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KitsuneRisu
Somedays, I sit, looking at the stars. I muse and wonder. I meditate and reflect. And I find the miracle in a new day of life. Especially since I swallowed so much glass the day before.
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*Waits for DPV111's inevitable ragebombing*
Two likes and it's been up for five minutes. Not bad. I must warn you though. Many people will rage at this.
Have a stache to prepare thyself.
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Ready and waiting.
974870 Here they come!
Party canon ready!
*Rushes the stage with a pitch fork while bloody angry!! Just as the reader is about to assault the writer they suddenly turn to direct the pitch fork the other way.* You have my fork!!... Until things get hairy and then I'm hiding under the sofa with Fluttershy... What, I'm a lover not a fighter! But I will stand here and look all intimidating until then.
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Awesome. Thanks =D Now I can poke people who get near my ice cream. =D
974950>>974954 You poked me. That hurts. Great. Now my bloods in the custard.
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I do not rage-bomb... I criticize.
EDIT: No, I take that back:
^WTF. WTF is that shit?! OOC! Characterization rape! Change that NOW or I will draw your OC's ass on my monitor and shove a pencil into it.
A pre-comment before I dive in here. I have no idea what to expect, and I don't know what state of mind I will be in when I emerge again from this story.
Wish me luck...or curse my name, whatever you writers do to your commentors.
Can't stop laughing. I read the part where Pinkie says, "Yeah! Now touch me," in such a way that... You know the episode of Gumball where he loses his little sister's stuffed donkey on the bus and she turns around and in a really deep rumbling voice says, "No it's not?" Well... I read the italicized portion of Pinkie's dialogue in that same voice with an appropriate facial expression. AJ's following scream only made it even funnier. XD
Yay for Applepie!
Got to love some Flutts/AJ swap.
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Nobody wants your ice cream.
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Anyway. No real feedback from me this time.
Well, I will say that towards the beginning there was some poor sentence structure and wording that seemed like a result of haste. But as for the story I have no input.
Primarily because it didn't actually do anything for me other than mildly amuse me. It was pleasantly gross, and you crafted AJ's perspective well to make the experience overall dark.
This is actually not an entirely uncommon theme. You just happen to write character far better than most who write this type of pulp. I also appreciate your prevalent humor. This is for entertainment after all, no need to take this kind of thing oh so seriously.
The "Book" one I was much more critical of, not because I like it less, but because I like it far more. Anything I like a great deal, I want to improve and perfect. I have literally designed quite elaborate extended and alternate scenes for it since reading it.
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Hey yo, leave Duri outta this. She has special needs. =(
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Good luck =D
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Haha, thanks man. Laughter is really all I want out of this anyway.
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My favourite kind of pie =D
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And obviously I wasn't serious with this one. I mean, come on, I wrote it in what, 4 hours? This one's just for fun and yucks(sic), and a mild amusement is exactly what I was going for. And yeah.. stumbly sentences is because I really didn't put as much into this as I put into Twilight. Like.. a quill. =3 Anyway, working on a PROPER next one now. This one I'll have to work a bit better, try not to rush it maybe. Gonna keep everypony in character this time, or at least try my best to. And gonna torture the shit fucks out of Vinyl Scratch.
Also, DO share your scenes! I'm quite curious myself. That is, if you don't mind.
I like how posting this fic has got me more favourites for the OTHER fic than for this one. Obviously something has gone very wrong here.
I wonder what.
I suspect it has to do with custard.
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Maybe... in PM...
Anyway, As for Vinyl... the only thing I've thought of is that if you can't walk on clouds, and a pegasus brings you up to a cloud, you can't get off that pegasus.
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Well feel free to PM me whenever whatever. Nice to see where my fic has driven your fantasies. =D
I've already got the general idea for the next fic out. You can check my userpage; there's a link to the synopsis page there. Fic is called "Music to Do It to". I already fully expect that I'm going to enjoy another super long breakdown from you for that one. Or maybe you'll actually be happy enough with that for a change.
A GUY CAN DREAM.
I mean... all I want is your approval. You know... your... your sweet... delicious... approval.. heh.. heh.. the sun that rises in my life... the darkness that sets me to sleep.... give it to me, master... give it to me.....
Yay!
This is a popular story! According to the side bar. I have a hunch that the next one will get more feedback. 
Or more views.
I'm very pleased this is finally up. I'm also surprised at how many positive responses its received! This isn't your ordinary pony story! KitsuneRisu works very hard to keep you lot entertained. Be grateful!
Mostly this tale makes me not like custard. Otherwise? Top writing, very well done - I say that despite the fact he torments me mercilessly.
this so wrong .. funny and plausible but wrong but so so wrong
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Haha, I wouldn't call it 'plausible', myself...
... we need to bring this one to the Mythbuckers.
