Chapter 1 - We Done Goofed
It was the very next day, as Celestia's bright and shining sun rose high into the sky to signfy the start of a brand new day...
Inside the Apple Family's farmhouse, Applejack, Big Macintosh, and Granny Smith were inside, having just about woken up, and halfway done with their complete breakfast of pancakes, with a few glasses of apple cider. No pony had noticed of course until later on that something or somepony was missing...
"That's funny," said Granny Smith, gulping down one bite of pancake from her plate. "Ah haven't seen or heard a peep out of Apple Bloom all day! She never misses pancake morning, where could she be?"
"We haven't seen her since yesterday afternoon, Granny." Applejack replied.
"Eeyup." answered Big Mac.
"Funny thing," Granny said. "Ah heard there was some drama going around town 'bout Apple Bloom's school newspaper print'n some questionable stuff that's gotten every pony all up in a tizzy more than a rattlesnake with a beehive stuck on its head!"
'Eeyup, we unfortunately got stories 'bout both of us in that gossip column." Applejack replied. "An' when t' Crusaders tried ta get us ta agree ta another story 'bout us, Ah was too angry ta even talk, and Big Mac sure gave 'em an earful and told them ta buzz off..."
All of a sudden, Granny Smith slammed her front hooves on the table in disgust.
"Why, that's just doggone awful!"
"Ah know!" Applejack agreed. "T’ nerve of Apple Bloom, humiliating her own siblings like that an' all fer some dumb ol’ cutie mark!"
"No, no, darling," said Granny Smith, "Ah'm not talk'n 'bout Apple Bloom, Ah meant you two!"
"What?" her grandchildren were both surprised at their grandmother's disapproving tone. "We didn't..."
"Ah can't believe you'd be so selfish an' harsh towards yer sister like that! An’ over somethin’ so ridiculous as a gossip column!"
"But, Granny..." Applejack argued.
"But noth'n!" their grandmother snapped. "Now Ah'm sure that what they did was wrong, but ya'll should remember that Apple Bloom's still just a little filly, she don’t know any better! All foals make mistakes, an’ ignoring ‘em an’ hollering at ‘em like they're wild animals is not t' way ta solve a problem! You're supposed ta sit down an' talk with them an' straighten things out."
"We were just..."
"Darling, it pains me ta say it," Granny Smith's angry tone began to calm, yet remained with a hint of disgust and disappointment. "But Ah fear that you've brought shame, something fierce upon this household with how y'all both treated yer little sister over something that wasn't that important ta you at all! Ah bet that if yer ma an' pa were still with us, they'd be pretty disappointed as much as Ah am right now. What you both did, was probably just as hurtful as any story those three fillies could write."
"But... but..." Applejack stammered out.
"Now if y'all will excuse me, Ah'll be finishing my meal in the den, 'cause it seems like you two have some serious think'n ta do..."
And with that, Granny Smith carried her plate of half eaten pancakes and stormed off to the living room, leaving Applejack and Big Macintosh still at the table, stunned, and confused at what had just transpired. They began to think back to that moment before, that yesterday afternoon when the Cutie Mark Crusaders came by to ask for a new story and for help, and how Applejack had outright ignored them and Big Macintosh turned them away. Thinking back to how she refused to listen to her little sister, the one pony who looked up to her as much as Scootaloo looked up to Rainbow Dash, made Applejack's ears begin to droop.
At that moment, the two ponies' consciences began to become one and manifest themselves into the form of a beautiful angelic looking pony with a horn and wings and draped in a flowing white dress, hovering above them.
"Granny Smith is right you know," said the angel pony. "Even if the Crusaders made a big mistake, that did not give you the right to outright turn them away and holler at them like a puppy that left a spot on the carpet. You two should be ashamed of yourselves!"
Suddenly, another form took shape next to the two siblings, this form appeared almost ghastly and had a look mischievousness on it's smile. It looked like a pony, but it was a blood red color, with black wings, and two black horns atop its head, and its hooves were cloven like a goat. It also had a long, spikey tail, and carried a pitchfork in one hoof.
"Aw, don't listen to that goody two-horseshoes!" chuckled the devil pony. "You gave those little brats just what they deserved. How else are little fillies supposed to learn anything if you don't put your hoof down when they mess up big time?"
"You've known Apple Bloom since the day she was born," argued the angel pony. "Do you honestly think that she'd hurt you two and your friends on purpose?"
"If I remember correctly," Devil Pony, scratched the goatee on his chin. "She wrote in the paper that you Applejack were a lazy slacker, and that Big Mac has some really weird attachment to your friend Twilight's old fillyhood doll!"
"I know things look bad, but how do you think Apple Bloom feels right now? It's only pretty obvious that the poor dear must be so sad!" Angel Pony painted a visual picture with her magic of Apple Bloom with a sad face.
