It's been six years since Anon woke up in Cloudsdale as a foal, taken in by a pegasus couple. After a bit of time to acclimate herself to the fact she was no longer a male college student, the family moved down to Fillydelphia where they still live to this day.
Anon, now going by the given name Bluebelle, deals with some of the issues facing regular children on top of having to struggle to maintain her own sense of self, usually through dry comedy and vulgar internal commentary on the goings on around her.
Also, a big thanks to NaoFaria for the cover art!
Chapters (11)
Cant wait for chapter 2
"You just can't stop that little guy! He's like a... like a... tank!"
Storage containers can be stopped. Rainbow Dash confirmed for first human in Equestria
Well, I enjoyed it. It's cute! Poor Bluebelle is slave to her tummy.
Not really sure what this one is about... all the description talks about is some random old story or something?
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Sorry, that's on me. I figured it would show the short description, which in someway explains the story at least a bit, and then if you clicked a menu of sorts it would show the long description. I'm try to write a longer version of the short one, even if I'm actually pretty terrible at summarizations.
This is great. :3
Isn’t the M1 Abrams tank tan?
I like this story its defintaly a diffrent take on a stale meta
*sniff sniff* Do I smell a ship coming?Flase flag everyone.8983819
Please no ship, I'm pretty sure it's illegal given their age differences.
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Oh shit, sorry read the passage wrong I thought Autumn was a new student named Amber jewel. Disregard my previous statement.
Ahh a new chapter.
I like how despite blues real age he still acts like a little kid I'm not even sure its intentinal at this point
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can we root for puppy dog love?
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I'd say puppy dog love is okay.
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yay puuppy love
i'm not sure this is a act any longer despite what belle says
Why isn't there an anon tag?
rage gaming has runined the name cotten for me because all I can imagine is a very pink man that sometimes sings
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Because I'm incredibly new to this and the rules seem more focused with how dialogue is formatted than getting the story tagged correctly. I still do my writing in Notepad and use Pastebin for sharing things, so I guess that makes me old school or something.
wow thats eye brow raising
Another human but is rapey, eck
Okay, still a creeper.
These daydreams are really starting to bleed into reality here, I wonder what everyone else sees as she's freaking out
i think blue is learning to let go of the past
"This exchange is over." -Sovereign
Oh hey, surprised to see this here. I'll fave it and come back to it when you catch up with pastebin :P
But, isn't Bluebelle the name of Rule 64 Prince Blueblood?
well cotton got his mark nice
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Is it? I have no idea, it's just a name I came up with a while ago.
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Yeah that’s Bluebloods r63 name. Also why is she going to the doctor is it? I’m slightly confused.
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She's getting sick from being in cold water and running wet.
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She neeeeeeeeds to be romance with blue blood pretty please with a cherry atop.
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I generally avoid using canon characters in pretty much anything I write when I can, so much so that I would have used a made up character to fill Luna's role had that not just been cheesy as heck. I mainly just don't like trying to write someone else's character and try to pass it off as my own thing, even if the original creator of said character has no complaints or even provides some assistance to help me write them. For reference, I based Star Light off of a friend's OC, both appearance and personality wise. And for the first four updates or so I constantly kept pestering them being like "Hey is this okay?" even though it's not actually the same character as their character.
So tl;dr, there'll be very rare appearances of canon characters, and when they show up it's going to be because they play a role in the setting that I can't justify hamfisting an OC into the setting to replace them.
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Awe ok that's fine.
So if you look at the story now, you'll see a magical chapter called Candlelight has appeared out of the woodwork. The text for that is what was originally The Fire Rises, and The Fire Rises is now what is supposed to be The Fire Rises. I made a dumb and uploaded the text with the wrong name. I finally changed it though, y'know, like 2-3 weeks late. Sorry about that. I'm gonna be surprised if I manage to make any significant fuckups like that again but if I do I'll, uhhh, I dunno, I'll put some fanservice in an update somewhere or something. There really isn't much us authors can do to repay our readers, huh?
*cries*
Ah the missing link.
oh god the feels
"Oh my God I'm so proud of you!... You're still grounded, though."
If Fishy isn't from Earth she should probably express being gobsmacked in another fashion, such as "oh sweet Celestia." Love seeing this story on FimFiction.
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Thanks for calling that out, I don't know if you've noticed but I've been trying to keep that in order though usually when I proof read stuff I mainly just look for misspelled words and the sort. Should be fixed now.
Have considered posting the prequel? It would make a nice companion to this story you have going and tho it's quite older I'd still love to see it on here. I do supposed you'd have to find an ending for that too.
Sorry if this was asked before~
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It’s whatever color it needs to be, be it brown, tan, green, olive, multicolor camo.
All to make it less obvious. The tank seen first, dies first.
Update
Dark Souls 2 intro...
Awww. That really blows that he's gotta deal with that horrible pain of losing family bit gaining new ones. Happy endings are often more complex than Hollywood makes them
Poke
Oh hi!
I just binge read the whole story, it's really good, I feel like I can really connect with the main character ^^
I'd like to know if you're planning on uploading the story.
EDIT - Nevermind I just read the author's notes
boko
I've been asking around for something like this. This is exactly what I wanted to read lately. Just for feedback's sake, I'm pre-sold on the premise and you're doing it how I want to read it, but, you haven't really introduced anything particularly unique in the story beyond reincarnation as a filly.
Wonderbolts are kinda a boring interest, and dragon plushies are no plot point. In the first chapter, you want to introduce a story direction that gets people interested. Again, I'm pre-sold, but there's room for improvement when it comes to hooking skeptical readers.
Feeling a bit neutral at this point in the story. Nothing the main character is doing is really grabbing my interest. The friend relationship is marked by annoyance, which is logical, but not fun. Kinda puts a negative spin on things which dampens the enjoyment. The Unicorn “bully” villains are feeling a bit cardboardy. We don't know their names even or any other trait besides snobby.
Still some nice potential here and the writing is clean. Willing to be patient.