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Probably. I hope so. It'd be back to a normal sort of storytelling kind of thing... nice scenario, great atmosphere, less custard.
SOME PONIES JUST HATE ON CUSTARD.
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More than I expected, that's for sure.
I... haba...
._.
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Nurse. Nurse, we killed another one.
974870 Are ya sure ya don't want a throwing knife with that riot shield, sir?
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That's alright, there's already a ton of them in my back.
*Steel's head tilts to the side with Applejack's as he finishes reading.*
Uhhh...
W-Well...
Ahem...a-any comments, Miss Applejack?
A fair comment...um...I...
*AJ runs off to a corner, and gagging sounds can be heard. Steel just blinks at the computer screen in complete disbelief.*
Dh-what are you doing hanging from the ceiling?! How'd you get in here?!
Offff course you don't...
*Steel looks over at AJ's convulsing body, rear turned towards him.*
Are you done painting the wall green?
Take your time.
*Steel turns back around to the screen.*
Well, that read was certainly INTERESTING. It's earned my like...but, just...WOW. I'm one of the fellas around here who doesn't care about OOCness, so long as it grants a good story, and I got one, but that was one hell of a situation...
DO NOT.
Just...do not take any ideas from this.
Do not pull that innocent smile with me young lady, just forget this story ever happened! Like AJ is currently attempting to.
I should hire her to paint my house next time I'm reading 'Sweet Apple Massacre'.
Pinkie, a rant right now isn't going to help.
*He lets go.*
AJ, you finished yet?
*AJ walks over, still looking a bit green.*
Well then. Guess I'll just say my opinion...it was an entertaining story for what it's worth. It explores an unorthodox method of baking, as is Pinkie's usual a-
Right, usual act WITHOUT the masturbation...AJ is obviously very reluctant.
Yes. But Pinkie just turning on her at the end...
OOCness aside, it felt like an action that wouldn't really...sit well, given her personality. She's all about making other ponies happy, and I think she'd risk carrying on that 'little white lie' all the way to the end.
Exactly. Well put, Miss Pie.
Indeed. Now, I think I'll have to go before AJ vomits all over my computer screen...
AWAY!
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That. Was.
AWESOME.
Seriously. I'm smiling like a girl here. Giggling like one. Peeing all over my chair sitting down like o-
But yes, that little skit? Jeez, man. Thanks. Also! Now to get into the bits of it, this series is mainly about things which are pretttty messed up. That was the idea going in, that's the idea coming out. Everything under this category (you can check out the bunch in my user page) has this theme running through; essentially, corruption of character to a certain degree, and a level of freaky-weird. That said, her sudden turn at the end might have been a bit too much out of character, you're absolutely right. But this fic is... pretty insane anyway, we can let one slide, right? =3
Would it HELP if I said that Applejack sure got her fair share of enjoyment/happiness?
Anyway, thanks so much for that lovely skit, and thanks for the support! Feel free to read my other stuff too and rant on them as well. They sure aren't the run of the mill kind of stuff.
Although if you enjoy romance, I'm actually putting one out which is going to be just... a normal one, honestly. I've never done it before, and it wouldn't hurt to try doing something that isn't all kinds of weird.
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You're very welcome for the skit I provided, and I'm glad you enjoyed it so much. A proper romance is very difficult to write, so I'll keep an eye out for it.
I can understand writing just to explore some pretty screwed up things.
Well put, Miss Applejack. Anyway, yes, writing to explore these fields is simply what a writer does, and you put yourself at the mercy of public opinion with every release you make. Plus, it is just fun to write these situations out; your fanfics take place in a living, breathing universe after all! And in that universe, anything can happen.
Take what you will from that.
A badly characterized one, yes...but a murderer none the less.
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NO.
Seriously, SOME angry deity would have my head on a golden platter in a nanosecond if I let you do that. Or an angry mob of deities...
Wait, when did you get here?
Ahem...anyway...what was my original point? Um...right, exploring strange areas of writing. This is pleasent, entertaining, a display of excellent writing even in some cases, but you do have to stick with the base archetype of a character's personality.
Thank you, ladies. Anyway, a quick glance at the canon will reveal their base archetypes. So long as you don't step beyond these, then you are well within the bounds of good wri-
OH! Oh, um...oops...sorry. Please, carry on.
Miss Shy is a good description of 'bi-polar'. She can go from shy and kind to staring you dead in the eyes until you sink below the earth in absolute terror!
My apologies. Ahem, anyway...hopefully this was a good guide into good writing. Follow the archetypes! As for your other points, no, I can't exactly let this slide as something that 'simply happened', though I am much more light-hearted about it. AJ, did you REALLY enjoy yourself after that little scene faded to black? Sounds like you did...
