Set before the events of the Friendship Games, Twilight’s absence makes Sunset Shimmer wonder if she still has a place in her friend’s heart. After a tormenting series of events she will have to make a big decision: have faith in Princess Twilight’s friendship and enjoy her other friends cheerful mood or travel through the portal once again to make sure everything is Ok in Equestria.
PS: This is my firs story and I would like it to be very heartwarming ,so sugestions of any kind are welcome; if you like it ,please consider supporting me on my personal blog as well : sunsetsjournal.wordpress.com
A very special thank you to my friend Twily Bronie for helping me with the editing and making this story great.
Chapters (13)
So far, I have found some spelling mistakes, I can guess though, such as "Sunset did not now exactly what" in line 5, and there are so many others.
Keep going, I like that kinda story. Not pretty good enough, but kinda interesting. Warmth is always right. xd
And darn, I love your art works, I mean the cover painting~ Sunset is so cool, is she?
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Hi,
So glad to hear you like my story, terribly sorry about those spelling mistake, but the truth is that I was so caught up in writing that I actually did not take care of reading the whole thing at the end.
Anyway I had some time and went back through all my previous chapters and now they should be much better.
I know the content of the story might not sound so exciting and thrilling so far and for that I apologize , but the thing is I wanted to analize Sunset's phsicy at first and then go on with the general storyline which should be happening right after chapter 4.
If you would like to keep following me, I will let you know there will be regular updates every Sunday, so this weekend chapter for is oing to be published.
PS: Sunset is super cool, I am so happy you appreciate the effort I put into artwork ,as well. Can't wait to see her in the new movie, even though I must say I am a bit worried abou her meeting Celestia again, as she might still be upset wiyh Sunset.
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haha i know right~ xd i write things too so i have exactly the same feeling that there are always wrong spellings~ keep going, i do like that style, pretty exquisite about inside feelings and the world within her
and yea, sunset will be back to equestria in the next movie, tho there are only about 40min according to the trailer, i mean, that will be the first time she go back there, i am exciting~ ;p
I knew it! xd
i learnt a new word today xd
Thank Pinkie Pie!
By the way, I'm glad you're still following me, truth to be told, I got a little worried since I stopped receiving comments from you for a while...
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Oh I'm sorry for that, and glad to hear that~ ^^ I mean I don't even know you were expecting me~ I haven't logged in for a while, cuz I think I can collect some more chapters and read em for once~ heh~
I gotta say, I like this narration style, that doesn't mean it is perfect, but your story is good, not good enough (there will never be), but good. And I see your work is getting better and better. That matters, doesn't it ?
Keep on it, I'll be a faithful follower~ (tho I'm not even sure if I have a faith XD)
Shouldn't that be "somepony"?
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Well the story is set in the mirror world so it only makes sense to say: "Somebody" instead of: "Somepony". Twilight herself shows us that the language style changes in the EG world in the first movie
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i fotgot that XD
"still NO news" or "still NOW news"?
btw keep goin', you knew I'm always looking forward it~ ^^
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bad mistake, I'll fix right up
Shopping for whole day... well, that's very Rarity lol~ And the haircut, it reminds me of when Rare and Twi met for the first time, which is in S01E01, that's definitly a Rare style~ heh
Seems I got the right inspiration, then! I am to making a huge effort to show the characters for who they actually are, but it's hard not to make them do what you would like them to, when you know it wouldn't be like them. Any way suggestions are always welcome: be sure to keep letting me know your opinion.
All the best!
thanks for a great adventure and one heck of a great ending. well done!
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well, surprising your readers is part of the fun, I guess!
Isn't that "worst of all"?
and,
I think that's a "read"
no spaces in "a tall kempas"
isn't that "no more"?
"waist time"
"took and deep breath" or "took a deep breath"?
"herintrepid"
"a mate OH his"
the fair light could already BEE seen
"worse of all" or "worst of all"
Wow, I was wondering is there will be a new story series or something, lol
Well, this is a good ending, seems reasonable~ xd
beautifully done this chapter really tugged at the heart.so good to see sunset opening up more.after all friendship is one of the best kinds of medicine to have around.
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Well...thank you! It's so good to hear such a sweet compliment and know you appreciate my work: seems like I am getting closer and closer to my final goal.
Keep following and be sure to leave suggestions for the incoming chapters!
this story is so beautifully written and told.it breaks ones heart to see how this is affecting sunset,she has suffered so much.well done to you.
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I wouldn't have written it so well without followers like you to support me: thank you so much for everything you said; it really pays off my work.
kept on thinking the GIRL?
the girl again. besides i can totally understand what this sentence mean, but i'm not sure if putting the subject after object is a good idea...
hmm... i think maybe you mean "they always manage to cheer me up"...
I like this chapter the most than the few ones before, as if it can touch the soul... sometimes i may have too many questions and that may annoy you, i'm sorry for that, but i hope those can show you how i read your word carefully and how i like your work... and sometimes i don't read at the frist time when a new chapter come out, but you know i'm tracking, right? so don't worry, i'll be a supporter always. i enjoy your work, thanks for all of this.
that was one fantastic story. thank you so much for such a great read.looking forward to future stories from you.
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thanks a lot again, but as I said in the notes the story is not finished yet, there'll be another chapter, coming on Sunsay, so I hope you'll forward to it as excited.
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been terrible to you
lovely story and admirable friendship always... thank you for letting us enjoy...
I dunno why luna said like that, maybe i'm misunderstanding, but when luna said, come to my office if you wanna talk to someone, it feels like luna is blaming sunset...
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Everything fixed
this ending is the one i like most.because it really shows how much twilight and sunset care for each other.i know a lot of readers like sci-twi and sunset but for me princess twilight and sunset equal best couple. once again thank you for this great story.
i like the most, too. *sigh* i always have the same feelings, somepony used to close to you fades from your life. and... anyway, it's so real and i like it. thank you.
Great! Seems I did the right thing writing this extra chapter, then! Thank you a lot for reading and get ready for our newest story.
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Have to agree with you, actually, I've always been feeling Twilight had to get her space back in her relationship with Sunset, but I suppose they wanted to make the EG an series indipendent from the pony world, when they Sci-Twi to the main six