Knowing Their Place

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Setanta

Setanta #1 · May 13th, 2018 · 1 · ·

Spelling isn't great. Does need a general edit but I like the idea as a one shot.

fanreader999999

fanreader999999 #2 · May 13th, 2018 · · ·

Thin

Iron Comet

Iron Comet #3 · May 13th, 2018 · 4 · ·

I rather enjoyed this. I could see Sombra power tripping on controlling two of the Elements. And showing them off to push the fact his power cannot be broken. Only issue I saw was he struck me as the type that wants his victims to know how low they have fallen rather than wiping there minds and installing a new personality.

Michael Hudson

Michael Hudson #4 · May 13th, 2018 · · ·

8923067 I actually wholly agree, and have looked into those sorts of things for other stories. This one was a case of commissioner desire, and still seeing it being fine.

cunning_linguist

cunning_linguist #5 · May 14th, 2018 · 13 · 5 ·

Upvoted because female inferiority is hilarious.

LucarioFan2066

LucarioFan2066 #6 · Jul 6th, 2018 · 1 · ·

8923067
In some stories, the brainwashed victim still has their original mind locked deep away, fully aware of everything that's happening but unable to stop their body from doing its new task.
So Sombra could've done that; eternal torment for his victims that nopony would ever see.

Aristagtle

Aristagtle #7 · May 7th, 2019 · · ·

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Frank Herbert's Dune novels refer to that kind of thing as an abomination.

...Doesn't stop it from being kind of a kinky idea for a clopfic though.

BleedingRaindrops

BleedingRaindrops #8 · Dec 18th, 2019 · · ·

Fluttershy stood there frozen as her friend got off the floor and, on weak legs walked towards her. Fluttershy tried to say something, but her throat was still traumatized by her empathy. Nothing would come out. She couldn’t even try to resist against her captors to get away from her friend. She was helpless, her mind retreating into nothing as Rarity slipped the collar around her neck.
Fluttershy shook in horror as she felt the collar around her neck. She twitched, wanting not to believe it. That Rarity wasn’t doing this. Wasn’t like this. After all, it was Rarity. Rarity was stronger than her. She cared about her. She would never molest her. She would never hurt her just for a tyrant. No, the tendrils invading her brain were fake. She was just imagining things, and she just had to focus on her friend. She was okay. She was safe.
And then Rarity pulled away, staring into Fluttershy’s eyes as the light drained away from them before letting out a small giggle. “You taste good. Not as good as master, but you’ll do. What do you think?”

I'm guessing at some point in here Rarity has tasted Fluttershy, but you've forgotten to mention it.

OmalleyCaboose5