I might as well be the only Anti-Brony here. Anyway, I also like Star Wars :P. P.S. Tari is best Duck Nerd
Sonata Dusk, suffering the consequences of her Siren Gem being destroyed, has found shards of the gem and built a weapon granting her even more power than before. Strange that the fate of the multiverse is now in the hands of a filthy pirate. (Transfered over from my DeviantArt Account)
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From what i gathered, Sonata is a Sith, Sunset is a Republic/Jedi(?) agent. When does the whole LOTR stuff come in?
Okay, soooo, u really need A, longer chapters, B actual conversation scenes, and C, use actual genre tags. Other than that it has potential.
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*facepalm* I forgot to change it to complete, didn't I?
Also, thanks for the constructive criticism :) Though I have one question: What actual genre tags did you expect me to use for this story?
8684107
Spoiler Alert: Aria visits Middle Earth
8684266
Sad to say, no. This takes place YEARS after "Return of the King"
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I'm planning on having him mentioned in the sequel.
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Glad you like the story :)
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Star wars, avengers, and dc.
Also, don't bop around with the first person. Chose one person. Or, just use third person. Also, real conversations. Not just writing that a charector said it, have them actually say it.
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I only had 3, and it was required that I have MLP in there anyways. Plus, I felt there was more Pirates of the Caribbean and Lord of the Rings than DC and Marvel.
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I didn't see that as much of a problem. Plus, I got the "multiple first person" trick from something I read growing up, so...yeah.
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Yet, you physically had Star Wars, DC and Marvel.
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I only had 3 genre tags.
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Yeah, still, why not physically write it in the description if you have more than three tags, or if a tag doesn't exist?
Also, put In Actual Conversations And exchanges.
If you do that, I see this could have a lot of potential, Mr. AntibronyBenSwolo.
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The tag thing actually makes sense,
Also, I'm not sure if I could make edits anytime soon, but I will make sure to put actual conversations in my stories (I took a creative writing class that gave me tips how, and this story was written before I took the classes)
Anyways, I thank you for the constructive criticism.
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Yeah, cool, and put it hiatus to edit it if you can, good luck.
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Sunset is a Republic Commando from the Clone Wars. And Batman was there too? I'm confused.
You said Pirates of the Caribbean. Where are they?
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Oh also. Senate Commandos have a large shield like left arm plate.
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Adagio's the long lost daughter of Jack Sparrow. And Flash Sentry meets up with an old villain of Jack's
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Barbossa? No he's good now. Jones? Maybe. Oh! Oh! The Shadow Lord?
They sang hoist the colors. Does that mean the summoning of the Breatren Court?
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I probably did not think of that.
Is Saruon back? Or Saruman?
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no
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Yeah I just read that part
I like that while Sonata is a Sith Lord she still is her old Taco loving for realises self.
What's the worst that could happen?Need a list?
If Adagio is the daughter of Sparrow shouldn't Sparrow be in this?
Where is Sparrow?
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I was saving him for the sequel :P
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Oh, a sequel!
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Yeah. Though I sadly lost interest in it. Due to my realizing that I was kinda bad at writing when it came to making this. But I learned from my mistake now :D