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CastASpellLiana


Mostly an artist but I write stuff sometimes

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Not too long after the events of Forgotten Friendship, Sunset Shimmer decides to pay a visit to Equestria. Being the good friend that she is, Twilight realizes that Sunset still have doubts about her past actions that are yet to be snuffed out. With the support from Twilight and Starlight, Sunset realizes that the present is the best time to make more memories rather than to dwell on what has passed.

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"I know!" Twilight giggled. "I was so distracted by the noise I poured hot sauce into my cup instead of actual punch!"

Silly Twivi

All in all, a good story, also Twilight is general is shown very cute!

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Thank you <3 Glad you enjoyed it ^^

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She was very adorable though during that episode! Worth the silliness X3

Aw thank you! Happy you enjoyed it! <3

Great story ^^.

This was okay. It moved a little quickly, I thought.

It also struggled a bit with grammar. I'd recommend starting with this handy guide from this handy guy:

This is a recurring issue with your writing. If a speech tag follows after the dialogue, there should be no capitalization. If an action tag follows, capitalization is required. Here’s a very useful list of examples:

Attribution of Dialogue (Dialogue Tagging)

Wrong:
✖ "Hi there," the pink pony grinned. (It should be a period: ‘grinned’ isn’t a ‘speaking’ verb.)
✖ "Hi there." The pink pony said. (This should be a comma; no capitalization should be used)
✖ "Hi there"! the pink pony shouted! (Punctuation of dialogue belongs inside the quotes.)
✖ "Hi there!" The pink pony shouted! (Don’t capitalize "the"; treat the "!" as a comma.)

Correct:
✔ "Hi there," the pink pony giggled. (She giggled while saying the words.)
✔ "Hi there." The pink pony giggled. (She said those words, then giggled.)
✔ "Hi there." The pink pony grinned. (The word 'grinned' isn't a 'speaking' verb.)
✔ "Hi there!" the pink pony shouted. (Exclamations and queries replace the comma.)

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