• Member Since 11th Apr, 2012
  • offline last seen Aug 22nd, 2018

DoctorOMalley


Short Bio is too short

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First (Possibly only) one shot attempt. This is a 2nd person fic between you and Rainbow Dash. As with all my stories, any and all criticism is welcome.

You and your best friend, Rainbow Dash, live together after it was decided to be easier on both parties. After she gets an audition for the Wonderbolts, your true feelings start to show themselves. Will you two work it out, or will it end badly?

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Comments ( 15 )

Before I read, Rainbow is my favorite character, even though I hate her. In my stories, she is my mortal enemy.:twilightangry2: She better die.

:twilightoops::twilightangry2: No...can't...kiss...mortal...enemy! :pinkiesick: Good...story...though:fluttershbad:

Short, cute, and straight-forward. I enjoyed this!

My only complaint would be that it felt a little bit rushed, and it could have used a bit more details. I would also have liked to delve into the 'my' thoughts a bit more. We don't get so much insight as to 'my' feelings and worries.

Nothing crippling to the story though. Nice job!

Great story. Short, sweet, and to the point. :moustache:

Good story. A bit more detail would have been nice, but this was very good for the time spent on it. :twilightsmile:

I know that commercial. I mute it every time. If I give them money, they're gonna run more ads anyway.

God, I just absolutely loved it. Il definitely read this again some time. Watched :pinkiehappy:

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If she were to die, I'd throw the 'Tragedy' tag in there. An idea I had was to attempt suicide, end up in the hospital, and then have the events play out, but I couldn't word that well.

This was a cute story, but I do have one minor gripe.

YOU WRITE APPLEJACK WEIRD!! dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/emoticons/sillyfilly_Applejack.png
...I'm sorry, I know I shouldn't be blurting out things like that, but I die a little inside whenever anypony replaces "I" with "Ah." :pinkiesick:
Still, you write a good story dl.dropbox.com/u/31471793/FiMFiction/Applejack_lolface.png

Hey buddy! Thanks for writing an awesome story about me! Hugs and kisses for you! :rainbowkiss:

See, even the star agrees! :3

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I forgot to replace one 'I' with Ah, so is that okay? :D

@Dash: No problem, I think. Is it bad that it's awkward talking to you about this?

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That's okay, by all means, don't let me tell you how to write. Do what you want, really xD

Eh, whatever... :rainbowlaugh:

awwwww this story broke my d,aawwww machine :rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss::rainbowkiss:

“Hey (Your name), what’s going on?”

NoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoNoFuckingNo!

You don't do that.

Ever.

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