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Scarlet Raven Thorn


Just a pony looking for recognition and to put my ideas out there. Please follow, like, and comment! Don't forget to check out my blogs; and follow me on Equestria Amino, as Scarlet Thorn.

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This story is a sequel to Tales from the Equestrian Others- The Fallen Angel of Ponyville


*Set during the My Little Pony Movie!
*Featuring Tempest Shadow!
*Not an Alice in Wonderland Crossover!
*Comic tag is for certain elements and characters
Check out the prequel here!

It's the festival of friendship! A festival that they won't soon forget! A party to be proud of, a day of games and fun! Not for one unicorn. Gallant Aurora, captain of the Lunar Guard and Princess Luna's adopted son, hasn't felt at ease since the discovery of the Vanished hive in the Everfree Forest. And while the other Z.O.D.I.A.C. agents enjoy the festivities, Gallant just can't seem to shake the feeling that something is wrong.

But when the Storm King conquers Equestria and traps the princesses, the mane six must leave their home to save it. But working in the background the agents of Z.O.D.I.A.C must prevent the god-like being known as Grim Noise from unleashing his army of corrupted souls onto the weakened Equestria, and turning it into the undead capital of Equis.

Join Gallant Aurora and his friend Missy, a unicorn with a dark secret, and their dragons Sound-Off and Horus, on an adventure outside of Equestria to stop Grim Noise before it's too late!

Meanwhile, Prince Blueblood must find a way to overcome his cowardly and selfish nature to save his daughter from the Storm King. Joined by an ancient Anugyptian necromancer and a centuries old vampony, can he learn what it truly means to love and be loved?

Tempest Shadow has had enough. She knows the truth, the Storm King isn't going to restore her horn. Now she must make a choice, continue fighting a pointless war for the benefit of a spoiled child, or betray him and join Z.O.D.I.A.C in a war that they can never win. Will she accept the hoof of friendship offered out to her, or will she take the darker path and become something far more powerful than the Storm King himself?

Chapters (2)
Comments ( 10 )

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Zecora is fantastic in the new chapters!
I adore the lass's character.
Come on every pony!
Make sure to leave a comment while dropping a like. This so far has been an excellent piolet for ye second story! :twilightsmile:

Keep up the great work!
I'll soon post a review.

I am intrigued by the direction of your series.
I find myself eagerly awaiting future installments.

Bloody great work!
The dedication invested into your new tale is no less than exquisite.

So far I've managed to complete Down The Rabbit Hole.
I am honored to know that you consider me a source of inspiration till this day.
Thank you. :rainbowkiss:
I can say the same about you. I only wish i could share with you what you inspire.
Anyhow, I hope you don't mind if i use some of your creative writing strategies.
I'm adding a flash-back to my third chapter. I'm also using onamonapias.

Before i explain the brilliance of your pilot chapter, i must inform you that i found this spelling error:
"No. It's not for more. It's for my son." Cobra explained.

Let me begin by saying that you where right.
The Nyx race was a great idea!
What made me change my thoughts on the race was your implementation them as anthropomorphic foxes.

I absolutely adore the references you add into your chapter!
Don't stop making references please.
They wonderfully add extra humor and creativity into your work! :pinkiehappy:
If you're going to add more of your old OCs, definately do it with the same dedication as Tornado Fusion.
And do please continue to satirize anime, like you where, with this character. Random nosebleed during a moment of fan service- that was brilliant! :yay:

The best scene for me was when Cadence leapt up and attacked Obsidian in a barrage of death! I couldn't stop laughing! You killed it with the popcorn. And a second time with sun-butt sleep talking! :rainbowlaugh:
My second favorite scene was what you did with Granny Smith! I swear, for a moment i could hear her speaking in applenese. Great introduction to both the apples and the cutie mark crusaders btw.

Now, i definitely have to praise you for adding two of the best characters you have written thus-far.
You made me smile when i began reading "The black-coated Pegasus leaning against the wall scoffed to himself;" I immediately got a :ajsmug: on my face. I was sure of it when i read "When can I see her again? My bride never to be? Am I cursed to live forever, excluded from pony kind?" - "What are you muttering about this time?" A new voice piped."
Hehe, what really made me squeal was how WELL-WRITTEN the scene was with their distinct personalities! :rainbowkiss:
It reminded me of when the audience is introduced to a pair of Akatsuki members for the first time!
This scene is also my favorite.
And once again, you killed it when Thanatos brought up Zecora's love letter!
As for Zecora- Daaang girl, you cold.
I was not expecting the ending with Tempest. It made me smile again.
Great unexpected cliffhanger!

I still can't believe you went and made Scarlet pregnant. Well... I think i know what you're planning.
What has me more interested is the fate of Cobra Strike aka [Top Secret] and the perhaps future mentor of Black dawn? Ahm...
If you're heading that route. :scootangel:

Well this review is a story of its own. I apologies for the longevity.
Your pilot was MAGNIFICENT and i had a lot to say.
It's wonderful to see your original ideas being developed.

You get better and better every chapter, Spectacular Work! :pinkiehappy:

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It appears i wasn't the only pony to catch certain similarities.
The lass wrote a better scene in my opinion. :twilightsmile:

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Thanks for pointing that error out.
And, I don't mind you using my techniques in your writing.
I am so happy to hear that you're enjoying the pilot to this second story! Thank you for the amazing review!
I'll do my best to continue writing with as much zeal and dedication!

Also,
As for Cobra Strike... follow me on Equestria Amino for MLP.
My name there is simply Scarlet Thorn.
You'll get an idea of where the characters are going from that.

Great story you have made! It's still as well written as always. And as always for me, I loved the gore parts. I'll be awaiting eagerly for the race against time against Grim Noise and the Storm King! Keep doing what you do best, I thoroughly enjoy your work.

-RedtheDestroyer

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The reason for that, my rocky friend, is because she wrote her scene before I wrote mine. My story is inspired from what I heard/read from the prototypes to her amazing series of tales.

To conclude- The scene with Thanatos was a prototype when I first read it.
I was glad to know she kept it. :pinkiesmile:
It's a magnificent scene!

In reference to your notes. Have you been playing a Alice in wonderland game? If not, what game have you been playing lass? :pinkiesmile:

On hiatus until finals are finished!
Sorry everyone!
I'll post 2-3 chapters next time to make up for it!

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