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Izzy_


Am I good at writing stories? No, no I am not.

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Sunset is struggling to cope with her nightmares and it's now been years since THAT incident.

After high school ended and all of her friends parted ways to pursue their ambitions and goals, Sunset decided to go back to Equestria.
It was all going well at first, until she started having feelings towards her mentor and more importantly, the fate of Equestria was layed in their hooves.

Chapters (8)
Comments ( 27 )

This sounds really good. I can't wait to read more.

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Hah, thanks.
I was really scared of publishing because I've never been the best at stories or grammar, but you saying that really reassures me

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No problem. The story sounds really good but the SunLight part is what I'm looking forward to.

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Who isn't looking forward to sunlight? Sunlight's the best! hopefully it'll end up as good as I'm hoping, i really don't wanna disappoint

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I'm sure you won't and it's my OTP of MLP. And my profile picture proves it.

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Same here, Sunlight's my favourite, I'm a bit worried I might run out of sunlight soon tho, nothings sounds like more of a nightmare than that

I for one am enjoying this story. Very interested where this goes. :)

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Ahh, thank you! I just hope that what I have in mind both turns out well and for the simple fact that people will like it.

You forgot to add a period at the end of the last sentence in the synopsis. Will other Equestria Girls characters appear in this story?

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Oh, thanks! I'll do it now. And no, just Sunset. I'm sorry

Now things are getting interesting. Keep it up.

you think after so many invasions that Equestria would ramp up the guards.

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Maybe they did but they got to them first, you never know.

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Sometimes when I edit I accidentally miss a period or a capital somewhere, but I usually never leave a noun without a capital letter.
I've thought about it, but I think I’d rather try editing on my own. It's not like I'm astoundingly bad, there is sometimes a bit of repetition in my work because I can't think of another way to describe it but other than that I'm not sure.

Sunset was greeted with Twilight galloping around like it was the end of the work

World*

"Oh he's helping rarity with one of her projects again...

"It is our pleasure princess Celestia, the journey was great..."

Capitalize

She laughed halfheartedly, “You say that like nothing ever bad happens to me,"

Bad ever*

I’m getting hallucinations now?? If I didn’t know any better I would say I was going insane, but then again, I probably am.

Is there supposed to be two?

Twilight decided to ignore her friend’s reaction, she looked forward and began eating her food,

Both commas should be periods

Twilight paused and stared at Sunset play with her food...

Playing*

Rainbow looked at Sunset, “What’s up with hothead?” the rainbow-haired mare questioned, “She’s not usually this irritatingly quiet.”

Maned*

"And doubt it, I always mess up some way or another."

And I doubt it*

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Thank you, I'll change it as soon as I have the motivation to do so

Technically Rainbow and Fluttershy were the rude ones. Talking about someone as if they aren’t in the room is generally frowned upon.

Well if it makes you feel better I think the premise sounds good. Please respond to this comment.

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To be honest, when it comes to publishing things I've always been worried about what other people think so it always stopped me from wanting to carry on with stories or even posting a picture/drawing. Because I felt like not posting at all is better than one person disliking it. I don't know, I just wish it wasn't like that because I know that's not how it works

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Haha, thank you. :)

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I have a story saved on my computer that I don't think I'd ever published in fear of being laughed at or called stupid. And then there are these stories that I have published that I'm afraid to carry on for the same reason. It's just that I hope to satisfy everyone while reading chapters of a story I've made but I know I can't please everyone. But knowing that someone out there doesn't like what I'm doing makes me scared to carry on in fear that the story will and up turning out rubbish.
It's that paranoia of if one person distastes it, many many others will. But if one person likes it I only think THAT person likes it. It's kind of unfair haha

The amber mare's eyes darted all around her friend with a look of annoyance and slight anger. She wasn't going to carry on this fight, she'll lose in the end anyway.

in the end it doesnt even matter

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