Broken
Six Months Later
“-You don’t understand sister! And you never will! Just look at ho-!” The voices fade once more as I banged my head on the wall.
“How long have they been at it now?” Lotus asked as she sat upside down against the wall, her legs kicking back and forth up in the air as her head and shoulders rested on the floor. “Three and a half hours now?”
“Four.” Black Iron sat on the floor beside her, opting to sit normally. “Four hours.” He had bags under his eyes and his wings were loosely hanging from his sides.
“Your helmet hitting the wall in killing my head Night.” Moon Beam lay on the floor with her wings over her head. Apparently, she had a headache. I ignored her comment, continuing to lightly hit my helmeted head on the wall.
“Are you sure you’re alright sir?” Silver asked me for the umpteenth time.
‘Yes, I’m just.…thinking.’ I never stopped hitting my head on the wall. Something was gnawing at the back of my mind, just under the surface.
“I know your stressed out Night, but Luna and Celestia will stop arguing soon. They always do.” Lotus mumbled out.
“Be a little more sensitive Lotus, they’re his sisters.” Silver snapped back at her.
‘It’s not that. It’s something else, I just.....Gah! It’s right there in my mind! I can’t remember what it is though!’ I switched from hitting my head to pacing back and forth.
“-on’t understand!? I have the same problems as you Luna! You ju-“ Celestia’s voice broke through the nearby wall for a second.
“Ooooh, that wasn’t a good thing to say.” Iron winced as something wooden sounding shattered on the other side of the wall.
“You know, every once in a while I consider going in there to calm them down.” Lotus looked at the wall as another thump sounded in the hall. “Then something big hits the wall and I’m reminded of my own mortality.” Moon whimpered at all the banging and pulled her head further under her wings. Iron pulled his helmet over his head and tried to sleep. Lotus tossed her helmet in the air and caught it repeatedly, and Silver watched me pace up and down the hall.
‘It’s like I forgot something huge. I know it’s not good, but I’m just getting impressions and feelings of it. It feels terrifying, something to do with.....I don’t know!’ I dragged my wings down my face, trying to pull out the memory.
“-hy do I even listen to you any more! You don’t even pay attention to me! Ever! Maybe if you pulled yourself away from work to care for your family you wou-“ Luna shouted as several more things hit the wall. I was glad Sapphire was away from the city that day. She always hated when Luna and Celestia fought like that.
“Hey, who’s going to pay us if they kill each other?” Lotus asked randomly, making all of us stop and look at her. “What? It’s a basic job security question.”
“Would it kill you all to be quiet?” Moon asked, clearly in pain. Once more we fell into silence.
“-o wonder ponies don’t look up to you! You walk around town beating up stallions and come home covered in blood from killing monsters! I wouldn’t like you either if I didn’t know you!” Celestia yelled.
“Ouch. I felt that one, and she wasn’t even talking about me.” Iron commented quietly. Meanwhile, my head started to hurt. A growing pain started in the back of my head, there but not there at the same time. My eyes clenched shut as I tried to remember what was in the back of my mind. It was practically burning now, sitting just under the surface like hot coals under water.
‘Something. Something important. What is it!’ I leaned on the wall and started tapping the back of my head on the wall. This is going to kill me if I don’t remember it!
“-aybe I’ll just have to make them respect me then! If they won’t willingly love me, I’ll just have to for-” Luna yelled out, the sound dying behind the wall once more. My head was throbbing now.
‘It’s so close, right on the edge of my mind!’ I pushed harder trying to bring it just a little bit closer to the surface.
“It’s okay Night. I’m sure you’ll remember it soon.” Silver said as she moved to sit beside me. She yawned loudly and leaned back against the wall with me. I narrowed my eyes as the memory started breaking through.
‘Something about a Nightmare....’
BOOOM!! The wall blew apart behind me and Silver, throwing us across the hall and into the wall. Silver was knocked unconscious immediately but I scrambled back to my claws. Only to fall again as my head filled with things not there before. I tried to lift my head, but my eyes slowly slid shut as darkness consumed me.
