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Jaycren


I have heard there are troubles of more than one kind. Some from ahead and some from behind.But I've bought a big bat, I'm all ready you see. Now my troubles will have troubles with me. - Dr. Seus

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Initially thought this was about the Doctor or Doctor Whooves. But this seems just as interesting. Looking forward to see how you expand your universe!

In major need of edits and storytelling that isn't 99% exposition.

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Yes yes it does. This was something I saw in my head one night then this morning when I woke up with it again needed to have others hear it. Agreed alot of exposition but also wrote this quickly. I wiil provably restructure this a bit. And edit it more later. Thank you for the criticism I do appreciate it. I honestly prefer blunt crticism over others so thank you.

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Cool thank you for the interest and I hope I can decide what to do with this

Who else thought this was a doctor who story

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At least one other person. I changed the quote to something more original. It dodn’t click until now, sorry but I do hope you enjoyed the story. So going to edit this.

Their is no worse villain then the one of your own making. For they will not rest untill they make you suffer and they hold no restrictions on what they will do. The only way to stop them is to be the villain your self and kill them and every time you see them every time you face them and that moment either you or they fall you will remember. That It Was All Your Fault

I am honestly a little disappointed the first chapter in a long time is a clop chapter. Dude you really should have done a proper chapter first its just a disappointment for your readers

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First chapter was a complete re-edit of the first. Almost rewrote the entire thing. Then came this. Next will come chapter 3. Story will be told in order. Each chapter rewritten and additional ones added, in order

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Alright to any still interested in this story. I am going to be updating, editing and rewriting this until completion. I will try to put out a new chapter of this at least once a week until done. I had a rather big readjustment in my life and decided to see it as a sign. So I have been going back to all of my old stories, both here and on other sites and finishing them. I am doing this in order of when they where published. A recent comment conversation with Umbra Animo made it clear that not many of my followers where connected to this tale. So not many would know of what I had been up to. So, yeah this is now the only story I will be working on until I can hit that complete button. Hopefully this made things a little more clear. Yes I know my first new chapter in while was clop, but I also had just almost rewrote the first chapter, which Animo I am sorry if I was a little pissy in my reply, but I had been up for several hours. Chapter 3 is edited and I am working on the new Chapter 4 which will be called Memories of the Sun.

Decent chapter tho you said stay put of ponyville when i betting you ment to say stay out of ponyville

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Just fixed it. Thing are going to start ramping up.

Why does this story have so many dislikes? I mean, it can't be that bad, right? ...Right?

Nova, I am the first to admit this story is awful. It started with a Mary sue and has not gotten much better. Past a certain point I just decided to run with it. I am now just having fun writing it so that I can move towards the catharsis of the ending. I will then move on to other stories I honestly enjoy writing more.

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Hey, at least you're writing for you, and you're having fun doing it, which are the most important things.

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Yeah this story has become more a chore. But it is finished. For more information see the author's note.

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