Follow the adventure Dusk shine in it is parody alternative of the manga Unexplected love life of Dusk Shine.In his versions Dusk and his sister go to ponyville to make friends but in his new city with his shape shifting adopting sister,with the animals who hates him and the mares who fall in love him.It life going become unexpected...of comedies
Oh my
That grammar
UnexplectUnexpectedYour grammar is in serious need of an editor.
English is not your first language.
The story idea sounds nice, but the grammar sounds painful
I do hope you're aware you're copying someone else's published work here but with a changeling instead of dragon. meme-asaurus wrote TULLODS first, after which the manga was made.
I lmao so hard I fell off my chair, also you have my attention with your story.
Rarity... What the hell?
I'm positive that after all that experience, Dusk would choose a sick day over the girls, any day!
You repeated this paragraph twice. Anyways excellent job on this chapter! 2 chapters in 1 day, you're putting in work, my good friend.
Sooo.... A wendigo is gonna be living with them & more importantly inside Dusk's sister? ... This may backfire later on...
Inside the earring
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Frost she inside the earring
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But she does take over from time to time.
I found great enjoyment out of this, Trixie as a new love interest & the girls were jealous was hilarious! XD
Welp, that sleepover ended well
English is not your first language.
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not really but most of the written ones translate their history into French to English.And I do the same thing
An Oc Zebra falling in love with Dusk, ohhh boy this is getting good!
That boy getting an ass whooping from the animals is gonna take its toll on him one day!
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Yeah animal of ponyville very hate him
Oh great, Moony has another demon inside her head, not good for poor Dusk... But at least the wedding was great
Wait, so while Dusk was getting his ass kicked by the jagar, did Moony just get another spirit!?
First animals beat up Duskb now jealous stallions are beating him up
A brand new love rival for the girls & some new spirits for Moony! Business is picking up!
Not bad but you called Rarity "him" a few times just as the D.Dogs appeared.
Nothing too different from the original episode, but still a good read.
You should fix the synopsis. It's one big run-on sentence.
What's up with the "Who"?
Does this have any love or are they just trying to get his attention to see who he'll pick?
Is this a joke chapter?
Panic, chaos, & discord! Another day of the girls trying to romance Dusk.
That Link & Zelda was hilarious!
From the animals to the other stallions, Dusk always gets the smackdown!
I really wish Dusk would fight back a little bit .
If Chrysalis' daughter is who I think it is, its gonna be the shocker of the year!
How long till the next chapter because I want to see a Eclipse vs Chrysalis fight happen.
Great chapter and a plus for Moony beating up everyone in this chapter. Dusk is going to turn everything upside down to look for his sister. and will Moony meet up with Thorax later on?
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In future chapter yes, Moony will meet Thorax.
Damn your cliffhangers, you bastard!
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the cliffhangers is too shocking? Because I had imagined it for a long time when I imagined the chapters of Canterlot's wedding
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This one was shocking & sad!
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how long till the next chapter?
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The chapter Canterlot Wedding Part 3 coming in this week or the other
But First i need to working in the next chapter poke-school,Pofessor fluttetshy and a new fiction crossover
Thank God for that main character plot armor that saved Moony
Glad that she was saved in time by her boyfriend.
and just the salmon of nightmares, he has now introduced himself to dusk
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and just the salmon of nightmares, he has now introduced himself to dusk
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Ah I see
Soooo... Moony has Changeling bodyguards & 2 new spirits.... Just another day in Ponyville.