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Mister Phoenix


Since the show over, I'm gone, no more stories from me

Comments ( 34 )

Hey, it's an AU, you can have Pear Butter alive in it and I wouldn't bat an eye about it.
I kind of want to see a sequel of this using the other mothers.
Overall, it was really good and I liked it a lot.

Added this to favourites, will read this ASAP, I promise, plus if time will write a review.

>spike is going through a heat
Never change, fimfiction virgins.

Twilight, AJ, & Rainbow, you sneaky little devils! That's one incredible Mother's Day gift they send over in their time of need! Glorious job!

Comment posted by ShamanLord deleted May 10th, 2018

I don't get the fascination with hug breasts, but to each their own I suppose. I came (no pun intended) here for the impregnation/marking myself, and I've heard plenty of people call that weird. So, who am I to judge?

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Same here. Anything over a D cup is obscene to me. Yet I've seen stories where their breasts are larger then their bodies.

A nice, sexy story. A few typos, but not bad.

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When I write these ttpe of stories, I normally use a Anime breast chart. But I still day the worst thing I see is Jessica Rabbit from Who Framed Roger Rabbit

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I've come across stories where their breasts were 4-6 times larger then hers.

My only criticism is the redundant sentences, a lot of things are repeated.
Other than that it's an okay smutfic

In the story description

if a mare spends to much time around him

should be "too"

Clop for the sake of clop...

Escalated too fast for my liking but otherwise a good one. Seriously, the start was nice and slow but then suddenly everything starts going at terminal velocity... so damn fast...

I wonder if anyone else guessed this was based off a palcomix comic.

Or let me rephrase. It has some references to that comic.

Not bad, very hot at times and steamy in others.

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'Where did I put my cider?'Pear asked in thought, looking around.'Oh, there's it is, next to Velvet.'

Pear stood up, the water that covered her large breast, once she stood up, Windy Whistles and Twilight Velvet took see Pear Butter's triple E-Cup breasts. The earth pony mare started to lean over to Velvet, to grab the apple cider that sat next to the unicorn mare.

'Is she going to kiss me? What do I do? Oh, Celestia, she has an amazing body.' Velvet thought, the alcohol and the heat and lust all mix together that flow within the unicorn mare.

Velvet decided to stand up and press her lips against Pear's lips.

You mean that?

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I found it kinda similar

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I mean if you’ve seen the one with Knux, Sonia, and Amy. Then yeah you can definitely see the similarities.

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What did you mean it was similar to?

Comment posted by Grimreaper2000 deleted Jul 12th, 2018

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I thought it was similar to the one with spike and the main 6 I guess

Is by any chance this based on the Sonic Comic of the same name by Palcomix?

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Nah! I wanna see a sequel where Twilight, Applejack and Rainbow Dash get involved.

"I'm just wondering if our mothers are enjoying the present we gave them," Twilight said, Rainbow gave a nod in agreement.

Oh they are...they most certainly are:ajsmug:.

Anyone else reading this on Mother’s Day 2020 and still wishes for a sequel?

A sequel would be amazing. Even without the sex, and just a slice of life/ romance between the 4.

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