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I really do need to.

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What about my comment about the potion? Are you gonna reveal that in the end or leave it up in the air?

Also, cant wait for more. Maybe you could do a SPike x TImberwolf story? The Timberwolf could have been born an anthro, and as a result is an outcast.

Just thinking.

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I haven't decided yet. But I Might reveal it at the end

also that is a wicked cool Idea

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There, I did some slight editing. Best I can do

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Yes!!!!! glad you like the idea!!

I myself am in the middle of writing a story with anthro timberwolves. ITs called A Man's Furry Lovers.

And cant wait for more.

PS HAve you heard of Bunnicula the vampire rabbit. He has his own tv series. Its pretty good.

Spike and Spitfire make an interesting couple.
I would be intrigued to see how their relationship develops after the effect of the love potion wears of.

Nice story overall, although i would suggest to reduce the pacing a little,
maybe by adding a bit more description or exposition to the scenes and dialogs.

Hope you plan to continue this for a bit longer.

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I only promise to try

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I don't

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I went back and extended the kissing scene in chapter 3, is that better?

A scene I saw that so similar.

"I never accepted this" Spitfire smiled and patted his back

"It's this or spending the rest of your life doing a bunch of stuff for an Alicorn that's too lazy to teleport and get stuff in less than a minute." Spike looked at her

"True."

"Also this is a paying job."

"And just like that, I can live with this."

I can see that happening in some way

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You might try paperrater. It a free website that can edit your story.

I use it to edit my story, A Reluctant Herdstallion.

Misspelled 'dodged' as dogged