Twilight realizes something...
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Lovely story from start to finish, throughout the whole read all I could think of was the fourth wall being broken! Good work on the story and hope to see future works from yourself. Poor Spike though.
Okay, now 2/6 of the elements have discovered the wall...
Rename thisstory mindfuck.
Because you just fucked with my mind, a lot.
She knows!
Now we'll have to kill her
I am pleased
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My mind is blown.
Meta exposition is meta.
Very nicely done.
I'm horrified. Errata everywhere: their/there, Twilights/Twilight's, Pinkies/Pinkie's, loose/lose, "Stepping towards the unicorn."(frag), "Gripping the handle of the door and slowly creaking it open he lightly stepped into the building."(false run-on), "Whether it being a certain event that's supposed to happen stresses her out or not delivering a lesson to her mentor on time."(false conditional), "...qwirky and can borderline insane.", etc.
However, what's wrong with the writing doesn't concern me much. These kinds of things happen when trying to convert an idea into a story. What horrifies me is what's right with the writing: complex sentence structures, appropriate use of semicolons, the use (and correct spelling) of words like minuscule, comatose, theoretically, etc.
It's like this was transcribed by someone who only cares about the big picture.
Someone with a massive understanding of everything going on, but who isn't concerned about the day-to-day.
Someone vibrant.
Someone bouncy.
Someone... pink.
a̎ͩͥͨn̰̻̅͂͐d̙͒ͣ̅͗̄̑̉͞ ̩̫̻̱̥͊ͧ̎̒̈́̍͞n̜̝̹ͭͯ̂ͪ̎͒o̞͖̰̒͂ͬ̑̌ͤw̦̱̮̍̓͊ͤ͋ͨ͗ ͕͖͈͎̻̻ͦ͌͂͌͗ͧ͜I̵̼̙͇̞̮̪̲͐ͦ̆̉͆͗ ̬͙̤̼c̮̠̖͓̮̖̐̋ͪ͗́̌̕a̽͆̾ͥͦ͏̙ń̦̯͖̠̯̟̯̒͂'̥͖͓̙͍̆̄̾͒́̅͘ť̥̹̐̄̈̆ͧ̔ ̴̹̮̙̭̭ͭ̑s̻̀̃̈̊̽͠t̮̯̖̟͕͖͖͒ͯ̏ò͗̒̿̒ͬ̈́҉̣̥̩p̵̌ ̮̦̣͓̂͆̍͞s̝̤ͤͩ̿͛͌͌͒ȅ̔̉̿͛̚͢e͓̮̺͖͋́̿̌͐̓͋i͔̻͓̲̠̪̾̎̚ṇ̗ͯ͒͐ǧ̠̠̠͂ͩ̔̓̃͜ ̜͍̜͢ģ͎̝̝͖ͭͯͧ͑̋͗ͅr̮ĕ͖͇͓̳̙͐͋ͨ́e͈͔͆͜ń͗̏̈ͮ̒̂͏̰̫̮͎̱ ̳̘̌s̷̫̭̬͍̍ͧ́̎͐ẘ̚i̩̻̦̝͚͇̣ͣ͗͗ͨ̈̚r̛̘̦l̞̖͚̥͙͙ͮ͋̃y̼̩̼̠̍ ͦ̌̉ͣͯ̚̚ĕ͇͘y̩̦̿͂̈̋̋ͣ̓e͍̲̻͇̮̳ͅs̛͇̗̬̰̱̍̑͐̏ͯ̒
957515 Yay
Thanks mate, it would suffer from grammical errors indeed, only a few nights of work on it.
Sounds good, ill do-over with some things later, thanks.
-Stealth1139
Dum dum duuum!
This was reasonably funny and meta.
Just in case Pinkie comes around with a pitch for another story: Don't you dare not take it.
need more
0_0 -_- 0_0
Great read, totally captured my headcannon Pinkie Pie!
Mind = Blown
So Pinkie knows shes a animated cartoon character?
The fourth wall breaking stories don't really accomplish anything if everyone whose mind is blown rememers nothing at the end. It would be like all the ponies forgetting whatever lesson they learned at the end of every episode. Or any other story in existence where, "It was all a dream. The end."
goood... This story pleases me greatly...
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I liked this
Mr. Writer: "I have taught you well my young apprentice."
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My mind is blown.
Who is truer? That which you are or those who define what you are?
Thankyou everyone for reading, hoping for a feature but this is great anyway.
Thanks for all the favorites, the corrections, love for it, everything.
If Pinkie was here, she would
Uhhh... Pinkie now isn't the best time.
Well thanks again and I'll write some more stuff when I get around to it.
-Stealth1139
Loved the story
Forth wall why u keep breaking
997918 Be careful Writer, I may visit your story in the future with my taxi cab and Twilight and Pinkie in tow. Besides, Pinkie is a Cloudcukoolander.
That's a real word. Look it up on tvtropes.org
-The Character
Wow that got kinda dark there at the end. Still a good read though. Gotta love Twilight's freak out moments.
was she even down their
pouring he liquids
1: there.
2: the liquids.
Now that that's out of the way. . .
*starts breathing heavily*
If I don't remember something, how can I know for sure it happened? For all I know, I could be three seconds old and have had just the memories implanted into my head making me think that I have been living this life for years.
*heavy panting*
I don't even know if I'm real any more!!! I could be just a figment of future non-existant me's imagination.
*hyperventelating*
I- I- I'm not real!?!?!
*looks into pinkie's eyes*
-*THUMP*-
*Click*
Reminds me of Animorphs. Am I the only one who read those books?
I totally expected that ending
Loved it <3
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