Sapphire
I was gliding over the city, watching the streets for trouble. I had just got back from helping set up a new guard station in a new town not far away. Oh I can’t wait to get to bed. Maybe I’ll see mom before I do that, I’ll have to see if I’m too tired when I get there. My wings felt like lead, and trying to flap them was almost impossible. That is, until I saw the smoke rising from the castle. “Oh no.”
I rushed forward, pushing my wings faster. My head was already filling with bad thoughts as the smoke cloud got bigger. “Please be okay....”
Night Wing
“-ight, come on get up Night!” I heard Moon yelling in my ear. “Captain! You’re okay!” She gave me a small hug before backing off. “We have to hurry! The Princesses are trying to kill each other!” My half-awake mind heard ‘kill’ and ‘Princesses’ and snapped awake.
‘What!? What do you mean there trying to kill each other!?’ My eyes widened as I looked around, seeing the forest through the ruined walls. FWOOOOSH!! A giant gold beam cut through the roof ten feet away, collapsing the rest of the roof. I put a shield over me, Moon, and the still unconscious Silver, Lotus, and Iron. I quickly portaled Iron, Lotus, and Silver to the barracks as I took in the scene in the sky. Blue and yellow lights flashed high in the clouds, seeming to chase each other around in a deadly dance.
“What do we do!?” Moon panicked as my mind remembered things it had somehow forgotten.
‘Nightmare Moon.....’ How could I let this happen... How could I forget this!? Luna! Wha-This is all my faul-. Moon slapped me across the face.
“Ooooh I’m so getting fired for that.” She whispered to herself. “Captain! Focus, what do we do? The sisters are trying to kill each other and eventually one is going to succeed!”
‘Your right. Sorry, gather the guards and keep the local population safe. I’ll try to stop this nonsense.’ Without waiting for a response I took to the sky, rapidly gaining height. I threw up a shield to block a stray beam before continuing up. I broke through the clouds just in time to see Celestia hit Luna with a golden ball, throwing her beneath the clouds again. Celestia followed suit, and I dropped as well. I have to get to them before this gets out of hand!....More out of hand than it is anyways.
“SURRENDER SISTER!!” Celestia yelled out, brandishing her sword. My eyes were almost shut as I tried to catch up with my sisters, wind whistling by me.
“I WILL NEVER SURRENDER! YOU DIE TONIGHT!!” Luna screamed back. Through the misty clouds I could see her coat begin to take on a darker hue, and her voice started to change slightly. Luna stopped and swung her axe at Celestia only to have it blocked by her sword. They pushed against each other for a second before splitting away back into the clouds.
FWOOSH! A beam of dark blue pierced the clouds beside me as I tried to track where they were fighting. Flashes of gold lit the undersides of the clouds ahead, and I raced forward to stop my worst fears from happening. With a mighty CRACK a white body flew past me, a broken sword flying through the air with it. Oh god! I turned around to give chase just as a black blur shot past me making me spin out of control. Quickly regaining control, I saw said blur shoot a beam of pure black at Celestia. She seemed to recover just before it hit her and dodged the deadly ray. However, her wing was bent in half and the ground was coming up fast. I tried to catch up but could only watch helplessly as Celestia impacted the ground, sending up a cloud of dust. Luna followed just behind her, bellowing a war cry.
Dust and sand stung my eyes, blinding me completely. “KEEEAR!!” Letting out a short call, I began choking on the dust.
“STAY OUT OF THIS NIGHT!!” Luna shouted from somewhere to my right. There! I saw a flash of yellow amid the dust and rushed to meet it. The dust had started to settle back to the ground, exposing Luna holding Celestia down on the ground. Luna had her axe pressed to Celestia’s throat, a fang-filled grin spread across her face. “Finally, I have you. You’re going to pay for the years of pain sister.” Luna started to push down on the axe, blood leaking from Celestia’s neck as I stood there frozen. I unfroze when a gray blur hit Luna on the side, knocking her away. Luna and the blur tumbled for awhile before they stopped, Luna once more on top. Moon Beam struggled under her as Luna lifted the axe high above her head.
