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Chapters 4 through 8 edited by Ultimateruin009

Cancelled until I get a new editor

Influenced by a marathon of every single dubbed yugioh gx, yugioh 5ds and yugioh zexal episode all summer:

Draw Blank is a Pony who hasn't had the best of luck with money since his talent is play filly's card games. Doesn't help his chances with a Mare either.

But his luck changes up when he finds out the prize for the grand tournament in Ponyville's hosted by Trixie is a day with Princess Luna, which if nothing else will get him noticed by other mares and jump start a craze that could make this into a decent job.

But when somepony starts taking things way too seriously Draw will need the help of Applejack to win back what he lost and save Ponyville.

Stupid plot around a children's card game ensues starring Applejack, Twilight and Trixie.

Note: I'm going to try to keep it mostly to actual cards, but this is a story based on a show that pulled cards out of nowhere with no logical way for it to work as a real deck so....

As usual image I found on google

Also, yes the way the chapters are named is a reference to Howl's Moving Castle.

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I'm interested, i truly am, seeing as how i am a fan of the game myself, i wish to see how this expands, so do hurry with the next chapter please?

BTW, you misspelled "flier" which is poster advertisement.

I'm glad you decided to stick with TCG/OCG cards for this series. Too many series use nothing but made up cards and it just makes everything confusing as all hell. Anyways, the grammar is good, the writing for the dueling is quite legible for being in dialogue format, and I like seeing you using original characters instead pure canon characters. I'm behind you on this story 100%! Yu-Gi-Oh! fan for life!

955082 This isn't the kind of stuff that should be rushed. I have my own Yu-Gi-Oh! fanfic(s) on this site and even with the love and care I put into writing them, I'm still prone to making mistakes, whether it be errors in grammar or miscalculations or illegal maneuvers in the duels. MasteroFlag, write at the pace you wish. I'd rather have slow, exceptional writing than quick sloppy messes.

955156 i didn't mean as in to make it sloppy, its just my general eagerness to read the rest of the story, and i think i might check yours out to see how it is...

955200 Just be careful. I've had a lot of people dislike my story for no discernable reason (as the comments section can prove). All I ask is that you view it with an open mind. If you don't like it, please don't hesitate to tell me why you don't like it. There's no worse feeling for me than seeing someone dislike a story of mine without giving a reason why.

955219 im open minded to every thing, so tno worries, and ill also be sure to tell you if something is needed to be changed

Nice set up I can't wait to see where this goes. :yay:

Also I wonder just WHO is going to be in this tournament besides the mane six and Trixie. :trixieshiftright:

You didn't watch the original, but you watched the spin offs? :ajbemused:

955408 It's cause I've seen the original so much along with LK's abridged series and my manga collection so much that when I decided to sit to watch that I skipped all filler and anything LK covered already. Meaning aside from the Battle City Finals I had little to watch in general so I didn't count that in this.

Plus I did say it was all summer long. we still have 2 months, and I still have 2 more spin offs since I'm still at Yubel and plan to finish after instead of looking up the subbed season 4 since I only plan to watch Zexel subbed.::twilightblush:

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I think mine after the next chapter will take longer than usual since this is my 5th story and all of them are still ongoing.

955586 why? is Hulu not available where you are cause I'm using that so it can auto play all day.

955979 No, it's just that Hulu doesn't have the Japanese episodes, which are the ones I primarily watch.

Generally well-written and made sense...and yes good choice to use "Real" cards and not ones you made up.

It does lead to a question though. Will your children's-card-game-playing hero stick to the same basic deck the whole time, or will he switch between different ones depending on his/your mood or whatever makes a good story?

I ask because one of the traits of Yu-Gi-Oh the anime is how much you could tell about the hero based on the cards they played. As an example--from GX just so I know we're on the same page--Jaden's Elemental Heros weren't always the best choice in any situation (and IRL the cards tended to SUCK) but story-wise they told you everything you needed to know about him. Jaden saw himself as a hero, a plain vanilla power rangers sort of hero who through a combination of his friends and various gadgets could eventually defeat every obstacle. His friend (whose name escapes me) with the "-roid" cards saw himself as goofy and generally inferior to his no-nonsense brother, but they both used Machines and so the family connection was still there.

Therefore. Is your protagonist the sort to always use big stompy dinosaurs to beat little kids (albeit ones that at least sort of know what they're doing) and take their lunch money? And if not, what sort of deck does describe him?

955998 He's yet to use his real deck since his personal one is very different, but since here he is forced to survive I figured the Dino deck would work here.

