But It's Still a Party!

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Ma Zedong #1 · Feb 20th, 2018 · 10 · 1 · Even if it's a Party for Two! ·

I feel kind of ambivalent about this. The writing itself wasn't bad at all, but the setup just felt lacking. It seemed like things were chugging along just fine, there was a gradual buildup going on, but then within a few sentences we're suddenly in the sex part of the story. I suppose if I'd gone into this story with a desire to fap and I didn't care about the storyline at all, that'd be fine... but then what's the point of the setup anyways? The abrupt transition from buildup to sex just left me feeling unsatisfied overall, the beginning half felt like it served no real purpose and the second half seemed comparatively shallow.

On the other hand, as I stated before, the writing itself wasn't bad. It's just that the transition from plot to 'plot' happened so abruptly that I had to go back and read the first half to make sure I hadn't missed any hints. Really, if there had been more logical buildup towards the moment kissy-kissy happened, I think this would have been a solid semi-erotic romance. As it stands, I can't bring myself to give an upvote but it's also nowhere near deserving a downvote.

Midknight_Stardust