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Snowmanmelting


Names Anika! Writer, obsessive SunLight fan, MLP collector ~ I like to suffer along with my characters, hence the drama. Ha.

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Sometimes we commit mistakes and, as they say, the best thing you can do is to learn from them. Sometimes, those same mistakes can change your life, too.
Twilight Sparkle will realize this when, after a series of unfortunate events, she ends up trapped on the other side of the mirror.

Original work in Spanish here
Proofreaded by Jay Tarrant
Cover art by Weiliy

Chapters (3)
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Comments ( 26 )

Why do you want to change the cover art? It looks good to me.

Interesting title... I'll try to get to this soon.

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Wanted something less casual, I guess? Probably will stay like that for a long while :fluttershyouch:

i am really liking dis stowy keep goin!!!!:pinkiehappy:

This sounds pretty interesting.

It’s an interesting start, but you have a lot of purple prose. Not that that is bad, but it does seem like a lot of unnecessary wordage and it can be a bit distracting and sometimes confusing. Hopefully, you will explain what exactly happened to Twilight in those fifteen days before she ran into Celestia. I look forward to more.

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I've never heard of purple prose (we don't have that term in Spanish) so I had to look it up. Never paid attention to such detail, I'll keep it in mind for when rereading this chapter and the ones that follow. Thanks for the criticism.
As for what happened, that will be explained in due time, don't worry. :raritywink:
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Glad to see I managed to keep you all intrigued by this chapter, next one will probably come out soon. :twilightsmile:

Ok I am loving this story, keep it up!

This is a really good story, and once again very well written. I am really enjoying things so far and looking forward to reading even more. Once again, it seems like you have a very well thought out and executed story that will be a very good read.

So unicorn Twilight stumbled through the mirror during the Royal Wedding? Interesting, I'll watch how this goes.

Well, seems the two equines in disguise have to start a rescue then, Cadance couldn't be found without Twilight landing in the caves, what means no Love ex Machina, so Chrysalis won.

Although only as long as you plan to follow this logical route in the very... end? Middle? Who knows. I always found it very confusing that many authors take the route of how Cadance and Shining still somehow manage to banish the Changelings for some reason, even though no Twilight meant no rescue.

But that's music of the distant future, now we have some Equestria Girls with what looks like a twist. :ajsmug: Sunset doesn't seem to be the selfish brat like her original version.

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In the meantime, I have no plans to show what happens in Equestria, at least not in this story (Part of it has to do with me not being able to write ponies at all :facehoof: ) So I'll leave it to the reader's imagination, or to anyone who wants to write their own theories.

And yup, Sunset is nicer here. All I can say is: a lot of stuff can happen in 5 years :trixieshiftright:

this story is very good update soon curious where it goes

and hope you cover the stuff with sunset and how she got here and every thing

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Thanks! And thanks for the watch too :raritywink:
I have the beginning of the next chapter already written, so I'll try finish and update as soon as my inspiration lets me :twilightblush:
By how she got here you mean the human world or Celestia's house? If its the former then I'll say it was the same way than in canon, the later is another story that will be covered in due time :trixieshiftright:

I'm glad you finally updated. Keep it up.

yay update but umm Celestia whacha doin

Always glad to read a new chapter of your story. Keep up the good work. :twilightsmile:

This chapter does read noticeably more fluently than the previous ones. Not that it was terrible beforehand. Certainly a hell of a lot better than I could ever write in Spanish (the ubiquity of the subjunctive mood just feels so unnatural to us Germanic types).

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Oh, thank god! I tried to adapt everything as if it was originally written in English (like the last part of this chapter) and with the other chapters you can tell its a more literal translation :facehoof: I'll probably check them out and make a few fixes, so if you have any suggestions I'm all ears!
Btw, you write in Spanish too? :fluttershyouch:

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Glad you liked it! Haven't got around to write the next one yet, but soon! :raritywink:

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Oh gods, no. I speak Spanish like a mentally deficient toddler. Well, I’ve worked on enough construction sites in South Texas that I can curse with some fluency, albeit with terrible Northern Mexican grammar.

I’m just impressed by anyone who can master a second language well enough to write well enough to fool a native speaker. Especially this ridiculously sprawling mess of a language we have here.

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Aahh! Well, if you like it I'd recommend you learn it.
Non-English speakers are kinda forced to learn English cuz it's a mandatory language if you want to interact with the rest of the world. But its great, Personally I really like it :twilightsmile:

Bonny work with this story as well. The premise is great, and the steady pace it takes through Twilight's experiences and thoughts makes it good and immersive. Wee character notes, like dwelling on how many colour shades occur in her bruises exactly, really bring it to life. A few hiccups with word choice and grammar in the first two chapters, but the third reads better and more fluently. Nicely done, and keep it up. :twilightsmile:

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Thank you for your small critique, those are always welcome :raritywink: I'm glad so far you're enjoying the story, its taking me quite some effort to pull it together.
And the two previous chapters were translated before I started an English course. So yeah, I have to reread them and check for mistakes :twilightsheepish:

When Twilight found herself, again, falling into the reality of the dream world, she did it with an extra bit of certainty that maybe, after so many misfortunes, after so many cloudy days, finally some sun would come out.

the sun’ll come out tomorrow bet your bottom dollar that tomorrow there’ll be sun.

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wait I was on time for an update seriously?!

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