"Pah!" scoffed the devil. "Who cares? She'll get over it eventually."
While the consciences continued to battle, Applejack turned to her older brother.
"Big Mac, please tell me Granny Smith is wrong, we weren't that hard on her, were we?"
Big Macintosh thought back to that moment when he told the Crusaders that they should be ashamed of themselves and to take their gossip and their embarrassing pictures and go away, and thinking back to how he not only turned away his little sister when she and her friends tried to reason with them and ask for help, but he also probably had to go and mentally scar her.
Hanging his head in shame, the only words the stallion could utter out were, "Eeyup, we were..."
Applejack felt her heart begin to split, as she then buried her head in her hat, overcome with guilt.
"Ah... ah can't believe it..." she moaned, her voice muffled by her hat. "Should've known... Ah got mad at my own little sis an' her friends fer no good reason, Ah'm so stupid!"
Devil Pony began to laugh, getting a sick kick out of seeing the two overcome with guilt. "Face it A.J, you and Big Mac haven't much luck at helping raise a dependable, faithful little sibling as you do keeping a good reputation!"
"You're not stupid, A.J." reassured Angel Pony. "You two just made some bad decisions. If I were you, I'd march straight up to Apple Bloom's room, sit down and talk things over with her and figure out what's going. Who knows? There might be more to this than just wanting a cutie mark."
"I'd hate to admit it," agreed Devil Pony. "But that's a great idea! Of course, the chances are that Apple Bloom will be too upset to talk or she's probably gone and run off somewhere, but then again, how's she going to escape? It's not like she can just trot right out the front door or anything..."
"Okay, you two really ain't helping our case at t' moment." Applejack said, growing annoyed.
"Eeyup!" agreed Big Mac.
"Oh, right! Bye!" And with that, the manifestations disappeared.
"C'mon Big Mac," A.J then said to her brother. "Let's go check on our little sis."
The two earth ponies then exited the kitchen and quietly began to climb up the stairs to the door to Apple Bloom's room. Once they had stopped at the door, Applejack quietly knocked on the door.
"Apple Bloom?" she asked. "Sugarcube, are ya okay in there?"
There was no answer.
"Maybe she didn't hear us." she said to Big Mac.
So she tried again. "Sugarcube, please open up. We'd like ta apologize..."
"We just want ta talk, sis." Big Mac said, looking through the doorknob to see if the lights were off in the room. "We ain't here ta yell at ya again."
Still no answer.
"Apple Bloom, ya can't stay in there all day! At least come out before yer gonna be late fer school!"
"She might be still asleep." A.J concluded. "Ah'll go in first an’ wake her up..."
Applejack slowly turned the doorknob, opened the door and crept inside. Granny Smith was just walking upstairs when she saw Big Mac outside the door to the room, and smiled.
"Now that's what Ah'd like ta see..." she whispered, proud to see that her grandchildren understood their mistake and were working to try and fix it. "Ah just hope that Apple Bloom isn't too upset."
The moment was soon interrupted by the sound of a blood curdling scream from inside the room. Shocked and fearing the worst, Granny Smith and Big Mac burst through the lit room and found Applejack, hyperventilating and an empty, almost messy room with no sign of Apple Bloom in sight.
"What is it, A.J? What happened? Where is she?!" asked Big Mac.
"S-s-she's gone!" cried Applejack.
"She's WHAT?!" Completely shocked for a moment, Big Mac recomposed himself and then asked, "Are ya sure she didn't leave early fer school?"
“All of her favorite things are gone...” she sniffed. “Even her picture of Ma and Pa an’ her favorite bow are gone!”
"She couldn't have gone that far..." said Granny Smith, growing increasingly worried. "You two, check every square inch of Sweet Apple Acres. Ah'll get in contact with t' relatives an’ see if anypony's seen her!"
Applejack and Big Macintosh dashed out of the room and immediately began searching all over the farm.
They searched high, and they searched low.
They searched inside and even outside.
They even searched around the Crusaders’ clubhouse, but they found that it also was empty...
Oh, how they were so worried, searching every nook and cranny, vainly calling out their sister's name as they searched, but to no avail.
Finally, Applejack, headed upstairs to her room, stuck her head out the window, and with tears in her eyes, hollered out at the top of her lungs, echoing so loud that it could be heard almost across Equestria.
"AAAAAAAAPPPPPPPPPPLLLLLEEEEEEE BLLLLLLLLLLOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOMMMMMMMMMM!!!!!!!!!"
And at that very moment, both Applejack and Big Macintosh realized how badly, they done goofed....
