Piekovsky No

Pinkie Pie want to use cannons for school play.
Twilight say no.
But Piekovsky yes.

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3 AM PM

3 AM PM #1 · May 26th, 2018 · 5 · ·

PIEKOVSKY ALWAYS YES!

Stellar_

Stellar_ #2 · May 26th, 2018 · 1 · ·

PIEKOVSKY ALWAYS YES!

Graglithan The Greater

Graglithan The Greater #3 · May 26th, 2018 · 1 · ·

Absolutely beautiful.

Princess Estrella

Princess Estrella #4 · May 30th, 2018 · · ·

You could use another round of grammatical editing. At the beginning, your characters have a case of floating head syndrome.

The Psychopath

The Psychopath #5 · May 30th, 2018 · · ·

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Floating head syndrome implies that there are no actions accompanying the dialogue. There are, maybe, three or four lines of dialogue like that. It's intentional.

Here's proof. (Yes. I checked just to make sure I wasn't mistaken)

Princess Estrella

Princess Estrella #6 · May 30th, 2018 · · ·

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What I meant was at the beginning we don't know where they are so all I can picture is floating heads.

The Psychopath

The Psychopath #7 · May 30th, 2018 · · ·

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Oh. Well, that was on purpose. I'll add details to a few areas in the dialogue to remedy that anyways.

Vaalintine

Vaalintine #8 · Jun 3rd, 2018 · · ·

Yeah, that's definetly going to incur a heavy fine. You could have just gone with some poppers w/ sound effects, but now you've gone and made everyone mad.

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