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Princess Celestia, in her infinite wisdom, sent Twilight Sparkle to Ponyville in order to learn about the Magic of Friendship; many years later, and after hundreds of adventures with the five amazing friends she made that day, she now stands watch over the last of them as they prepare for the end. Naturally, they refuse to go quietly into that good night.

After all, there's always time for one last spin around Equestria, right?

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So to sum up what's happening to Twilight, in pain bucking english (darn you Celestia and not just being more clear), Twilight's body is ageing normally. But when it hits the point where normal ponies die.

She'll ascend to her full alicorn goddess self? It's what I got from it.

Hillbe #3 · Jan 21st, 2018 · · 1 ·

:trollestia: and she did one last sonic rainboom?
:twilightblush: Yea, One last one:facehoof: what a mess she made...
:moustache: Gosh a sonic rainboom way out here.
:unsuresweetie: What a mess sure glad my sis didn't see that.
:scootangel: Like a Viking Pegasus funeral but all over
:applecry: She bought the farm didn't she
:trollestia: yep

*Sniff* I'm sorry let me get these onions out of here.
*Ahem* where was I? Oh yes. This story makes me cry!:fluttercry:

Fly free Dash, fly free..

That was sad, yes, but not in a bad way. That confession specially, it resonated deep. Kudos for evoking such emotions, have a well earned like.

I'm censoring myself here because I think this is rated E so here we go. Holy crap man good job you sunk the knife and twisted it in my heart this was so good it physically hurt. That is not me berating you or anything but an amazing feat I'm mean like 3 on over 4000 story's. Great job I'm going to finish crying.

Rewards
198 gil
350 xp
1 Phoenix down
1 Dead Arith (My bit of revenge on you)
Keep doing this my amigo.

JackRipper
Story Approver

I’ll reiterate my previous statement, you have the potential to be a great author on this site.

Don’t stop improving, for your sake and everyone else’s.

Naturally, the wall didn't answer. It knew well enough by now that it was better to stay quiet than to give Twilight Sparkle an answer that she didn't want to hear.

That was... unexpected. Amusing, nonetheless. :pinkiesmile:


The story itself was a tragic/sad kind of happy ending, if you know what I mean. You feel sad about how it progressed, yet at the same time, you feel joy in the fact that they were able to get their last wishes and passed on doing what they loved, what they wanted. An emotional ending to a good story. :pinkiesad2:

P.S. The pinkiesad2 emoticon (the one I just used) is a perfect depiction of what I'm trying to say.

I was listing to this song while reading the end, so many feels:raritycry:

Well, this is my home and you are the last pony alive that cares about me

...Scoots is dead?:applecry::scootangel:

At first, I was gonna point out that Twilight is an alicorn and that they're immortal, but then I remembered that theory about her not being a true alicorn since she wasn't born as one.

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8682042
In this story, I think what the author is trying to say is that Twilight is immortal, but her body is still aging normally as it reconfigures itself for immortality. So she'll get old until she stops getting old, then reverse-age until she's at her physical peak, and finally, she'll grow until eventually she's like Princess Celestia.

8683083
I do hope not, and that the author forgot about Scootaloo; although, that's probably a crime in and of itself.

This was a wonderful read. I look forward to your future works, Opala.

8683092
Although, in show-canon, only Flurrry Heart is a true born alicorn. Celestia and Luna ascended like Twilight did.

8683313
I think Hasbro left Celestia and Luna's more open than that. They only said Equestria, not the world. And we know Equestria does not cover the whole planet.

That was beautiful, I tell you. I haven’t read a story that’s made me sad in any sense since the My Little Dashie Series. Keep it up my friend.

8683320
True. Flurry Heary is the only known natural born alicorn. Even Celestia and Luna were surprised by her birth. Celestia even flat out says something along the lines of “Not even Luna and I were born alicorns.” So they did ascend.

8683313
Even though Faust said they were born as alicorns, I really wish they'd make some backstories explaining how the sisters came to be, who their parents were, etc.

8683406
Totally! At the same time, I could see any potential backstory being controversial with fans. As you said, Faust said they were born, then when Flurry was introduced, they retconned that by saying they ascended. It’d be really great to just get their backstory solidified.

Nicely done.:rainbowdetermined2:

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I don't know about you, but if they ever decide to make it to where Flurry gets older, I believe they need to make it to where she's a weaker version of an alicorn since only the mother was an alicorn and the father wasn't, surely it'd weaken the alicorn generics somehow? *shrug*

Congrats on the top spot of the Featured Box, well deserved!

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"Bought the farm doing one last Rainboom?"
"I thought I was the one getting "hard of hearing", Princess Celestia."
"No, she BLEW THE BARN."

https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=7jtQy3MmlGs

Do not go gentle into that good night,

Old age should burn and rave at close of day;

Rage, rage against the dying of the light.

Though wise men at their end know dark is right,

Because their words had forked no lightning they

Do not go gentle... into that good night.

A beautiful story that has no real finality in how it ends for the last mortal Element, a fantastic touch to a great story. And as I was reading, I thought of this poem by the great Dylan Thomas that embodies Rainbow perfectly here.

As always... onwards and upwards. :ajsleepy:

Nicely done. :P

Just... take my tears. That was wonderfully bittersweet.

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:unsuresweetie: Even the foals heard it...

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:trollestia: Spike I can understand, But Pinkie? Nope! Not going there.

THIS IS A WATERFALL OF EMOTIONS THAT I'M NOT PREPARED TO HANDLE

I love it.

I SWEAR IM NOT CRYING MY EYES ARE JUST SWEATY!

But holy crap I never cry when reading, but this? THIS JUST!

8683619
And the only reason she was so powerful as a foal was because her magic was still developing and unstable? *shrug* Then again, this is the genetics of talking, magical ponies, so I’m not entirely sure what goes and what doesn’t.

