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Taken-By-Insanity


I write and read, mostly read. I’m more active on Discord nowadays so don’t expect much from me.

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Join Midnight Demon as she tries to understand why everyone remembers her while she has only existed since Camp Everfree and deals with Midnight Sparkle and Demon Sunset along with Gaea Everfree in her head, although the last one isn't a problem since (spoiler) she's dealt with in the first chapter.

My little pony will be involved in later chapters. The profanity is for some songs only. Actual talking with profanity would be above uncommon and below rare.

Chapters (3)
Comments ( 14 )

8831183
Meh. ~Surprises are everywhere no matter where you go~

Whos the angel?
Also trixie's eyes are purple. ;)

Better but you're still rushing, and using run-on sentences as ammunition. Also, never color-code dialogue; it's incredibly annoying. If the reader can't tell who's speaking when, there's something wrong. It's also best to pick a perspective and stick with it. It is possible to use different perspectives but the character's mannerisms have to be distinct enough that if you switch, the audience will notice.

You're improving though at least. I still don't understand your fascination with demons and people becoming them.

8831562
The run-on sentence curse will never leave, will it? Maybe one day.
I'll change the color so it's all the same one. Except for their first time talking, you'll never find it again when I'm done. :)

The fascination with demons, meh. I just like demons, there's not much to it to be honest. It might be because it's slightly original, at least to me, I don't know.

Not to rush, but when are you gonna post the next chapter for this since you kinda just left us on a cliffhanger

9014330
Kinda dealing with writer's block for this story at the moment. I might have a new chapter posted tomorrow or the next day but it could possibly take longer.
I'm also very sorry for making you have to wait.

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