“Betrayed by yet another pony. What else did I expect?” Luna calmly said as she picked up Moon and tossed her beside Celestia. “Two for the price of one. That will make this much sweeter.” Luna’s grin came back and her horn started to glow. I was still frozen, watching in horror, unable to believe what was happening in front of me. Then black energy shot from her horn and time seemed to slow down. My eyes focused in on Celestia laying on the ground, blood leaking from her throat. No....
THUD! Celestia fell onto the ground beside me as my portal closed, the beam hit the ground, and I threw Luna into the forest all at the same time. The pressure wave I threw at Luna tore a line through the forest, downing trees for a good one hundred feet. Limbs creaked and cracked as Luna flew further still. But my attention was on Celestia. I spun around and pressed my wing to the wound, pumping healing magic into it. I sighed with relief as it closed up, and Celestia just sighed normally as her breathing was restored.
More trees started cracking dragging my attention back towards the woods. But my eyes stopped on the broken batpony laying in the dirt. ‘Moon!’ I ran over to Moon and checked to see if she was alive. I knew the answer before I even looked, but it still shocked me to see her chest completely still. No breath left her mouth, and the light was gone from her eyes. The huge hole in her side was obviously the cause of death, and the sad expression on her face shattered my heart.
“NIGHT WING!!” Luna screamed at me from the forest edge. “Don’t go against me! You don’t have to side with her!” She pointed at Celestia, who was just getting up. “You know ponies are afraid of you too Night! You and I can make them love us, make them respect us!”
‘Luna, don’t do this. Please just stop!’ I looked at her pleadingly. “Cooo.” I let a sad sound, trying to get to her. ‘This isn’t the way to fix things! Think about this!’
“I have thought about it! I’ve thought about it for YEARS!!” She screamed the last part. “YEARS Night! Years spent in the shadow of that hag!” She once again pointed at Celestia. Celestia was just standing there, trying to catch her breath. “Well no more. You’ll see Night! I’ll fix everything...” Then she lunged forward at Celestia.
“CAAAAW!” ‘Noo!’ I tried to block it, but something hit me in the back, severe pain shooting through me. Celestia threw up a shield at the last second, blocking the axe. And then they were gone again, lighting up the sky in a show of power. I turned my head around to see a wooden board imbedded in my back. Luna must have stabbed me with it to keep me from interfering anymore. I looked up at the sound of cracking to see one of the castle towers fall. Flashes of gold and dark blue shone from the windows of what was Starswirl’s old tower. The elements.
I knew what Celestia was going for. And I couldn’t let that happen. I tried to stand up, to crawl, anything to get me closer to stopping them. But blood loss was making my vision dark and my limbs heavy. ‘Please, don’t do this.’ My eyes widened as a bright white light began to shine in the shattered remains of the tower. ‘NOOOO!’ The stone bricks exploded outward as a rainbow pierced the heavens. I rolled over, not caring that the wooden board shoved further into me, and stared up at the moon. Slowly, craters began to appear on the surface. They took on the very familiar, but equally heartbreaking, shape of a unicorn head. Tears filled my eyes as I stared up at the moon, my vision fading completely as I bled out.
Silver Wing
I woke when I heard an explosion in the distance. “What was that!?” I shakily stood up from the bed I was on. How did I get here? I looked around the barracks, seeing Lotus and Iron laying not far away. “Iron! Get up!” I ran over to his bed and shook him. When he didn’t wake up I ran over to Lotus. “Get up Lotus!” Again, nothing happened. I backed away from the bed and ran to the doors, trying to walk straight as my vision faded in and out. “What....Oh I feel horrible.” I fought back the vomit rising in my throat and pushed open the doors. I stood frozen for a second as I took in the broken castle and the streaks of fire across the forest. What happened? Stumbling forward, I tripped over something soft. I rolled over to see a familiar face laying on the ground, motionless.
