Carrow was a teenager unaware of the rumors that spread about. With a vendetta someone dared her with the alluring temptation of money to challenge this rumor. However, it proved to be much more then she bargained for as her death loomed upon her. She now finds herself trapped by Changelings with no way of escape with any day inching closer to becoming a slave. Due to this she makes a proposal to gamble for freedom, each game will either decide if she gets closer to the light or deeper in the depths.
Crossover: Wakfu-Tactical RPG/Netflix series
Warnings: If the tags weren’t any indication there will be a lot of cursing and/or sexual references; If you haven’t watched Wakfu before there is nothing to be wary of. This story was written in mind that people wouldn't know what Wakfu is.
Disclaimer: The coverart is not mine, it was altered slightly but the original artist was Tostantan on deviant art
luck can be fickle. I hope she's ready for loss when it happens.
Sounds interesting so far. Looking forward to the game^^
Interesting intro, can't say more for now.
To Gypsybard,
Interesting so far. Do you have a plan for future events or just play along?
8748522 I do have a few plans going along with this, sort of learned what happens if you don’t the hard way
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I know how it feels.
So ecaflip I use Sram myself
A little off-put by how Carrow didn't come off as intimidated by someone who'd had her chained and has the wealth and resources to have not only have a throne room but subdue someone into it with little fuss.
But, the sheer oddity of having the Queen ask to play a simple game of blackjack for a bet has me marginally intrigued.
8755272 She was more pissed off then intimidated, she's looking at a bug that jumped her. Also as a gambler she has to retain a poker face in order to make her seem less susceptible. Although sensing emotions is sort of what Changlings do so in the end it was all for naught. Not that she knew that, a lack of information on one side puts another at an advantage
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Indeed, and while there would normally be something to some random person being a jerk to you, it's a wholly different dynamic when that person has you completely at their mercy, in chains, in a giant castle, and that person is a massive bug-horse.
Granted, the poker face could indeed come into the equation and Carrow could have been deeply frightened on the inside, but neither of those concepts were communicated to the audience.
You wouldn't even necessarily have to edit much either for a chapter as short as this. A simple line about how much Carrow's head hurts and her vision swimming a bit, and boom, all of the other "oddities" are just "possible hallucinations" and present no real danger or her senses are simply muddled so Carrow isn't capable of understanding the enormity of the situation before her, thus making it much more reasonable to show nothing but contempt to the "mean voice coming from the blackish, humming, blob".
8755526 Thank you for bringing that part to light, I really should've done that when I first wrote this. I'll be sure to watch out for those in the next chapter and attempt to incorporate it more clearly.
Also by making those edits I was able to make the chapter a tad bit longer and improve upon areas I accidently missed.
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Good, but I would strongly suggest some mention of swimming vision. A headache in and of itself could very well just mean a hangover (though mention of a beaten body does dissuade this slightly, but it's not enough to make no mention of feeling fear unnoticeable). Perhaps a simple mention of 'it being hard to focus', would not go amiss.
That said, well done on the being beaten up bit, definitely helps to set up the scene.
8756139 Shoot I missed something again, I’m so used to writing in 3rd person that I always aim for details that anyone can clearly see set in the scene. I should probably find an editor real soon to help me out on this but in the meantime thanks for continued feedback. I also failed to communicate subtle fears as well as you mentioned before. Due to changlings being able to feed off of emotions, specifically love, I’ll be sure to have that play a role next chapter.
huh canceled? is this a mistake or just you are done with this?
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Did you not read the author's note?
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sorry, there was a glitch so I didn't see the note.
Is sad when stories get cancelled