8684001
/salute

Amazing story! Thank you for wrighting this w en if I don’t normally enjoy being sad.
This was beautiful.

Thank you for this beautiful story.

:fluttercry: And then she lived happily ever after, the end :fluttershbad:

8681892

It's good to let your feelings out to play once in a while.

8681920

More or less an accurate summation, I feel.

8682042

Essentially, yes, that was what I had in mind.

8682171

All sorts of codas - including a sonic rainboom - flitted through my mind, but ultimately they all seemed rather gauche when compared to the simplicity of two friends flying until one of them can fly no more.

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I won't tell anyone if you won't.

8682541

She will fly until she can fly no more.

8682588

Thank you. I was trying to err on the side of not being overly mawkish when it came to the sadness.

8682712

Hm. I'm not sure I want a reputation as an author whose stories evoke feelings of being physically murdered. Then again, it could be worse: I could be boring.

8682918

Thank you, again, for your kind words. I will do my utmost to be worthy of the following I've accrued these past few days.

8682943

Even a sad tale needs a moment of levity.

The death of a loved one is profoundly sad occasion, but it should be tempered with the knowledge that they were alive; they lived a life, they were loved, and they will be remembered.

8683083

Rainbow Dash is being dramatic here, as Twilight was earlier in the story. Scootaloo is still alive and well, and likely with grandchildren of her own by now.

8683092

I came up with the notion of Twilight aging into her alicorn-hood - for want of a better word - as a way of allowing her to have her cake and eat it: she will grow up and grow old with her friends, but once her alicorn magic fully asserts itself she will take on a royal form similar to that of Celestia, Luna, Cadance, etc.

8683256

Thank you. Probably nothing I write in the future will ever evoke a reaction like this, but I will always do my utmost to entertain.

8683360

My word. Even to be mentioned in the same sentence as ...

8683520

Thank you.

8683747

I'm only there by the grace of the people who saw fit to take a chance on an unknown author.

8684001

Yes, that poem came to mind for Rainbow Dash, as well. She's not one to fade into the background, or to let a little thing like death stop her from being her naturally-exuberant self.

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Thank you.

8684108

I'm glad this story was worthy of those that were spilt.

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I appreciate that.

8684543

I'd like to believe that, because this story isn't truly sad - i.e. I didn't go out of my way to point out just how terrible and awful and no-good it is that Rainbow Dash is dying - the tears are more bittersweet for a life well-lived than regret for one that was wasted.

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Thank you for your kind comment.

8684965

She lived happily, joyfully, and colourfully.

Smiling to herself, Rainbow Dash replied, “Let's just keep going until we … until we reach our destination, yeah?”

This.

8685301
Don't sell yourself short. You have raw talent, and all it takes is a little refinement and perseverance to mold you into something truly special. You've earned my follow easily.

8685307
Precisely - especially since the author never actually wrote the moment of death, so this version of Rainbow Dash is now flying forever.

Being able to grow-up and grow old with her friends had been a source of comfort to all of them. They knew in her hearts that she was eternal, but at least she had been there alongside them on their journey – for better and for worse – every step of the way.

Think you meant "their hearts".

That little thing aside, this is an excellent piece. The descriptions of the environment especially, they were vivid and I could actually imagine the pictures your words created.

What can I say that hasn't already been said? Well done, and I look forward to seeing your writings in the future.

8683313

Remember, Equestria is younger than the Royal Sisters. That 'royal sister ascension' business is from comics or that journal, and not necessarily canon. Certainly not show-canon, which is the prime-canon consideration. Popularly followed by Word of Faust.

8686724
In the episode introducing Flurry Heart, the actual show, Celestia literally says she and Luna were not born as alicorns. So it is canon that they ascended regardless of what Faust said, Unfortunately.

Okay, I'll say it. The end got me. I'm a sucker for two kinds of deaths.

1. The One Who Stayed Behind, in the case of the character who has too much or not enough to lose, staying back to give the others time to do what they need - returning to find that not a single enemy had managed to follow them at the cost of the character's life.

2. Walk Into the Sunset, and collapse just past the horizon.

And here we've got a beautiful example of the second. She's just going to keep flying until she drops out of the sky, already gone. Free and light, with no regrets.

8686736

Friend. This is direct from the transcript:

Princess Celestia: The birth of an Alicorn is something Equestria has never seen!
Princess Luna: It is beyond even our understanding.

Neither said they ascended. Only Rarity mentioned that. The Sisters predate Equestria's founding. Ergo Equestria did not bear witness to their births/creation/what have you we don't actually know how they came about yet. This is one of the only times we get any insight on alicorns at all, ever.

Now, please. If we wish to continue this discussion, we'll need to take it to PMs so as not to foul up the comments on this beautiful story, which further discussion of this point will be off-topic for.

8685307

I can't imagine Rainbow Dash giving up, even at the end. Especially at the end.

8685527

Thank you. I've been told that I'm a little florid when it comes to descriptions. I'll probably tone that down in the future.

8686014

Don't despair. Rainbow Dash is still out there, flying.

8686247

I hope they garner even 1% as much of the reaction that this one got.

8686258

Glad it brought out the emotions in you.

8686740

It always struck me that Rainbow Dash would be fine with dying so long as she went out: a) screaming and kicking; or b) doing what she loves the most.

Your writing is to be applauded. I expected this story to end with a final rainboom and was surprised it didn't. I rarely get emotional during a read but your eloquence and flexibility with words had me invested toward the end. It defied my expectation, but I love it all the same. :pinkiesmile: :heart:

8686736
What she really said is that no Alicorn has ever been born in Equestria. It's still reasonable to infer that she and Luna pre-date Equestria as Alicorns.

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