Spitfire's Retirement

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MetalBrony20

MetalBrony20 #1 · May 2nd, 2018 · 3 · ·

This... This I like very much, love how Spitfire just degenerates from fit and active to being a complete slob. Would love to see some more one shots from you.

Amdazzler

Amdazzler #2 · May 3rd, 2018 · 1 · ·

Great story. :) I too would like to see more one shots like this one here.

The Wind King

The Wind King #3 · May 3rd, 2018 · · ·

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Thanks guys, I'm not too sure about more one-shots any time soon, I kinda want to avoid developing a formula for writing these, so I'm chucking about options and plans, and I'm gonna get back to writing my semi-serous stuff as well.

That degeneration, I tried to get it through that Spitfire was, not quite depressed as such, but definitely not in total control of her impulses, and she had to be doing something. Without flight, or exercise, or any knowledge of the city outside, she used eating and reading as a way to mask her boredom/ennui, but reading quickly lost appeal. Leading to her using eating as a crutch for physical achievement.

Hilariously enough, Sweet Deal was originally supposed to be a changeling. Cloudsdale Confection Co-Operative, being a front for Cloudsdale Changeling Community, and the switch to him being just a slimy business pony with no real idea for the consequences of his actions was last minute, simply because, well, doing "Midnight's Wildcard Feast" already, don't need more changelings fattening ponies.

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