detailed story, good job.
Grade Time!
Character Portrayal: I can't grade this yet, you have only shown two pony personas
Plot: Great plot with many things it could do, A normal life... An adventure... An Epic Quest... it's also a great story: 10
Details: Ah, you have finely sprinkled an amazing plot with a layer of succulent detail, it takes skill to do that:10
Predictability: A good story that can't be predicted as Robert goes to Equestria, but it was easy to predict to me, that he would go to Equestria, but not that he would do it, in that way: 8
Overall I give this a 9 out of 10, for a good story that can, and probably will, go far. Take your 9 mustaches
He should have gone with "quack" instead of "meow". They'll just assume its a duck and go on their way.
I like it so far
but:
"Soon I found a dirt road and decided that it would be better not to be too bald, so I kept a distance to it."
I think you mean bold, not bald
Interesting....I am enjoying, my friend