“Moon?” I crawled over to her, trying to get a reaction. “Moon, are you-“ My throat closed up when I saw the hole burned through her. “Moon!” I forced myself up just enough to fall towards her. “Oh no. No no no.” I rubbed my hoof over her face, hoping to detect any sign of life. My eyes started to drift closed as I fought off a major headache. Just before they closed, I saw a blurry figure land beside another lump on the ground not far away. It’s was a black hippogryph, one I easily recognized. “Sapphire.” I managed to whisper out before fading into unconsciousness.
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It's good keep up the good work also don't kill yourself
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but that's the fun part
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but if he kills himself then he wont be able to give me sustenance
9741450
...that's a very good point
Okay I don't care what that crystal tree of bullshit intentions were, burn it and destroy it.
If Night doesn't do anything about this tree I will fu*Ing lose it
Ok a few things. One: I DID anticipate Moons death. Two: Did not expect the events of Nightmare Moon to happen that soon (not being a critiquing asshole just genuinely did not expect it). And finally: Thought Night would push Luna out the way and he himself woulf get blasted sending him to the moon ending this book while we wait for a sequel.
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One could make an excellent garden with a good layer of crystal mulch...
I refuse to believe he just 'forgot' please give an explanation other then 'oh it was a long time' like you don't just forget that sort of thing, especially when it concerns someone you deeply care for, there were a ton of signs of it already, maybe make it so the tree of harmony made him forget and he then has a grudge against it and possibly Celestia idk just SOMETHING!
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Informative: Pretty sure the Tree of Harmony did make him forget.
9741665
the tree of harmony made him forget in an earlier chapter
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Confusion: are you imitating glitch speak?
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Yes that tree of "harmony"............
Hmm what would be more effective a warhammer or a war axe?
What are other ways for Night to erase that crystal weed?
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Response: This is how this Unit sends messages.
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Response: For crystal, a Warhammer would be more effective.
And this is why ppl dont like true gods, to be told that your family and loved ones matter so little or much have to die to further destiny. But who decides destiny, the god that has nothing to lose or the ppl living their lives trying to be happy. To be told that 'this have to happen' and no matter what you do it will happen, because i will it. That gotta suck.
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Oh thank fuck man that was gonna make me have a aneurysm if you pulled something like that, maybe I should re read this to get all the details again lol
I am okay with this.
...hmm well since you asked for opinions here's my take. I this was a great chapter there was a lot of pay off to previously set up plots like with Luna's fall an the tree jacking his memories. Ending on a powerful note of night bleeding out was great....then you add that bit at the end about silver wing.
Honestly and this really depends on how you handle the next chapter but I would have just dropped that bit. Your climax was night's failure and falling action him bleeding out. That and the background ponies like silver have not really been fleshed out that much it has mostly been night, the princesses, and Starswirl in the action so finding about what happened to silver kinda feels out of place to end on.
Ehh but this is your story you do you. I am enjoying it either way
*sigh*
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This sounds reeeeaaallly goooooood right about now.
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Satisfaction: understandable. Please continue.
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Query: 'Reasly good'?
I personally enjoyed this chapter eventhough it was really dark. This was something that I thought was inevtitable and you did a good job in bringing it into the story.
Now since Night has failed I am really interrested in how he handels this failure. There are so many things that can happen now that he is at this point.
Now I hope you can continue with the good work and please stay alive. I would love to know how this playes out.
Edit:added Spoiler Warning
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Oops. Fixed.
Hey love the story so far. I wonder how the fallout will be after this. Not just the personal reactions like the people close to Luna but on a country scale. A lot of stories tend to skip over that stuff.
Damn
The climax came and done quicker than our Night Wing to react in time. At least, please tell me Sapphire was alright.
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Physically, yes. Emotionally? We'll see after this.
Yup, figured that would happened. The biggest flaw of inserting OC's in stories is when authors force canon to happen regardless. At that point why not use a canon character? That way there is a reason for canon to happen as that character was apart of the story all along.
Or if you must use an OC, dont put them in such an important spot like Night was. Make them a nobody far the main cast so then its understandable why they could not affect the story.
TLDR: Great story, but i hated this chapter
Yay! Thoroughly enjoyable chapter! I wasn't expecting Moon Beam to die, but hey, keeps things realistic. I hope good times comes your way <3
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why did this even get a dislike?
