Zachary's life has been hard. His parents cared but left him to rot with his foster parents, who saw him as a slave. He gets beat up almost everyday by sixth graders, who don't know the true pain he has been through. How much more can he take? He then wakes up in a world unknown to him, where he finds out more about his past, and the dark truth that lies ahead.
This story isn't just a story about a child getting mistreated, then getting sent to Equestria, it's more than that. Everyone and everypony has a reason for what they do, but those reasons remain a mystery, until... you find out what is really happening. That's what I tried to do, anyway. It's your own opinion.
Cover art by: Johnrunner Jonrunner1
Chapters (11)
Please continue!!!
Damnit why can't I ever find a kid in equestria that doesn't make me want to shred someone by their toes with pyrokinetic adimantine blade and dump the remnants to jaws!
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Continuing as we speak. I'm glad you ejoyed the first chapter
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don't worry, Zachary's foster parents are going to get a punishment that they derserve
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That is oddly specific.
Quite a few spelling mistakes, using the same word over and over can get repetitive and the chapter seemed rushed. Slow down the pacing by adding more detail and use some variety in your sentences instead of the same word, for the spelling, I suggest getting an editor or an editing program such as Grammarly
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thanks for the suggestion, I will find an editor, and I will put more words into the next chapter
Good start, dude!
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Thank you
Nicely done! I look forward to more!
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No problem!
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I'm glad your enjoying it so far.
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Yup!
Omg I can’t for the next chapter lol
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and i just realized the error at the end. Hold on, let me fix that
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but....... what are they planning to do
thanks for your comment
Awesome, dude! I'm loving this story! Keep it up!
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Thanks.
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No problem!
ooh yessss sweet sweet justice but i wonder how will celestia and luna punish her and i hope they catch his foster dad next but make it more brutal he deserves it for 2 reasons first is obvious he hurt zachery and second he f**king pulled a gun on twilight great story keep it up.
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Don't worry, they will be punished, though, not in a bloody way, but it still can be brutal. Thanks for the comment, i shall get back to work soon
This is one of my favorite stories
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Thank you
Nicely done! I liked it!
Great chapter! Also, Anyone else feeling any sympathy for Melissa
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Thank you. Though I feel like a rushed this one a bit
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Thanks for you comment, and Melissa does have a tragic past.... but you will not feel any sympathy for John.
Looks like diamond tiara and silver spoon is in huge trouble this time
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Yep, wonder what will happen to them.
I love this story already! It could use a couple of fixes, but it’s great! Also, is anyone getting the vibe of A Series of Unfortunate Events? His foster parents sound like Count Olaf.
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Thank you, I'll try to make as many fixes as possible.
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So a flame controlling diamond like blade?
Seems legit
I imagibe John and Melissa like a darker and more evil, bit still comical, Jessie and James from the Pokémon anime.
Its official! this is my new favorite story!
Also i think I hate john even more now.
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That's understandable, also, thank you
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Yeah, except... their backstory is very dark..... and through reading this.... you find out the reasons why... but i did try to make Melissa a little bit funny with one of my chapter's
Nice!
Well, I hope Silver Spoon comes back as a nicer pony to Zachary!
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She might, though, still not sure. I might add a backstory on why she became friends with Diamond Tiara in the first place, though
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Cool! I look forward to that!
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Yeah, but........ what's REALLY going on? Why is the pocket watch showing Jon all those images? Well, take a trip... and find out....
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All right, dude!
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Actually it's a adamantine encrusted blade with sharktooth Damascus and serrated edge on one side I have a mechanism to light its cloth coverings
Wait till she finds out who designed the coaster.
Awesome job, dude!
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That is...... Interesting
Great chapter! I love this story sooooooooooooooooo much and my love for it grows with each chapter! When I check my notifications and don't see a new chapter I'm like
"This is the Worst possible thing!!!"
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Thank you. Though, for some reason, I didn't get the notification that you posted this comment, so sorry for not getting back to you sooner. Thank you for your comment, and now, I shall get to work on the next chapter
i created a group here on fimfiction where you can find Hella Awesome stories and ive added this story to the folder containing the best stories!
For those who dont know hella means extremely or a large amount/number of.