*Steel puts on a sly smirk.*
I'll take your word for it, AJ.
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That's what I'm worried about. If you haven't already guessed, my writing is rather... niche. Trying to do a normal fic for once that might appeal to a wider audience is going to actually be a challenge for me. I also have to tone down a lot of the technicals too. Well. Here's to trying. =) I'd love it if you could bash it a new one when it comes out.
How true. How bleedin' true. =D My first 'weird erotic' fic, that silly one with the book is doing much better than I thought it would. Conversely, my third one, the music one just released today, is doing much much worse. This one continues to confuse and disgust. Which is juuuust fine.
And that isn't a problem at all, because I was joking anyway! I know where I did badly, and I know that characterization seems to be a stumbling point for me. On the one hand, I've been told I do it well, and am able to capture essenses of it in cases where they're not found in the norm. The problem comes because I have a baaaad habit of subverting them. It's just a thing with me, and if you read any of my other stuff you'd see that it tends to be a running theme. It is not an excuse, but a reason, and I simply blame my personal love of the macabre to explain this need of mine.
Rest assured I won't be doing anything of the sort with this upcoming sort of... romance.. fic, which now I'm not feeling too confident about anymore...
Your breakdown of the mane six, however, is entirely helpful and, honestly, I'm probably going to be coming here a lot to remind myself of the base focuses for their mentalities and motivations, so, again, your time and effort in presenting this to me in such a fun and absorb-able way is highly... highly appreciated.
Now, onward to the great beyond, and let's see where this silly little romantic fic takes us.
Oh by the way, Rainbow, it's about you.
So feel free to dump on anything I've done! Anything constructive helps in making me a better writer. =)
ENOUGH.
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Me and my little think tank here will always be around to help.
Miss Sparkle, you are aware of the word 'flexible', yes?
Flexible! Your schedule should be flexible! I wouldn't know the first thing about how a pony bends in that fashion, especially with Equestrians!
*Steel folds his arms and looks over to the side, blushing a bit.*
Quick reads of excitement and adventure!
Now now, ladies.
Always a joy to have you, Miss Shy.
Perfect. Well, we eagerly await your next release...whether Twilight finds a time slot to fit it in for, I'm not sure...well, we'll TRY to be here for it!
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Also, never have fear in your writing! You are writing it for your own enjoyment first, then proofreading it to make sure everything flows correctly. Have confidence in what you write!
If you lose confidence, you lose skill, if you lose skill, your writing loses impact!
Ehhh...not quite.
Writing is a very...exact science. It doesn't aim to impress the crowd with flashy stunts and crazy maneuvers, but impresses a reader through subtle meaning and impressive wording.
...Never mind. Just um...have confidence in what you write. I'm certain that, with what you've presented already, you have next to no worries about this!
*Pinkie holds out a cupcake.*
I should hope not...
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Maybe that's why my stuff SUCKS SO MUCH NOW *RAGE*.
*ahem*
I mean... yes. You're right. But it's so easy to lose sight of that, sometimes!
All I have here to remind me of this are people who take the time out to help me, like you and DPV111 and Twifight.
Also... also this small plate of creme brulee.
Would you... would you like some?
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*Steel blinks, staring at it.*
Um...I-I think I'll pass...
*AJ's eyes go wide at the sight of it, and her cheeks immediately turn green. She runs back to the corner, and more gagging sounds come out from it.*
Oh dear...
Okay, why does everything KitsuneRisu touches degrade to a new level of sick EVERY FREAKIN' TIME!?
UGH.
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Because Abhorrence is Magic~~~~~
Comedic genius, friend! Though I must say this wasn't disturbing at all (at least to my messed up mind
) Punishment by the Book was much more surreal/creepy. Both were great reads, thank you, man! I cannot resist, I must add to your moustashed-spike bin 
MWAHAHAHA. Good Hunting, Sire!
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Haha, really? I figured this would bother people much worse, but it's nice to see people who share my... unique sense of humour.
But no, thank YOU, for the kind words and the lovely spikestache. I now have two.
I am saving up for a car.
I don't have just one Tennant .gif for this so here is a story board.
Oh Crème brulee. I love creme brulee
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This comes from where?!
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I don't care. Creme brulee is too good to resist
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What is David walked in during to 'making of' process.
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HAHAHA! OK dude, you win =D
Here's a bag of internets.
That is freaking hilarious.
999393 Oh good, all my old Internets expired, so I needed some new ones.
I think this probably resembles your creative process, am I right?
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(Begins reading. Makes it to the part where Pinkie seeks Applejack)
This.. this is gonna be weird, right?
Be back later.
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M... MOAR PETROLEUM RUBBINGS! *fondle fondle fondle*
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Yes. Yes it will.
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Thank god it never got to that.
Loss....... words....... uuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuurrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr................