• Member Since 22nd Mar, 2018
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Twisted Fiction


Been on Hiatus, don't know what I am doing yet

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After years of gruesome murders committed by an unknown organization the once peaceful land of Equestria has been left festering in a state of terror, but when the criminals are finally brought to justice it appears that harmony may once again return.

In a twist of fate, the lives of those responsible take a drastic turn when they are given a second chance at life, and thrust into the world tasked with learning the ways of the land and becoming one with society.

Meanwhile, as Celestia attempts to heal Equestrias scars unseen forces conspire to send her peaceful reign into chaos. Tensions flare and when the Princesses rule is brought into question it will be up to the citizens to decide the fate of Equestria.

Featured: 3/24/2018. Wow, I'm amazed my story was featured it's first day. As a new author on this site, I never could have dreamed of this. Thank you all!

Chapters (4)
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Comments ( 37 )

Sounds interesting.

If the main OCs in this story were voiced, what would they sound like? Also, just going to warn you, your red and black alicorn OC probably isn't going to be very popular.

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Thank you for your interest! I have considered several of their voices but haven’t quite figured them all out yet. I will get back to you with that info after consulting each of their creators.

Although when it comes to War, he isn’t an Alicorn. I was hoping referring to him in the story solely as a large Pegasus would help alleviate some of the confusion but I can understand why it persists. The horn is just a part of his helmet, there for a mixture of decoration and clashing heads with enemy unicorns.

I LOVE this story!! The two week update is a bit slow for my liking, but hey, you DO update regularly. That's better than what a lot of authors can claim.

Its a surprisingly well done story so far....hope it makes it to completion. :pinkiesmile:
OH and for good luck :moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache::moustache:

Interesting idea, liked and followed.

YES!! Another awesome update! This story is quickly becoming one of my top favourites!

Also, the names of the brothers are quite interesting, in that they fit their powers, but not their personalities.
War is the gentle, calm, and reassuring one that looks for alternative solutions instead of violence.
Famine is the group's provider; bringing supplies and toys back to his brothers when he goes on missions.
Disaster never settles for less than his best, and is always aiming for the top.
Madness is the most content with his lot in life, whatever that may be.
Pestilence wants nothing more than to be free and dependent upon himself only, even if he has to be alone.
Despair is the hopeful and optimistic one.
Death doesn't want to hurt anyone, and if anything, is the most afraid of all of them.

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Thank you! I’m glad you’re enjoying the story thus far! I am glad you have noticed that about our OCs and that this is how they are coming across to our readers!

We tried very hard to make sure the ponies were not cliche or stereotypical of what is commonly interpreted from their powers. Rather then focus on their abilities, we placed focus on their personalities as a priority. We want them to be well developed, interesting and entertaining characters who just so happen to have powers rather then let their powers be what defines their character.

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Well I gotta say, good work! I look forward to wherever this story is heading.

Though I certainly hope things start getting better for the brothers, and Death especially, as he is my favourite character thus far. Being an artist myself, I feel a bit of a natural connection to his character.

Ooh... This is interesting.

Wait, what about Famine?

YESSSS!!!!!!!!! I haven't even read this chapter yet, and I'm already pumped up for it!!!!!!!

Great chapter, and it honestly caught me by surprise. I don't really know what I was expecting, but it was different than what was delivered.
I'm glad to see that we're in for the long haul as far as the story goes. It looks like it will take awhile for the Brother 7 to adjust to their new stations in life.

Though truth be told, I'm a bit worried for this story. With the Mane 6 and the Brother 7, there are a LOT of main characters to develop and have interact with each other, and I fear that with the every other week update schedule, some members of your audience might lose interest over time.

Nevertheless, keep up the great work!!

- Koga13

I kind of hate the guards they seem like the type that would only have courage to stand up to the group when they are tied down by celestia.

Oh, I cannot wait for Discord and Ogre and Oubliettes! That would be the most epic thing ever! At least, when paired with Madness.

This is really quite good! I'm curious to see how this will compare to other redemption stories.

"A group of stallions no less, honestly how does Celestia expect us to deal with a group of such, savages?" asked Rarity.

Oy.

I cant wait till the next update. I just watched a cancelled series Sins of Friendship which has a similar purpose. The concept of giving the seven sins personality and bodies is awesome to me

Where is Famine I wonder?

I admit, this is a very intriguing premise for a story; this is certainly much more fleshed out than some of the other fics I’ve seen on this site. Yes, this story has definitely caught my interest.
I'm looking forward to see more of your work in the future, Twisted Fiction.

Pls let madness mess with the cmc or diamond

The fuck? Why did you go down a line before the sentence got the end of the right side? Heres what it looks like.

"Thank you," said Twilight looking to each of them. "This may seem more extreme than
before but we just have to treat it like it was any other case and I'm sure we'll get through
this," she said reassuringly. Deafly silence fell over the room once again as nopony was sure
what to say next. The future seemed so uncertain. All they knew was that some of Equestria's
most infamous criminals, the ones that stalked the streets at night, the ones they feared
would climb in their window as they slept would now be welcomed right into their own
homes. It was an absolutely dreadful thought but they had to face this. No other ponies in
Equestria were capable of a reformation like this. They sat quietly until Pinkie Pie began to
look to each of them intent to lift their distressed spirits.

Here what it should be

"Thank you," said Twilight looking to each of them. "This may seem more extreme than before but we just have to treat it like it was any other case and I'm sure we'll get through this," she said reassuringly. Deafly silence fell over the room once again as nopony was sure what to say next. The future seemed so uncertain. All they knew was that some of Equestria's most infamous criminals, the ones that stalked the streets at night, the ones they feared would climb in their window as they slept would now be welcomed right into their own homes. It was an absolutely dreadful thought but they had to face this. No other ponies in Equestria were capable of a reformation like this. They sat quietly until Pinkie Pie began to look to each of them intent to lift their distressed spirits.

As you can see you went down a line before the sentenced ever reached the end of the right side.

Anyways that aside it's a great story!

Do you think this could get another chapter

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All you got to do is offer unlimited favorites and views I have. Some people who need some fanfics to read and I suggested this to a couple of them. And a piece of cake will be offered as well

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Mission failed we’ll get’ em next time

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As you two were talking about dragging the author back, I was quite reading one thing on the author's profile...

  • Member Since 22nd Mar, 2018
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thanks for showing me this I didn't realize that he was just on break.

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First thing I do on any story before reading is checking the following things.

  1. Condider weather I'm interested in the story
    If yes; continue to the next step; If not, ignore the story.
  2. Is the story complete, incomplete, canceled.
    If complete, then consider reading; If incomplete go to next step; If canceled, ignore
  3. Check story release date, word count, latest chapter release, and all chapter in between and the release dates.
    If the author has steady uploading times with a reasonable high wordcount(roughly 100k a year or 8k words per month), consider reading; If the previous sentence does not apply, check the blog and author activity, and depending on the result, consider reading; if none apply, ignore story to save the heartache of not see a new chapter ever.

Under special circumstances, it's up to me.
For me whenever a story has just been published and I cannot check any of the things, I have a special fold in which I put new stories that I'm interested in that show promise. I check on those stories within a few weeks or months. It really depends on how interested I am.

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