I mention his has other decks and other card games for a reason. the Tournament will have Yugioh cards but expect a little surprise when he gets into his 2nd or 3rd game after arriving in Ponyville. Albeit a guessable one now that I've said it. I just didn't want to start him off with his real deck since I think the warrior deck thing is a tad played out with Yusei and Jaden sporting it and Yuma seems to have a warrior as his main card.

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Ah, sorry, I thought you just skipped the original. :pinkiesmile: As for you fic...

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Hm, this has peaked my interest for sure. I hate Yu-Gi-Oh, but I used to watch my brother play it, so I remember how big it was (and of course how, in the show, they took ten minutes just to chose a card). This is a really cool idea, and Luna is best princess anyway, so I'm looking forward to seeing where this goes! :moustache:

Interesting, I'll have to keep an eye on it.

This is relevant to my interest, keep up the good work.

I'm still liking the story, but is there any chance the duels could run longer?

967034 I only made this one short since it isn't serious. All the duels in the tournament will be long.

Well Trixies may still be short. But good timing as aside from pinkish pie none of the main 6 have a deck yet so throw out ideas

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Twilight Sparkle: Spellcaster-type Deck
Rainbow Dash: Tech Genus (for accel synchro summons (remember the anime :raritywink:)), Gusto, or maybe even the new Chronomaly archetype (as inspired by her idol Daring Do)
Applejack: Any Warrior/Beast-Warrior archetype (Heroic, X-Saber, Gladiator Beast, Six Samurai)
Fluttershy: Naturias or a Beast-type deck
Rarity: Gem-Knights or Crystal Beasts

I hope this helps.

Does no-one remember the original Yu-Gi-Oh series? :ajsleepy: I always thought that the series that started it all was the best! Dark Magician was such a badass...

967281 if you didn't notice his teaching deck is Yugi's old deck in a sense. I'm considering giving Twilight or Sparkler Yugi's deck just because since I have to include some sychros and xyz monsters having half the town with starting cards allows for first series cards to actually make sense.

I went and dug up "Chaos Greed" on the TCG wiki and it looks like this...

http://yugioh.wikia.com/wiki/Chaos_Greed

That's a fairly narrow focus card...but one that has ties to the "Different Dimension" theme. Which might sorta kinda explain why it suddenly appeared, or speak to the deck our hero uses in tournament play. Either way you KNOW it's going to show up again.

Good call, can't wait for more.

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Now before it gets too far. I should ask if I should even go through with the love interest angle in this story. Considering the nature of this stuff I don't think it is needed but then I have to leave him rich and content with friends since this character has no family. and before your confused it isn't applejack, that is just a plot point. AJ only cameo here on out in this story.

Another good chapter, and fairly timely too.

Sadly, my readers don't have such luck, due to me being a terrible writer.

968280 oh just wait. I'm just on vacation this is going to take forever starting next week.

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Tough call man,
On one hand a good romance is a notoriously tricky thing to write, and both your sources espouse the virtues of friendship over ones of love. Therefore him earning some friendships would indeed be “enough” by the standards of both settings.

But on the other if you think you can pull off a full blown romance while simultaneously keeping the awesome duel action going I’m all for it. The trick is making it worth talking about. I still don’t quite understand Draw Blank as a character and instead see him as just a catalyst for dueling. I think he needs to be a bit more defined as a character before you give him a girlfriend.

Try writing a chapter where no dueling happens. Let him meet a few ponies, make enemies, make a few friends, spot his future girlfriend out of the corner of his eye and promptly run into a lamppost…that sort of thing. Also give him a reason to enter the tournament other than “I’m poor and want money”…even if it’s just “I’ll show HIM a thing or two”

Also…
Rainbow Dash uses a blunt, punch you in the face until you stop twitching sort of deck. I’m thinking some sort of Monarch variant, but I’m not sure which one.

Applejack uses a normal monster deck…and all the nasty control cards that surround it. Combine with those double summon monsters for extra fun.

Rarity is Crystal Beasts…until it stops working and she drops the one “Sacred Beast” to clean house.

Fluttershy uses Zombies...don’t ask questions, she just does.

