Take Time To Spread A Little Magic! 🪄✨️
You wake up next to Pinkie Pie, only to find out that some hide away the tears with a smile.
Hidden thoughts away from public eyes, hidden talks behind closed doors.
A smile can mean many things, but understanding can save a life.
Art By Pony Echo.
Part of The Awoken Series.
Made Popular On 3/26/18
Featured On 3/26/18
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That was very deep and though provoking. Sometimes we forget that even the cheeriest among us can have sad thoughts.
Remember to give them your love and a hug!
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Glad you enjoyed!
Very good, far too short. It almost felt like you were trying to limit the word count. You're an incredible writer, you just need to take a bit more time and deepen your stories. Even just a few more paragraphs of detail would've made this an absolutely incredible story. As it stands... I have to say it's kind of basic, as far as these types of stories go. It started to feel like a poem at the end too, which is not a bad thing. Overall, just take more time, and add more detail. Why she might be sad, what "You" might do about it. things like that. Really good, and definitely keep at it. You've got a knack for this, just need a bit of practice.
-Zer
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I have limited myself to about 1.5k words.
These are in a way just openers, Each part has a sequel coming. Which will be anywhere from 5k to 10k words, I've done this due to Pony echos art has a bright side or as I see it a opening drawing. Followed by a more darker, longer look of the same drawing. But thank you for the input, but if you are looking for the deeper meaning...wait for part two to each story.
Also check out the art on PE's page, it is awesome!
Love the input, get a blast of energy when people take time to just chat and point stuff out to me.
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Ahh, that makes much more sense, glad to hear there's more coming. I'm a bit of an editor myself, so I like to give pointers when I can. Can't wait for more
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Yeah twelve stories in all to this series. The tiny openers are kind of a way so that the readers will know which to come back and read, so far my freak story is in last place lol.
Totally enjoyed the pointers, can't get better without knowing where you fail at.
Any chance this story was based on this song? I got serious vibes that reminded me of it.
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Nope.
But I know it will help lots with writing the sequel now.
Once again I can feel comfort form a story.
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Also luvin the avi.
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Thanks