A being from another world gets thrown into a one filled with ponies eventually turning into one. This brave new world is filled with adventure, companionship and glory all of which will shape this young pony as he walks the path of life.
Follow the story of this young pony as he finds his place in his new home. One adventure at a time and with friends he will meet along the way.
Sex tag: Because of suggestive themes and innuendo.
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The start is very sudden, which I get the feeling it's supposed to be, but if he's originally not a pony (which the description seems to make it out to be) then why isn't he freaking out the same second he notice he has a new body or can use magic? Now, I'm writing this only a few paragraphs in so it might be explained. But if it's because he can't remember his former self shouldn't he at least be confused or scared for a bit longer?
I think you meant 'them' here
Shouldn't it be "I'm dead aren't I?" or do people use am in sentences like this?
My god? I do this as well in my stories without realizing it but would a pony from Equestria not say something like "By Celestia!" or something similar?
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Fixed! Thank you for pointing them out.
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You got a point there, so I did some quick editing.
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Np
Also, your story's title, FIre looks wrong. Shouldn't it be fire? Sorry for nitpicking
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Whoops! Fixed that as well, thank you for pointing it out.
How come the story is on hiatus, just curious
I'm working on an old story that I wasn't able to finish and publish. But don't worry I'll probably continue this story in about a month or so.
Well the first three chapter where really had to go though, but chapter 4 and 5 were actually starting to get interesting and I would be willing to see more at this point. I honestly don't see this as a HIE as the guy seem to adjust to the world way to quickly and we don'T know much about him in the start and his amnesia didn't help, but again it got way better after a while.
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I am honestly considering postponing future chapters so I can rework chapters 1, 2 and 3.
Better writing but there are often redundancies, like saying the characters name again right in the next sentence, or that along boring identical sentence structure and do the same for the following one, like starting with. You might want to consider that aesthetic for your writing to give it a good flow.
Why was this cancelled?
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I lost interest. I really don't know how to put it, but I just don't feel like continuing this story.