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Obsi


A german breezie, writing stories

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Tartarus is a real place. A real, hellish dimension in which the dead dwell, far removed from the realms of the living.

But today, Applebloom and her fellow Crusaders will breach through that barrier and break out Applebloom's parents! The only question:

Where will fate find tree sap for them in literal hell?

Chapters (1)
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Comments ( 23 )

Fun and well written.

I enjoyed

Aww, this was a cute little romp. I enjoyed your cat jokes.

A fun one-shot. Could maybe use one last review for grammar/spelling errors, but other than that I enjoyed it much and felt it cute and heartwarming. :twilightsmile:

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Many thanks.
I tried my best to proofread it, but I am german, so I knew things would slip under the radar. And my friend who usually proofreads for me is stressed enough at the moment, I didn't want to dump this sudden child of my brain-orgy on him

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It's all good, I know how having a spur of the moment idea and not having your editor around to help can be, especially when one is excited to share said story. It's all good though, from what I've seen many of the more popular stories on here are not free from errors like that. So all-in-all I think this hilarity awesomeness does still deserve some more attention. Hope your friend can de-stress soon! :twilightsmile: (For their sake.)

Poor Cerby

CCC

So..... Fluttershy is married to a pony even more shy than herself? And she's Scootaloo's mother?

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uh... what? Where'd you get that from? ^^

CCC

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Well, which other mares in Ponyville are incredibly shy enough to be Scootaloo's mother?

...I don't believe there's a mare more shy than Fluttershy.

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well... honestly, you might have put more thought into that joke than me. I did not intend to suggest anypony as her parents, I was just doing a gag ^^

...

You know I am surprised that in this fandom, this idea has taken this long to show up. (Or at least, this is the first time I've seen it as I recall...)

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I know, right? I never looked for it, but the idea for this story was built on the realization that in Equestria, the underworld is a real place one can go to. I think one could really capitalize on this. What does it mean to a society, if you can quite literally visit your dead relatives? can you bust them out? Can you reserve a special suite in the afterlive? ^^

The big fear of death is that you cannot know what happens to you... so how would you look out on life if you not only knew there is an afterlife, but can also let someone describe it to you.

Buuuut, instead I made this, it was funnier. And its only a random thing that popped into my head, my main series is called Void Trials go check it out

This is a very good one-shot.

So, I finally got around to reading this. And I have to say, it's a pretty darn good one-shot! Everyone seems in character, the jokes are funny, it's touching, and it even has a good premise to boot. I suppose the end bit about "Oh, you can come visit anytime" makes me wonder why Apple Bloom never knew about this before. Are the Apples just really poorly informed? Is everyone? Is it just not common knowledge?!

Still, I don't take that too seriously. This is a pretty solid story, pal. Nice job. :pinkiesmile:

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thanks for the feedback and for being the 300th reader. WHOOP WHOOP

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Well, what a co-inky-dink that is!

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thank you :twilightsmile:

Heh. I like the short description:

Tartarus is a real place. Upon learning that, the Cutie Mark Crusaders make a bold decision. They will free Applebloom's parents and get their Cutie- they'll free Appleblooms parents

They got their priorities straight for once. :twilightsheepish:

Her magic grabbed a few books, lifting each up as she listed off [...] ”

What, does her magic have a will of its own?

Joke's aside, nice little story

Wait! What happened to Opal?!?!?!?!

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you'd have to look in the bag to find out...
https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Schr%C3%B6dinger%27s_cat

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