(MLP/Dissidia Remake)
Cosmos, the goddess of Harmony. Chaos, God of Discord. A war between two divine powers, with soldiers caught in the middle fight a bloody conflict that seems to be lasting forever.
A hero has awakened in a new world where harmony is of great abundance. The goddess has tasked him to protect it from the God of Discord. While apart from his comrades, he is not alone. Six friends of this world while they appear powerless, actually have strength in their numbers and share a powerful bond. They agree that the conflict must end before their world is engulfed in flame. The Warrior must seek a secret power in this world that only the ponies know of, he must figure it out by helping them through their everyday adventures of day to day life.
But the God of Discord knows of this and will stop at nothing to destroy this beautiful world, by sending his own soldier to lay waste to it. Can the Warrior of Light and his allies protect Equestria and end the conflict?
Holy shit, Dissidia and MLP
(will read later)
You have not read all of 012's reports and played the cofessions of the creator have you?
Other than that I expect greatness and Gilimesh.
GABRANTH & SQUALL ARE BEST CHARACTERS
Well, it does need to go through a rather extensive grammar check, many of the early sentences don't need to be their own paragraphs, a number of places with commas should actually be periods, the tense changes from Past to Present rather frequently towards the end, and there needs to be more indication as to where each of the three scenes begins and ends. I didn't realize at first that Cosmos was the one talking until she mentioned the Warrior of Light. Also, how big are the humans compared to the ponies? I don't know why, but I've always been under the impression that humans are quite a bit larger than the ponies.
If this sounds at all sarcastic or condescending it wasn't intended to be. As I say to many authors who need a bit of help, I give my criticism only to help you improve as a writer and not to be mean (unlike some of the helpful readers of Ponychan who can be terribly cruel though totally accurate with their criticism). One of the more surprisingly useful tools in your arsenal is simply to read the story out loud and listen to when the pauses sound like they should be periods or commas, and also to hear if the story flows well.
Otherwise, it is a good start and I like where it's going. As the Nameless Pony said, Equestria is weaved into the world of Dissidia really well.
Ah! It's finished... well, sort of.
Looks like I'll be having something to read tonight. I'll give you my thoughts on it as soon as I'm done. By the way, are you going to name all the chapters after Final Fantasy songs?
did anyone els find this right after thinking what a crossover between dissidia final fantasy and mlp fim
I want warrior to cut Gilda's head off now.
And I have read this story somewhere.........
So Kefka broke the seal on Nightmare Moon?
got to say at first it seemed kinda slow but as it went on things got a little more interesting and with this last chapter things really got interesting. Cant wait to see where you go form here
ooohhhh fuck
Good story.
I will check out chapter 11 when I finish making a chapter for my OC story.
Are you going to do all the episodes?
I like it
liking the story still keep it up and try to update often
Your story with Warrior tagging along with the Season 1 episodes is very smart and how Warrior is treated like a character! I wish there would be more interaction of ponies with the other Cosmos heroes.
Can't wait for the next chapter.
You really need to work on your writing. There are a lot of errors.
New chapter
Nice chapter.
You messed up a word. The word "fallow" is meant to be "follow". But good chapter as always.
and the sad part? they'll never see them agian
Uhh...
...how did I get here?
wow.... so Gabranth was the first to enter equestria
nice
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actually I think the report is referring to Cid and his wife.
Why Cliffy.
Oh we'll it's a good story
Warrior x twilight?
As long as it isn't too lovey dovey, I'm good.
I don't see why not. Oh and by the way,
Nice use of the KH:COM poem. I take it you're a fan of the KH series?
What Linkonpark100 said.
I think onion knight shouldn't of been killed I mean just think about how he would react to a land full of ponies.
Sure pair him up! Dashie
not to sure on the pair up thing. The main thing i'm wondering about is how will you handle the change from 12th the 13th cycle. Since the losing side dosnt rember anything, warrior will end losing his memories of equstetria.
Also I this story is mostly about warrior but any other Final Fantasy heroes be entering Equstetria? I mean it kinda struck me as odd that during the pandemonium incident only warrior was there to help.
this was a great chapter, man
i look foward to seeing more chapters in the later future 
When is onion knight gonna re appear I wanna know UKJjeuxdidheydhzhuUcsusgUidhhushshHjududuuUudud
What just happened????
I don't like the look of this....
huh..... guess ultimecia attacked celestia
Uh oh!! Things aren't looking too good for the heroes...oh, and one more thing, WHY THE HAY DID YOU DO ANOTHER CLIFFHANGER?!?!?
Manikins of the ponies eh? Not a bad idea. You going to show them fighting? If you are, and unless you already have names for them how's these for you:
Applejack: Harmonious Farmer
Fluttershy: Harmonious Caretaker
Pinkie Pie: Harmonious Entertainer
Rainbow Dash: Harmonious Athlete
Rarity: Harmonious Fashionista or Harmonious Designer
Twilight Sparkle: Harmonious Scholar
Princess Celestia: Harmonious Goddess
Princess Luna: Harmonious Nightwatcher
Princess Cadence: Harmonious Foalsitter
Shining Armour: Harmonious Guard
Trixie: Harmonious Magician
So, if you wanna use those names, go for it, I'm sure you get why they all have the same 'Harmonious' name. I look forward to seeing how the 012 Warriors of Cosmos handle things.
ultimecia is an idiot. she thinks that she can weild the elements as a weapon even through the bearers? and destroy them really? they've been destroyed before, they just get better.
So... Celestia is becoming hitler...
That's nice
