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Airy Words


Proofreader for Goldfur, vdrake77, and KevinItk. Occasional spin-off writer.

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What if first contact between civilizations went much cuter different than anyone could have expected?

With Goldfur's permission, an alternate version of the last section of his Cosmic Lotus Chapter 17: First Contact

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Comments ( 15 )

dawwwww

Too cute for words. I could so picture Forestwalker playing with Skyborn, even without the picture.

I actually didn’t initially imagine the two lying down like that, but Foxenawolf had a vision and it came out great. I modified the story a bit to make it work and the result was an improvement!

never underestimate the power of the Dot Warner Effect!

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Dot's got nuthin' on Skyborn! That colt is cuteness personified (at least in this situation).

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As Radiance Point is well aware....

OH FUR HER WEAKNESS CUBS

The only viable defense send in some chakat cubs to entice the ponies

"lied down" should be "lay down". "lied" is the past tense of "told a lie", not "lie on something".

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Good catch! Got that fixed.

You've used her instead of hir nearly every time, on the Pegasus side of the 'conversation.'

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Ack! You're right! Found all the places where "her" turns into "hir" and "she" turns into "shi".

Thanks!

adult-onset diabetes after this much sweetness is defiantly a huge problem after this chapter.
a super good version for this chapter grate work.

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