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I got to know is the hypocrisy going to be directly addressed to any of the Mane 6, because Rarity being a shameless gossip who didn't care until it was about her and Rainbow Dash getting mad for getting exactly what she asked for is something I want see get put into light the most out of any other?
in your blog you asking everybody to help with the next chapter this is what I had in mind you can't use it if you want
In the show Sweetie Belle got hold of Rarity's diary and printed something in the paper, we all don't know what but what if diamond tiara printed something else out of the diary that could ruin a friendship
In the diary Rarity admit that she secretly hope by doing too much stuff for her he would gets tired of her and fall for somepony else for she has no feeling towards him whatsoever, and because according to her he is too young.
When Twilight find out about this she fine that Spike has mysteriously disappeared only to fine a note saying he can't stay in the town where he felt he was being used all the time and Rarity only use him for Stuff so he went back to Canterlot to stay with Twilight's parents. Twilight went to Rarity house and to have a heated argument about why she would put that in her diary and use Spike like that only to find the house was empty.
Meanwhile Rarity went to her parents house to talk to Sweetie Belle about why she was put that in the paper about her and Spike, believing Sweetie Belle went there after she couldn't find her in her house the other night. When she got there her parents told her she wasn't there because they thought she was with her. Rarity told them everything and when she was finished they were so upset, because not only she treated Spike like that but also have no idea where Sweetie Belle is, so they went out to find Sweetie Belle.
And Diamond tiara was talking to Silver Spoon about Gabby gums and admit it that she plan this whole thing just to get Ponyville to turn against the Cutie Mark Crusaders and also admitted that she were blackmailing them in to keep embarrassing the ponies of Ponyville, But they don't know that Cheerilee and Filthy Rich overheard them, while the father went to talk to the two girls about this and Cheerilee went to tell the citizens of Ponyville about this and tell them about what diamond tiara have done.
I hope you're not upset about this it just my opinion
Love this chapter, and I can't wait for the next one!
And you wrote Granny just right! Live her giving them both what-for over their mess-up.
I mean, AJ is my favorite pony (also Best Pony
), butt sometimes I think there are times when she needs a good, hard old-fashioned Gibbs Slap to the back of the head.
Let the hunt begin! Great job on the chapter, worth the wait!
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Thanks, I tried to write Granny Smith as being disappointed and furious at her grandchildren, but also understanding that they were upset but handled the situation poorly.
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Wait and see my friend...
Yeah... they really done goofed. The CMC were probably in the next town by now.
Can't wait for the next chapter!
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I really like this idea you presented. I hope Splash Surfer 216 uses that idea for this story.
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Next town? I'd say they'd be close to halfway to the other side of Equestria by then.
8782576 Well you succeeded admirably, I would say.
It was at that moment Applejack knew..... she [BEEP]ed up.
Applejack, do you honestly believe, without a shadow of a doubt, that Apple Bloom would humiliate you on purpose
? If you do you are an idiot
! Period point blank
!
Truer words have never been spoken. Exactly the words that I was thinking, Granny Smith
.
Another well written chapter
. Nice to see Granny Smith pointing out Applejack and Big Mac's mistake, other than Apple Bloom's. I can't wait to see what happens with the others, and how they'll react when they realize the CMC are missing
.
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I’d rather not drag Spike into this, too much. He confessed his feelings to Rarity and she accepted it in “Secret of My Excess.” Plus, Spike hardly did anything wrong in the episode other than telling the CMC to piss off as well.
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I might go back and tweak that one line a little bit to mention the thought that they also did to see if they’d get their cutie marks...
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Me too
Thanks
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Then how about Rarity was pregnant with a child before Sweetie Belle was born and given it up for adoption, and now diamond tiara got that from the diary and printed on the paper, not only that but also the name of that child and it live right in Ponyville with it adopted parents who did not tell the child that it was orphan before all of this.
Rarity did not tell the family about her pregnancy and kept quiet about it the only one who knew was Sweetie Belle for she read the diary but decided not to say anything and did not tell diamond tiara about it. But Diamond Tiara did found out about it and did it anyway.
Meanwhile Rarity went to her parents house to talk to Sweetie Belle about why she was put that in the paper about her, believing Sweetie Belle went there after she couldn't find her in her house the other night. When she got there her parents told her she wasn't there because they thought she was with her. Rarity told them everything and when she was finished they were so upset, because not only she had a child and not tell them about it, but also have no idea where Sweetie Belle is, so they went out to find Sweetie Belle.
And Diamond tiara was talking to Silver Spoon about Gabby gums and admit it that she plan this whole thing just to get Ponyville to turn against the Cutie Mark Crusaders and also admitted that she were blackmailing them in to keep embarrassing the ponies of Ponyville, But they don't know that Cheerilee and Filthy Rich overheard them, while the father went to talk to the two girls about this and Cheerilee went to tell the citizens of Ponyville about this and tell them about what diamond tiara have done.
This is my last idea, if you don't like it, then I understand. I don't want to ruin your story
Wow, I just can't wait for more! Please keep writing!
