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Hi there my name is...well I guess it doesn't really matter any more so just call Scourge and as you can more than likely tell I'm a displaced so you probbobly already know what happens to me, bought something from a guy at a convention and got sent to another universe, so yeah my life is pretty much completely down the crapper...or is it?

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Hail to the king baby.


I was wandering when a displace Scourge would show up. You had just made my day. ^^

Sonic fan gotta go fast

Hoo boy. Another Sonic displaced story.

Let's see where this goes

HHhhmmmm I kind of hoped it would be Scourge in Equestria and not
Human turned Scourge in Equestria (Displaced), not because I dislike displaced, but because there is much that can be done wrong.

Well I'm going to read it later or tomorrow, I just hope there are not to many crossovers after another or to soon and that they are not used to cheat trough every hard fight the character has to win.

You need to study up on basic grammar, particularly capitalization.

.....YYooouuuuuch, You might want to find an editor first, rewrite the chapter with editer or co-author, then reupload. At the moment due to the first chapter leaving a VERY bad impression, that thumb down ratio is going to be big if chapter 1 remains unchanged, no offense.

interesting start. could use a bit f editing but other than that i like it so far. havent seen one like this before

Does he needs to transform to win against some of the animals that were probably created by Discord?

you just don't get it do you I'm super Scourge I could spin dash this world in two if I wanted"

Now that sounds a bit stronger than I think it's supposed to be.

IT's also slightly strange that he is now OP when he could hardly help himself in his normal form by the looks of it.


Now just a questions as to how the elements are supposed to work. Is he an evil guy or not?, because I only remeember a theory from a story, that the elements have different effects on different beings. Then I heard that the elements are unpredictable and stuff like that, not sure what you used, since I believe the show didn't even tried to explain it.

Well....somehow I'm dissapointed that it'S the turned to stone thing again or that Discord suddenly had a sudden move to take him out. Not saying it can't happen, but sometimes if the characters act so tough, it can be dissapointing to see them suddenly lose.

Well when I noticed it was the scene where Twiligt was fighting Discord, I got really interessted in the story since I believe it has to be their and hopefully Scourge and Celestias first meeting too. (I hate it if she alrady knows everything all the time too, wouldn'T hurt for her to get suprised once in a while too.)
However I guess that is why I was so dissapointed that it ended with Scourge being turned to stone. Wait......that could also mean it was the fight Luna and Celestia against Discord.

Well for some reason I hope it's not just them hating Scourge because of no reason again.

While I hope that Scourge has a part of his comic personality while not being to much the Villain he is, I also want him to be....well the human he was, otherwise there would be no point into letting a human change into Scourge only to make the human act like Scourge, an character he could have been right away.

I give it a chance, but till now it's not really good and not really bad.

This is poorly written, makes no sense and is overall your average Displaced fic.

I'm not even surprised at this point, honestly. More surprised that you managed to tick every cliche in the book in the first chapter. So here's my advice.

Ditch this entirely. Displaced is not a good genre of fimfic. It's oversaturated, generic to the point of every trope involved in this first chapter being predictable and is just plain bad to people outside of the Displaced fandom who have any semblance of a critical eye.

Failing that, get an editor. Sweet dear Celestia, this needs an editor just to scrape through all the spelling mistakes, not to mention all the less than obvious things people might not pick up on due to said spelling mistakes assaulting them.

Failing that, just like proofread the damn thing before you publish it next time. Go over it, enunciate the sentences, see if it makes sense. Hell, use Google to spell words if you're really stuck, that's what I do.

Not a promising start is all I'm saying.

Not the worst story I've read, but definitely not perfect either. Some edits on the grammar, some spelling, and punctuation, and you should be pretty good. I'll be sure to keep an eye on this story to see how it goes. Also, it's most definitely not terrible for your first story.

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Actually he could do that...he said so in the comic's...god I am a nerd

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sorry, but do you meant the stone thing I was talking about or?....

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I think he meant the whole 'cutting the planet in two' bit.

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oh okay, I guess that was what happened after his transformation right, something he said I mean.
Well I guess I was just suprised that at first he was running away like a bunny could hurt him or whatever that was that Discord created and with his transformation he was suddenly stronger than everything else or he thought.

edit: I hope I remember the right things in the right story right now.

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If the real Scourge was in Equistria, then the whole world would be fucked. This character isn’t even from the games but they are from Archie Comic’s. Equestria would never have a chance.

This is an ok first story but there are problems obviously present. Don’t worry much though, you’ll only get better the more you read and write. Too bad people will downvote this just because it’s a Sonic Displaced. I was actually brainstorming on doing a Scourge Displaced story. Before that, I had planned to To a Buddy The Wolf Displaced (Sonic Forces), Chaos Displaced (Sonic Adventure), Knuckles Displaced (Sonic 3 &Knuckles), and a Classic Sonic Displaced (Sonic Mania) but eventually just went for a regular Modern Sonic Displaced. I hope someone reads this comment and gets inspired to write one of these good.

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I know the one from the comics, I still think the same however.

You need capitalization in the title

I wish this would continue

Are you going to continue this?

Please continue this fanfic!!it looks aswome so far :)

Would've been nice to see more chapters

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