(Sorry if there's no photo, but when I was editing, the page wouldn't let me upload it, so I have to settle with a photoless story, but I made sure to tell knighty about it.)

That's fine, you're stories are good enough that I rather read the story than the clop parts. I do wish you good luck on you newest story, I'll wait until it's complete, because your stories just feel better to read when they are completed. Have fun dude, and I can't wait until later chapters.

WHY CAN'T I HAVE GOOD WRITING SKILLS LIKE YOU DO ;-;
In all seriousness though I absolutely LOVE this so far, I hope to see more of it in the future, especially the story bits

Good Luck

-FullmoonFan

Excellent start but holy crap the beginning was depressing.

Who’s next after Rara?

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I didn't exactly have this writing talent to begin with, it took some time and practice. I have faith that with some proper practice, I have full confidence that you can become a great writer, too. I'm glad you liked this chapter so far

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thank you very much

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My editor and I were thinking about doing Queen Novo next. He seems excited to write about her

Great start dude!

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It just doesn't feel like I get any better at writing when I do write. It feels like anytime I write something it's absolutely crap. I do my best to add detail but I feel like it's too much, or very little. I can never find the balance between. I also cannot good verbs to add to like "Hey!" Apple Bloom shouted; as an example. It's tough

Alright amd thought it was princess skystar

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When it comes to details in the story, you have a choice between you explaining the details of a character or a few characters and how they look, or even the details of a certain places in a town or city, and maybe certain conditions like how it feels around there and what's happening, and it's also important to whether or not have the characters you have in your story explain their's or someone else's backstory about what's been going on or what happened already.

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I guess that's true.

Another problem is how should I explain the character's appearance? Should I say what they look like/what they are wearing or explain how they look through details like "The water flowed through his dark red hair."?

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If you're just introducing the characters themselves, it's always necessary to explain what they look like and sometimes what they where, depending on whether they're a big part of the story. If they're either minor , I usually describe their appearence, minus the clothes they wore

I can only guess where you came up with the title for this story, because I did that too.

Can't wait to see the rest of it.

https://theloststoryteller32.deviantart.com/art/Bolt-Jr-Rainbow-Factory-740160947

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Actually, the title of the story came from a certain line in the song "Always There" from Lady and the Tramp 2

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Alright, I guess I'll do that then. If you want you can be a proofreader/editor of the story. If you decline that's perfectly fine.

What you think of Bolt Jr

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it's pretty good

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I accept your offer

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Now that I didn't know.

Thanks

only for the soul purpose of profit.

people sang songs for the soul purpose of bringing joy and happiness

(I believe the word you're looking for is "sole.")

You sat up on your knees and were relieved that you still had the dog and cat statues. You

Umm... Was there supposed to be more to that last sentence? It kind of got cut off abruptly.

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my bad

WAIT?! Did Granny Smith Died?

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in this story, she did

This story went out fine, overall I like it so far.

Modern day music has been getting rather dull these days. Every day, more modern music is made, only for the soul purpose of profit. Music just wasn’t the same like it was back in the good ol’ days. Back then, people sang songs for the soul purpose of bringing joy and happiness to the people around them. To make them feel like there’s hope. Some people listen to old-fashioned music just so they can hang onto what little hope that have left.

Ok Boomer

It was when you reached middle school that you asked your parents to sign you up for music lessons, helping you learn to play instruments such as the guitar. However you learned that your skills were most efficient in playing the piano. Every day, you would practice so you would be able to effectively play Reach For The Light by Steve Winwood.

Aw, that's cool, wish I could listen to it.

Life in high school was tough, but it was an adventurous experience, no doubt about it. There was a few talent shows and school concerts just like there was back in middle school. The only difference was how almost all of the performers were rude and overbearing. They kept boasting about how only bands can make it in the music world.

Katy Perry, Justin Timberlake, Eminem, Pitbull, Ke$ha, Lady Gaga, Kelis, and Mariah Carey: Am I a joke to you?

RIP Granny Smith ???? - 2018

She will be missed...

Now if it was me at that talent show. I would have sang "Radio Nowhere" by Bruce Springsteen "The Boss"

The people who came to the bar mostly did so in order to escape from work and drink their stress away. Others just wanted to have a good time with friends or celebrate a promotion. The guys at the bar didn’t mind hearing you play the piano. They even kept saying you should be in Hollywood instead of in a place like this.

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Season 8 I presumed?