I like your story, but I have two little things that bother me a bit.
“Yeah...my bad for being inconsiderate or not taking that into account.”
This sentence sounds to me kinda to formal for a simple conversation. "Yeah...my bad for being rude, didn't thought of that." would sound more natural.
Night time has fallen upon the kingdom of Equestria as a familiar golden chariot flew through the moon lite night sky...
As the ponies are anthros wouldn't a palanquin or rickshaw make more sense?
I like your story, but I have two little things that bother me a bit.
This sentence sounds to me kinda to formal for a simple conversation. "Yeah...my bad for being rude, didn't thought of that." would sound more natural.
As the ponies are anthros wouldn't a palanquin or rickshaw make more sense?
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Thanks for pointing that out with the first part. As for the chariot part, I'm going by how the show had the chairot being carried.
Okay, this seems Interesting....
I haven't read the original so I'll be coming in with no bias!