Aw that was sweet at the end

More of the mystery has been revealed. I'm glad the rod didn't work. I was expecting him to bing it back to Ponyville or the outskirts of Ponyville first TBQH. Mostly in the hopes that the rod would remember the location it was activated from making it easier for Allen to get back to Equestria if he could. Thanks for the update. I'm looking forward to the next one.

Are you going to finish the story

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It would be in very poor taste to leave you all hanging.

Last updated 23rd Feb 2020

we will have been hanging for a year in 3 days.

I'd love to see this story continue. It's amazing. 😊

Update?

Hay partes de esta historia que destrozan mi suspensión de la incredulidad, la parte del hospital, la creación de un dispositivo que crea portales portales dimensionales al estilo de la zona fantasma de Superman, por niños superdotados

Todo es descrito de tal forma que me recuerda a las viejas películas de Hollywood, o dicho con otras palabras

El autor no atendió en clases las materia de Biología y física, y la electrónica es un sueño en la distancia, ahora hace fanfic con las frases mas clichés posibles que encontró de la ciencia ficción, es como que quiere hacer interesante la historia con el inicio, pero el desarrollo de los conceptos que utiliza asesina la inteligencia del lector, y si hasta yo que no se nada de estas materias puedo ver el asesinato masivo intelectual que está cometiendo, dice mucho del autor

There are parts of this story that shatter my suspension of disbelief, the hospital part, the creation of a device that creates dimensional portals in the style of Superman's Phantom Zone, by gifted children

Everything is described in such a way that it reminds me of old Hollywood movies, or in other words

The author did not attend Biology and Physics in classes, and electronics is a dream in the distance, now he makes fanfic with the most clichéd phrases possible that he found in science fiction, it's like he wants to make the story interesting with the beginning , but the development of the concepts that he uses murders the intelligence of the reader, and if even I who know nothing about these matters can see the massive intellectual murder that he is committing, it says a lot about the author,

I dare to say that the story loses the interest of the readers and gains points against every time it talks about something scientific

it should be the opposite because in general scientific terms bring reality and hardness to the fictional universes created by the authors, here they are used as clichés that must be inserted, which make readers believe that someone missed classes

in all honesty i liked this fic, the mc here, allen, is the most non chalant person ive ever seen, there were so many scenes which i thought would go the same cliche'd drama path but instead mc decided to take it easy from the start, like the scene with luna and her saying humans existed in equestria before him. a (based on fimfiction standards) normal mc would freak out or atleast be more curious about it, but him being him just sipping tea munching on biscuits. i wish if this story were to continue he would play more towards the carefree and calm character he is.