Equestria's Fall to Lust

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Zheroxzone

Zheroxzone #1 · Mar 23rd, 2018 · · ·

Im a bit confused, is this only gonna revolve around chrysalis or are you gonna add more main characters as we go on?
Also, going off what happened so far wouldnt it be good to slap a dark tag onto it? i just think it a got a bit dark at the end.

pdude

pdude #2 · Mar 23rd, 2018 · 1 · ·

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There will be other main characters later. I don't have the exact ones yet though.
I don't know about the dark tag. Not sure when it's something that should be used or not.
It hasn't really been my intention of being dark, but I think it might get semi dark.
I can already say now that the story will not contain death and completely irreversible tfs.

mr.zel

mr.zel #3 · Mar 30th, 2018 · · ·

I liked it.

pdude

pdude #4 · Apr 2nd, 2018 · 2 · ·

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Glad you like it.
Just got home from vacation, so I can start to work on the second chapter again now.

mr.zel

mr.zel #5 · Apr 2nd, 2018 · · ·

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yay.

marinus18

marinus18 #6 · Sep 29th, 2018 · 4 · ·

Nice but you keep using "he/she" when referring to different characters. He/she should only refer to the last character you mentioned by name. If it changes you should use their name again. Otherwise it can very easily become confusing.

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