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Shimmer_Bolt
To write is to create entire universes. You are a god. But will you be a kind god or a cruel god? Unfortunately, many are cruel, simply to entertain other gods.
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Looks like an interesting start so far.
Ill give it a follow
The Monk
“On her doorstep was Twilight Sparkle. While Derpy deeply respected the mare, like most in Ponyville, they wished she'd either switch to decaf, or start hitting the harder stuff.” -Dan_s Comments
A good start is aways good
I'm sorry are twilight's friends celesta's students too in this universe?
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Remember when Celestia decided to make them all write letters to her at one point?
Seems interesting so far , let's so how it develops
Hmm, rather interesting beginning, though it seemed to beat around the bush a little at first. Still, the ending has peaked my interest with Twilight somehow still caring about the sphere, so I’ll keep tracking. Though, why did Celestia change her mind about it so suddenly? And why was the adventure supposed to test the Mane 6 so much as indicated?
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Well, at this point in MLP, Twilight is quite literally the 'Princess of Friendship.' What you have here is a possibly world shattering object from another galaxy, and a if Celestia was a smart leader like we hope she is, she'd give it the one chance before sending it off. After all, they couldn't make friends with it in the past thousand years. If this time were different, then maybe they'd let it stay, but it wasn't.
The question is, would you let such a dangerous object stay when it shows no sign of peace whatsoever?
Also, here's an upvote for your question. I appreciate questions.
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It’s nice to see an author willing to discuss their story.
EDIT: Switching to actual quotation marks as using the spoiler bars over quotations is neigh impossible.
“After all, they couldn't make friends with it in the past thousand years. If this time were different, then maybe they'd let it stay, but it wasn't. The question is, would you let such a dangerous object stay when it shows no sign of peace whatsoever?”
What you suggest is definitely true, but I feel like you are simplifying it a little too much. Let me elaborate:
The object was there for over a thousand years now and according to Celestia and Luna, they tried to awaken it on multiple occasions, but always with the same result. I presume that’s the reason why they immediately knew how to act when it went hostile once more. So, then Celestia decided to invite Twilight and her friends to try to befriend the thing, yet when it starts acting as usual, they decide to dispose of it. I believe Celestia to be a wise ruler, so I presume she didn’t think Twilight’s mere presence would make the thing friendlier—for making friends takes time. Also, if the reaction wasn’t somehow stronger or unusual compared to the previous ones, why is getting rid of it suddenly needed so much? I’d understand that if it demolished a good chunk of Canterlot or something, but this seems just like another failed attempt they were prepared for. So inviting Twilight et al. to witness that, only to send them away at the first sign of failure seems a little wasteful to me.
Also let me know if I should mark this all as spoilery.
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Well, I don't wanna be rude and just ignore the readers.
I appreciate every single comment. It helps me learn how to improve.
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Oh, and there are some more spoilers that would've explained that, but at the moment, I can't reveal them.
EDIT: Maybe mark down that thing as spoiler text as well.
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I can say that seeing the author respond to comments in a proper way makes any story far more inviting to read
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Alright, I understand.
Great chapter, nice to see some of the alternate human history. I hope there will be more of these flashbacks of sort in the future, hinting at Susan’s purpose in greater detail. Also, her antice really made me laugh, reminded me of Number 5. I have to wonder though, why was Celestia keeping the alleged weapon of mass destruction in her room, guarded only by her magic that could be easily cancelled? That just seems dangerous, especially given there are safer vaults in the Castle. And also, if Celestia’s only problem was just the countdown, why didn’t Twilight and Luna try to talk to her about it? Or, alternatively, why didn’t Luna at least help them steal Susan by making Celestia fall into deep sleep or something?
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I wish I could think of everything, though. Would make things a lot easier. As for Luna, I was going to explain later in the story where she says she doesn't want to ruin her relationship with Celestia. Although, I could go off the fact that Twilight is Celestia's prodigy. It would make sense if she had SOME sense of how to get around Celestia's bubble. Most other unicorns would most likely not be able to cancel it out. 
Sadly, I actually don't have an answer for these particular questions. While there WILL be more flashbacks, as that's part of the story, I can't really explain simple stupidity, especially when it's on my part. I'm only human.
EDIT: also, here's an upvote for your questions!
Nice looking forward to more
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By the way, if it starts annoying you, let me know!
It is my job to be nitpicky and sometimes I just can’t help myself
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It's all good. Could never be annoying