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I may have taken a plot point from somebody. 
I belive I know why. Maybe someone read the comments before reading the chapter. I had a spoiler in my comment I forgot to mark.
And if that is true I'm a little angry at myselfe since I normally put spoiler warnings over everything...
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Right that makes sense now
Next Chapter:
"
Night: 'Shit and Fuck, how did I forget that was coming? Oh well, how many days in a thousand years? Let's see... 365.2425 x 1000 = 365,242.5 or 365,243 rounded up. Sooooo....'
Night: '♫365,243 bottles of beer on the wall♪'
Night: '♫365,243 bottles of beer♪'
Night: '♫Take one down, pass it around♪'
Night: '♫ 365,242 days 'till Twilight Sparkle and the Summer Sun Celebration at Ponyville♪...'
Celestia: "Night? What are you babbling about??"
Night: 'Oh, BTW, Celestia, you'd better get started building a castle on the side of a mountain. You've only got a thousand years to finish it and call the city Canterlot. But you're in luck: you've got almost 900 years before you have to get started building a place called Ponyville.'
Celestia: "
I wonder if night wing will be sealed or go on holiday at some point because celestia is ment to be alone... I don't know why but I have a feeling he'll use some really advanced space magic on some island paradise so that only those who know where it is can find it and if you try to teleport there you end up somewhere else, and get celestia to give twilight the mission of finding him. Also you can't view it from any scrying spells or items.
great chapter but i wish ponies didn't have to die but i suppose that's the order of things. i hope to see more soon
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Actually, canonically ponyville is 400 years, at least according to Twilight during the winter wrap up episode.
So more like 600 years until ponyville needs to be built
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The oldest I recall was 300 yrs, when it was directly mentioned on screen (unfortunately, I don't recall the episode).
Of course, if that was accurate, this creates all sorts of problems with their timeline.
It's also now canon that EVERYTHING that ever happened from the Windigos to Nightmare Moon (including Discord & the disappearance of Starswirl in between) occurred ONLY 1000 yrs ago. Which means only three and a third lifespans end-to-end of ponies reaching Granny Smith's age. Given that you have to have at least a couple generations to bridge those gaps, 1000 yrs is only 10 generations back. (compare it to humans, 1000 yrs is closer to 30-40 generations!)
--now consider the details given in the family history of the Apple's when they were tracing Pinkie Pie's connection to their blood...they'd have to be speaking on the order of several tens of thousands of years!
--now consider all the history that was supposed to be lost under the Age of Discord, how was it that anyone could have held onto records of their family history when one is running, not for your life, but for your very sanity?? Or what would've been lost due to the three-way civil war with the Windigos??
Don't forget: the Pie's family line split off well before 10 generations back!
The canon timeline is just pure crap! And the whole reason this site exists is to try make sense of the nonsensical.
Given that the most reliable time keeper and historians would be creatures who literally can control what day it will be, how long that day will be, of if that day will even happen at all, depending if they're feeling just a wee bit hung over or not....much less the years that might accumulate, and/or get shortened, from a few inaccuracies that might happen if they don't bother getting out of bed....more than once.....
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I know, the timeline is completely ridiculus
Oh, sure, why don't you just rip out my heart with your bare hands.
Loved the chapter though
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Please limit cussing in the comments.
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Lol, what part ripped out your heart?
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Just.. All of it. Night knowing what will happen but being unable to stop it, the pain of conflict between luna and celestia, moon dying, and midnight having to watch the whole thing.
Makes sense that he'd forget things after several years.
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......Harmony erased his memory. Imma have to write that in the next chapters author’s note. No one seemed to realize that.
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Oh. Just simply forgetting seemed to make sense to me. But magic be magic.
Goddamn cliffhangers, now you teasing me XD
DAMN YOU CLIFFHANGERS! P.S. be careful in the shower please, nobody wants this story to end...jk XD Nobody wants to see you face your end.
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Night could plant some feathers...
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No provoking people in the comments please, He already said he was done.