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Kaffeina


[aka FlutterWitch, aka MidnightChaos, aka The Witching Hour]

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The forest was a silent one, one that had experienced the joys of nature. For years and years, it survived, but the noises died out. One could walk for hours in the vast forest without encountering a single soul. For what purpose is there in a place of pure peace? Everything else had come and gone, all that was left were plants, sunlight, sky... And, one single person deep within the woods where even had there been people, none would have ever come.

When the time came, that person knew there was nothing left for her in the world and sent her prayers to the forest itself. To the trees they went, through the roots, through the ground, and out deep into the very world itself. The world was not alive, not as one would see it, but the silence in it allowed the prayer to be heard as piercing cry.

So it was, that for the first time since the very dawn of time, a prayer was answered. The Final Prayer was answered and the last one departed from a silenced world.

Chapters (10)
Comments ( 33 )

I am impressed with the quality of both description, and how it was shown the main character's emotions concerning her fate. This is certainly an excellent introduction for things to come, and I was moved by the feelings transmitted through the words typed in for our enjoyment.

I hope to read more of this tale.

Well, this second chapter does foreshadow the shenanigans to come when the two kinds meet.

I like that this story shows much promise in its future, as the quality in terms of narration and characterization it'll allow for many plots and stories to come.

I wonder though... who was the Lion who did the translocation? Ah, to elucubrate answers, and to ponder what is going on!:rainbowlaugh:

Looks interesting so far :twilightsmile:

This story is quite interesting, I must say I really wish to see more.

Heh, nice jab at Auric's story - though it is a classic, I still found it funny. I am particularly surprised that you got to use it here - as I was under the belief that the use of the folder died with the author's finishing up with his tale and moving on to other tales.

This chapter is much better made than the previous one - which suffered from too much telling rather than showing. Well, I hope to read more in the future of the main character's misadventures.

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The idea was that the last chapter was supposed to be telling, so as to bring the story to a point where I could show.

I groaned when I saw the reference to the displaced, and am fervently hoping that that's as much as you intend to go into it. This story was standing up on its own merits perfectly fine, after all.

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Aside from minor references and, at best a minor crossover if there is one, otherwise I'll make references to tokens but there won't be full crossover with anyone but my own characters if at all.

I wasn't aware this was Displaced. It's brilliantly-written. The descriptions, one could get lost in. There's so much here, quite a bit of mystery. Can't wait for more.

Oh, the plot thickens even further! :pinkiecrazy:

And I see what you did there - nice use of foreshadowing, by the way.

All that is gold does not glitter.

But I digress. This pacing is the best one for this type of story - and I for one am interested in where are you going to take this story, and where our elfish lady comes into play.

Still very interested in where this is going. And no worries. I don't mind waiting when it's good. :)

Ooh, I could feel the joy in the last paragraphs of that first section. :D

good story i say!

Can't wait for them to meet our elf fren

This is a good chapter that advances the plot, and am happy to have read it.

Also, I really liked how you employed the link between emotions with intentions in regards to the environment-altering entities like Windigoes, Heliopaths and Thunderbirds.

I must learn my lesson - to use the environment itself as a means to show the emotions in a scene.

One hell of a storm, there. And I think that first meeting's gonna wait until the elf's awake. ;)

It looked eerily similar to one of the creatures a pony from her town was so impossible obsessed with,

Well, that's Lyra for ya!

Oh moon, do you feel the way I do when day comes and you can rest? Do you feel the freedom of dancing? Of open places, where open skies and fluffy clouds greet you with joy, asking to play?

Oh my God. Luna is connected to the moon. These two have a lot in common already

"We believe this is a case for the Sparkle!" her eyes twinkled in amusement.

Oh yes, Moon-Butt, the Purplesmart is needed! Hahahahah!

Loved the chapter, and it made my day. :moustache:

I know your pain.

But back to the chapter, it's well-elaborated - with a vivid depiction of how fate, which is a fickle mistress at the best of times - and is a sign of changes to come for the elf.

I liked how so much happened in just one chapter, yet doesn't feel like an info-dump.

Will wait for the next chapter.:moustache:

lovely chapter, though I have to wonder how the griffon heir sub-plot with affect Equestia's guest.

Ooh, boy. What a time for Discord to break free.

One small thing I saw.

The problem was that she didn't have the proper equipment to help her check smaller the smaller details.

I think that first smaller needs to go.

Other than that, great chapter.

Me: (Is just waltzing down the Feed page...)
(Sees this story)
(Squees like a girl)
(Jumps in)
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