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Well, I'm pretty sure if getting their Cutie Marks meant making everypony feel horrible and writing nasty things about them, they never would've done it for that specific reason. Other than the fact that they were being blackmailed
Their dead roll credits
Great job on the chapter.
glad I was able to help I look forward to seeing the next one. 
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That was actually the original motive, as time went on, it went from them wanting their marks to writing stories because ponies hypocritically asked for them and being that DT blackmailed them into continuing.
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but it’s not over yet...
Very funny...
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. Still, it's not like they wanted to get Cutie Marks in hurting other ponies feelings right
? Cause I really don't see the CMC actually wanting to hurt other ponies
.
Oh yeah...right
Could I say something?
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Is something wrong?
Okay. I think Granny's line about their parents went below the belt. And how exactly did Applejack know that they were gone? Did she leave a note? She could still be at the clubhouse or visiting with her other two friends somewhere. I don't think Applejack needed to panic until after they at least check with the others.
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My idea is that they hadn’t seen Apple Bloom since the scolding that afternoon but thought Apple Bloom came back home later before dark and was still up in her room sulking and “learning the error of her ways.”
Finally, leave it to Granny Smith to be the voice of reason.
Just one minor gripe. I think AJ's scream and hyperventilating came a bit too early to be a convincing reaction. Perhaps have the scene play out like this:
After noticing Apple Bloom's room was empty, she would begin to worry yes, but then think that she's in the clubhouse with the other two. After turning up nothing there and after scouring the entire farm, that's when I think the aforementioned reaction is more warranted.
Still a great chapter regardless.
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I’ll make a note of that for when I start work on the next chapter...
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Always happy to help.
What this story really needs? Something like the speech Marge gave to the town in ‘Boys of Bummer’ after they nearly caused her to lose her son. Because let’s face it, the whole town should be ashamed for wanting more at first and then turning against three little fillies when they did something they didn’t like.
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One of my favorite episodes of the Simpsons because of that scene alone where Marge defends her son and I actually was considering having a scene like that play out in a later chapter. Glad we’re on the same page!
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Though, it should be noted that the Mane 5 should be called out as well. Twilight for acting immature and putting up that force field instead of hearing them out. Rarity for encouraging the gossip and her earlier dismissal that somepony could get their feelings hurt. And Rainbow for being an hypocrite.
And of course, all three sisters for rejecting their sisters to the point they ran away, believing that they hated them and didn’t want them around anymore.
(I know Rarity’s reaction was to take Sweetie aside and talk. But she was the one to squeal on who Gabby Gums was, And was no where when her sister was being rejected by the towns ponies. She may have not meant to, but she pretty much threw her sister to the wolves.)
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Nope, I was just going to ask you upon returning back to focus on the CMC's, so other than Celestia who else do you think should find out about what's happened in Ponyville? Should any of these characters find out?
Twilight's Parents
Shinning Armor
Princess Cadance
Hoity Toity
Fancy Pants
Sapphire Shores
Photo Finish
The Wonderbotls
I just found this I been hoping more like this story would be made and posted thanks for making this part of the story.
Any guesses on when chapter 2 will be out?
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=EGLSk3AVcUU
listen to this song think this would fit well with your story my friend .
Here's a song that an adult male OC pony character could sing to the cutie mark crusaders whom takes care of them helps them thought there depression and listens to them and helps them understand that while there choice to print the bad stories in the papers was wrong it was wrong for the towns people to blame the crusaders when they wanted those stories printed and in a ways use his song to show he is willing to listen and hear their side of the story and is able to teach the cutie mark crusaders a new lesson one that helps overcome the weight of the world and hate push onto to them that even if the cutie mare crusaders don't go back to there home and families (which be the right thing to do) they can find there destiny's beyond there home and earn there cutie marks elsewhere.
I made this up and got the idea of this from the song "Don't Give Up by Josh Groban" and I came up of the idea of a character who is a singer himself and after he finds them by chance he helps the cutie mark crusader with his song and though there depression and hurt so if you need an idea I think this might help cause to me the song would fit this story well as the cutie mark crusaders want to be heard but no one listens accept a male stranger OC pony singer who is willing to hear what really happen.
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I’m already planning out how chapter 2 will be, but it’s proving to be harder than I thought...
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I do plan to have an OC show up later, but I’m going to be using a different song, and the character might not be what you expect...
Please continue don't let this story die
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for me I would remove the pregnant subplot but everything else would work
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Don’t worry, I’m currently working on chapter 2 at this moment...
It is stories like these that satisfy my somehow hate in certain episodes, thank you for making this
It's not done goofed, it's done OOFED. Okay, roblox memes aside it's a good story. Very good, very good komrade.
Also Rainbow Dash one wasn’t that bad! Rainbow it is known that you are friends with Rarity! It kinda well known she a local at the spa