Love the story so far you changed it from the original inspiration unlike some people by quite a bit good job you've done well👌👌👌👌

you still need to capitalize the I's

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Done and thanks for the tip, because so I could find other errors too.

Yep, still good quality, albeit a bit short for my tastes.

AHAHHAHAHAAHHA this is good!
this is waaaaaaaaay better than the other one CTRL C, CTRL V fic!
friggin noob!

Hay Good Job on this Keep up the Good Work

This just keeps getting better and better I loved it ,and his new power and new look.

mayordomo del diablo

A winged creature known as birds

A winged creature known as birds

A winged creature known as birds

...This is a complete supposition on my part, but are you perhaps not a native english speaker?

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insects have wing too. as well as some mammals, so he was just being specific.

Soon many chipmunks went out of their woody homes and looked at him, but not only they found interest in him.

Went from first person to third here and for the rest of the paragraph.

"let's see what else I can do. ". I said with a huge smile that either pinkie pie or someone completely insane would make.

Those two are not mutually exclusive!

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...You are correct... Wow, a pink pony puts the Joker to shame...