967281 (Falls back into a time where twin blue eyes meant destruction to most of the other kids on the play ground...:raritystarry:) It's nice to know that I'm not the only one who recalls the orginals, hell I can still hold my own with the old cards... Hopefully :twilightsheepish:

I am liking where this is going and Applejack only making a cameo appearance from now on is okay in my book, you could still give her something of arole and tease us with a relatinoship between her and our hero but like with Yuesi and Aki(Akiza in the English Dub) it doesn't take off. :applejackunsure:

As for deck types:

I don't know if Twilight should have all of Yugi's deck but I think a Spellcaster and Fiend based deck would be good for her and some of the cards she would have from Yugi's deck would be Dark Magician, Dark Magician Girl, Magician of Black Chaos, and Summoned Skull alongside some of the best Spells and Traps like Mirror Force and Swords of Revealing Light. :twilightsmile:

Pinkie Pie could have a somewhat random deck with multiple strategies which she uses to keep her opponents guessing, maybe even give her some Synchros and XYZs or perhaps some Toons and make her have Toon World. :pinkiesmile:

Applejack should have a Beast or Beast Warrior type deck which gives off the impression of an improved starter deck and maybe a few Warriors. :ajsmug:

Rainbow Dash I could picture having an Elemental Hero type deck or maybe a raw power type deck consisting of lots of powerful monsters and only a few Spell and Trap cards to back them up. :rainbowdetermined2:

Rarity deserves a Crystal Beast deck or maybe an Amazoness deck or even a Harpie Lady deck. :raritywink:

Fluttershy should have a Plant type deck and cards that let her play defensively but her strongest card would be Black Rose Dragon which she pulls out only as a last ditch resort. :yay:

Trixie's deck should be based off of Seto Kaiba's with a little bit of variety although she should still have at least one Blue-Eyes White Dragon. :trixieshiftleft:

Sweetie Belle should have a Fairy Type deck with plenty of Equip Spells and a few minor Traps. :unsuresweetie:

Scootaloo should have a deck similar to Rainbow Dash's but with some extra Winged Beasts, Spells, and Traps. :scootangel:

970914 dear god how did you guess Trixie and Scootaloo's?

but seriously Trixies deck will more be based on Tamas Esses' deck with slight changes to the magic and traps. Not much of a spoiler since she's literally dueling at the start of the next chapter anyway.

972010 I don't know I just made a lucky guess and considering that you wanted Twilight to use Yugi's deck it would only make sense for Twilight's rivla Trixie to use the rivial deck of Yugi's which is Seto Kaiba's. :trixieshiftleft:

968544 I lost a duel on the playground once. I lost one my Blue Eyes :(

Fun fact: couldn't find just a pic of the Dogs. So full card. Tell me if you guys prefer that or the pics as if you prefer the cards it is less work for me to look up the stats and retype them.

I like how, even after not really knowing the card from around the Elemental Hero set, you're still using cards I know XD

Nice job making use of the status quo for the Yu-Gi-Oh! series Card Games are serious business and how much Little Kurbioh likes to poke fun at that. :rainbowlaugh:

The swearing did seem unnesscary but for now it's acceptable, just don't start making excessive use of it. :ajbemused:

And lastly the starter packs now contain Mirror Force, well I guess that's why you can only have one of them in your deck. :duck:

984023 I swore somewhere? I'm sorry I didn't notice. I'll read back through to check but replay and tell me where all the same.

And yeah, I stopped yugioh back in the gx days, but decided to get the xyz starter and it came with Mirror force, and I found out it also came in 5ds decks too so yeah most of the really powerful cards that work in any kind of deck from days of old are common now.

984045 When the hero said "Crap!" or is that not swearing in your book? :unsuresweetie:

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I consider it replacement profanity. For example my other OC from a different story Cog said heck, which is a replacement for hell. But I didn't feel like punning off Hades like some writers do on this site.

Much like other words like Dingaling, Balloons, any form of idiot/moron, etc.

I could replace Crap with "oh no." or something but I don't think it is within such realms that an adult would say that instead, but he is also around kids all the time so he won't outright curse because of protective parents.

984744 Where do you look up your cards? I use the Yu-Gi-Oh! wikia, which is fantastic when searching for specific effects that you want to activate.

984777 I try to read it off the card on amazon first then use Wikia if I can't read it. guess that's how I missed it since the dog pics are from there and I didn't double check my card facts on it. I'll make sure to do that from now on.

Gah. I understand why you're letting them use banned cards, but it still bothers me.


Interesting idea, but I really hope you don't get into the habit of not completing a duel in the same chapter as you start it. That irritated me to no end when I still watched the show.

*clicks watch*

984946 Well the idea is that they are playing in traditional format in the first place which has no forbidden cards, but there is not such thing as semi-limited so those are 1 per deck as well. I was going to consider Advanced, but the plot requires one card in the forbidden list and it makes it so I don't have to look up if between chapters Giant Trunade suddenly came back to limited. And it helps dramatic situations, such as if I decide to yata lock someone how they get out of that with cards now.

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